Sharing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は質問に直接答えていますが、文法の誤りや意味の不明瞭さがあり、内容も具体的でなく、話の流れが不自然です。より明確で自然な表現を使い、例も具体的に説明しましょう。

예시: No, my parents did not encourage me to share much because they worried it might cause problems. For instance, when I was in high school, I borrowed some comics from a friend but forgot to return them, which upset him.

제안: 回答が不自然で文法的な誤りが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。話の流れを整理し、具体的な例を使いながら、自然な英語表現を心がけましょう。

예시: I usually share small items like pens or notes with my friends to help each other study. However, I hesitate to lend important or expensive things like cars or electronic devices.

제안: 内容は理解できますが、文法や語彙の誤りがあり、表現が不自然です。より正確な語彙を使い、理由を明確に述べることで、説得力のある回答にしましょう。

예시: Yes, I prefer not to share expensive items like cars or electronic devices such as laptops and tablets because it might cause problems in relationships if something goes wrong.

제안: 回答が非常に不自然で、言葉の繰り返しや詰まりが多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。簡潔で論理的な構成を意識し、具体的な理由を述べる練習をしましょう。

예시: Yes, I think more people will share cars for business purposes because it helps save money and allows people to travel more efficiently within the city. Therefore, car sharing is a very effective solution.

× No, my parents don't encourage me to share anything because it can be called the problem now.

✓ No, my parents didn't encourage me to share anything because it could cause problems now.

The sentence refers to a past situation ('when I was a high school student'), so the verb tense should be past tense ('didn't encourage' instead of 'don't encourage'). Also, 'can be called the problem now' is awkward; 'could cause problems now' is more natural.

× For example, when I was a high school student, my friends lent me some cartoons but I don't return it and he very.

✓ For example, when I was a high school student, my friends lent me some cartoons but I didn't return them and he was very upset.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. 'Don't return' should be 'didn't return' to match past tense. 'It' should be 'them' because 'cartoons' is plural (singular/plural issue). 'He very' is incomplete; it should be 'he was very upset' to complete the thought.

× I sometimes, uh, shed a pen or a note.

✓ I sometimes, uh, share a pen or a note.

The word 'shed' is incorrect here; the correct verb is 'share' when talking about giving something temporarily to someone else.

× Sorry that I can work much more smoothly, but in many cases I'm hesitate to lend my important or expensive items such as cars or the bus recorders.

✓ Sorry, that I can work much more smoothly, but in many cases I'm hesitant to lend my important or expensive items such as cars or bus recorders.

'I'm hesitate' is incorrect; the correct form is 'I'm hesitant' (adjective). Also, 'the bus recorders' should be 'bus recorders' without 'the' (article error).

× Yes, I am reluctant to share high costed items such as cars or the some electronic devices, for example laptops or the tablet because it can occur the problem about the relations.

✓ Yes, I am reluctant to share high-cost items such as cars or some electronic devices, for example laptops or tablets, because it can cause problems in relationships.

'High costed' is incorrect; the correct adjective is 'high-cost'. 'The some electronic devices' is incorrect; 'some electronic devices' is correct (article error). 'The tablet' should be 'tablets' (plural). 'It can occur the problem about the relations' is awkward; 'it can cause problems in relationships' is more natural.

× Uh, in a business purpose, uh, I say yes, umm, because, uh, sharing of the, because you can, uh, help, uh, people is, uh, save money or, and they can, uh, much more, uh, effectively move inside the city.

✓ Uh, for business purposes, uh, I would say yes, umm, because sharing can help people save money and move more effectively inside the city.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'In a business purpose' should be 'for business purposes'. 'Sharing of the' is incomplete. 'Help people is save money' is incorrect; it should be 'help people save money'. 'Much more effectively move' should be 'move more effectively'. The sentence needs restructuring for clarity.

× So I think that this is a very good effective way.

✓ So I think that this is a very good and effective way.

'Good effective' is incorrect adjective order and missing conjunction. It should be 'good and effective' to properly connect two adjectives.