Sharing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答较长且有些冗余，句子结构不够自然，且存在语法错误。建议简化句子，直接回答问题，并注意时态和语法的正确使用。

예시: Yes, my parents taught me to share when I was a child because they believed it was important to develop good habits early on.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清，如“share the delicious”不完整。建议使用更准确的词汇，避免模糊表达，并用连接词使回答更连贯。

예시: I like to share my feelings and opinions with others. For example, when I get good grades, I enjoy sharing my happiness with my friends. I also like sharing delicious food with them.

제안: 回答内容较好，但句子结构稍显重复，且表达不够简洁。建议简化句子，避免重复，并用连接词增强逻辑性。

예시: I believe that bad emotions and personal information are not suitable for sharing. Personally, I prefer to hear happy and positive things after work to relax.

제안: 回答不完整且语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议练习完整表达，注意语法和句子结构，确保信息传达清楚。

예시: Recently, I shared with my friends that I will study for my postgraduate degree at the Australian National University. They said they might visit the country if they have time.

제안: 回答内容丰富，但句子结构复杂且有语法错误。建议简化句子，注意时态和连接词的使用，使表达更自然流畅。

예시: I would share good news with my best friend Lily. We have known each other since we were five years old and have stayed close even though we study at different universities.

제안: 回答不完整且语法混乱，表达不清。建议练习完整句子，注意语法和逻辑，使回答更连贯。

예시: I usually share news about events happening around me. For example, I told my friend that my idol will have a concert in my country, and I invited her to go with me on Friday evening.

× Of course, my parents taught me a lot of qualities when I was a child because they think some good habits should be cultivated when kids were so young.

✓ Of course, my parents taught me a lot of qualities when I was a child because they thought some good habits should be cultivated when kids were so young.

句子中前半部分使用了过去时态（taught），后半部分的动词think应与前文时态保持一致，改为过去时thought。时态不一致会导致表达混乱。建议保持时态一致。

× What's more, they always thought children are more easily to absorb new things.

✓ What's more, they always thought children are more likely to absorb new things.

短语“more easily to absorb”结构不正确，正确表达应为“more likely to absorb”，表示“更有可能吸收”。“easily”是副词，不能直接与“to”连用。

× I'd like to share various things like my feelings, my perspectives, and some subjects.

✓ I'd like to share various things like my feelings, my perspectives, and some subjects.

此句无明显语法错误，符合语法规范。

× Among all of these things, I like to share my feelings the best.

✓ Among all of these things, I like to share my feelings best.

“the best”用于最高级比较，通常用于形容词或副词的最高级形式。此处表达“最喜欢分享我的感受”，用“best”即可，去掉“the”更自然。

× When I get good grades or gain some rewards, I prefer sharing my happiness with my friends.

✓ When I get good grades or gain some rewards, I prefer to share my happiness with my friends.

动词prefer后面接动词时，通常用不定式to do而非动名词doing。此处应改为“prefer to share”。

× What's more, I'd like to share the delicious with my friends.

✓ What's more, I'd like to share delicious food with my friends.

“the delicious”缺少名词，形容词“delicious”需要修饰具体名词。应补充名词“food”使句子完整。

× I think there are many different kinds of things are unsuitable for sharing, such as bad emotions and personal information, and I think the bad emotions are the most unsuitable things to share with others.

✓ I think there are many different kinds of things that are unsuitable for sharing, such as bad emotions and personal information, and I think bad emotions are the most unsuitable things to share with others.

“things are unsuitable”缺少关系代词“that”引导定语从句，且“the bad emotions”中“the”多余，应去掉。句子结构更清晰。

× As for me, I really want to hear some happy and optimistic things after my daily work to relax.

✓ As for me, I really want to hear some happy and optimistic things after my daily work to relax.

此句语法正确，无需修改。

× My friends about that I will go to the Australian National University to finish my postgraduate subject.

✓ I told my friends that I will go to the Australian National University to finish my postgraduate studies.

原句结构混乱，缺少谓语动词，且“postgraduate subject”用词不当，应为“postgraduate studies”。建议调整句子结构，使表达完整。

× After hearing my schedule, my friend said that she will if she have time, she will go to go to that country to have a look and take a.

✓ After hearing my schedule, my friend said that if she has time, she will go to that country to have a look and take a trip.

原句中“she will if she have time”语序错误且“have”应为第三人称单数“has”。“go to go to”重复，应删除多余部分。句尾“take a.”不完整，补充为“take a trip”。

× I would share the good news with my best friend Lily, who I have met.

✓ I would share the good news with my best friend Lily, whom I have met.

关系代词“who”作宾语时应使用“whom”。此处“Lily”是宾语，故用“whom”。

× So when I was five years old, we experienced a lot from primary school to university.

✓ So when I was five years old, we have experienced a lot from primary school to university.

句子描述从过去到现在的经历，应用现在完成时“have experienced”更合适，表示经历的持续性。

× Although we don't study at the same university, we still connected with each other at least days a week, so I think she is the best.

✓ Although we don't study at the same university, we still connect with each other at least a few days a week, so I think she is the best.

“connected”应为现在时“connect”，与前半句时态一致。缺少数量词“a few”修饰“days”，使表达更准确。

× And something that happened around me to my friends, For instance, I told my friend that my idol will go to my country to.

✓ I share with my friends things that happen around me. For instance, I told my friend that my idol will come to my country.

原句结构混乱，缺少主语和谓语，且句尾不完整。重组句子，使表达清晰完整。

× A concert in Austin? Is she where they want to go to the concert with me on Friday evening?

✓ There is a concert in Austin. She wants to go to the concert with me on Friday evening.

原句为断句且语序错误，缺少主谓结构。调整为完整句子，表达清楚。