Sharing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but try to avoid redundancy and keep it concise. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and limit your response to about 4-5 sentences for better effectiveness.

예시: Yes, my parents always encouraged me to share because they believe sharing builds kindness. For instance, they used to pack extra snacks for me to share with my classmates, which made me feel happy and connected with others.

제안: Your answer is relevant but could be improved by using more varied vocabulary and linking words to make it more natural. Also, avoid repeating similar ideas and try to add a little more detail.

예시: When I was at school, I often shared chocolates and my lunch with my best friend. Additionally, I used to carry extra candies to share with other classmates, which helped me build good friendships.

제안: Your answer is interesting but could be more natural by avoiding abstract ideas like 'energy' which may confuse the listener. Also, try to use simpler, clearer explanations and link your points logically.

예시: I prefer not to share my clothes because it might cause skin infections like itching or rashes. Also, clothes are personal items, so I feel more comfortable keeping them to myself.

제안: Your answer addresses the question but has some grammatical errors and unclear phrases (e.g., 'sharing cards' instead of 'cars'). Try to use correct vocabulary and sentence structures, and link your ideas clearly. Keep your answer concise and complete.

예시: Yes, I think more people will share cars in the future because it helps reduce pollution from carbon emissions. For example, in my family, we share one car to save money and lower expenses.

× In my country, people are sharing cards nowadays because it helps to reduce the pollution that are being caused by the carbon emission.

✓ In my country, people are sharing cars nowadays because it helps to reduce the pollution that is being caused by carbon emissions.

The word 'cards' is a typographical error and should be 'cars'. Also, 'pollution that are being caused' is incorrect because 'pollution' is singular, so the verb should be 'is being caused'. Additionally, 'carbon emission' should be plural 'carbon emissions' to refer to multiple emissions. These corrections improve subject-verb agreement and noun usage.

× Moreover, in family we always share a car and prefer to have a single car at a time so then we can reduce the cost and the expenditure that we.

✓ Moreover, in the family we always share a car and prefer to have a single car at a time so that we can reduce the cost and the expenditure.

The phrase 'in family' is incorrect; it should be 'in the family' to specify the family unit. The phrase 'so then we can reduce' is better expressed as 'so that we can reduce' to indicate purpose. The sentence ends abruptly with 'that we', which is incomplete and should be removed for clarity and correctness.