Sharing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，如“what I was charged”应为“what I had”。建议注意语法准确性，避免表达模糊。

예시: Yes, my parents taught me the importance of sharing what I had. They also encouraged me to share my toys and candies with my friends to build relationships and develop kindness.

제안: 回答较为自然，但“greens”用词不够具体，建议使用更常见的词汇，并增加连接词使句子更连贯。

예시: I usually share snacks like cookies or fruits with others because it helps us feel closer and enjoy our time together.

제안: 回答中语法和词汇错误较多，表达不清晰。建议理清思路，使用正确词汇，如“personal items”代替“personal teams”，并简洁表达观点。

예시: I think personal items like money and important documents are not suitable for sharing because they are valuable and private.

제안: 回答内容具体，但“daylight schedule”表达不准确，建议使用更自然的表达，并注意句子流畅。

예시: Yes, I often share useful tips with my friends who feel stressed. For example, I suggest they plan their daily schedules to manage time better and reduce pressure.

제안: 回答中“similar feelings and locations”表达不清晰，建议用更具体的描述，并注意句子简洁。

예시: I would like to share good news with my close friend Lily because we understand each other well and I feel comfortable sharing important things with her.

제안: 回答中语法错误和表达不清晰，如“have interesting in its news”应为“are interested in such news”。建议简化句子并注意语法。

예시: I usually share important or interesting news with my friends because they are interested in such news, which helps me stay connected with them.

× Yes, my parents told me the importance of sharing what I was charged, then also encouraged me to share my toys or candies with my friends to build the relationship and develop kindness.

✓ Yes, my parents told me the importance of sharing what I was charged with, then also encouraged me to share my toys or candies with my friends to build relationships and develop kindness.

句中缺少介词“with”，导致表达不完整；“the relationship”应为复数形式“relationships”，因为这里指的是一般的人际关系。

× I usually share my snacks like cookies or greens with others because it helps us feel closer and enjoy our time together.

✓ I usually share my snacks like cookies or vegetables with others because it helps us feel closer and enjoy our time together.

“greens”在此处用作蔬菜的口语表达，但正式语境下应使用“vegetables”更合适。

× I think personal teams like money are provides documents are not suitable for salary because they are expensive and valuable.

✓ I think personal items like money and important documents are not suitable for sharing because they are expensive and valuable.

“teams”应为“items”，表示物品；“provides documents”语法错误，应为“important documents”；“salary”用词错误，应为“sharing”。

× Yes, I often share useful tips with my friends who are nervous about stress in their lives. For example, I suggest that they plan daylight schedule to make their time better and reduce pressure.

✓ Yes, I often share useful tips with my friends who are nervous about stress in their lives. For example, I suggest that they plan a daily schedule to make their time better and reduce pressure.

“daylight schedule”应为“daily schedule”，表示“每日的计划”；缺少冠词“a”。

× I would like to share good news with my close friend Lily. We always understand each other very well and have similar feelings and locations, so I feel comfortable sharing important things with her.

✓ I would like to share good news with my close friend Lily. We always understand each other very well and have similar feelings and backgrounds, so I feel comfortable sharing important things with her.

“locations”用词不当，应为“backgrounds”表示背景或经历相似。

× I always share important news or interesting news with my friends because they always have interesting in its news and it led me very focused on them.

✓ I always share important or interesting news with my friends because they are always interested in the news, and it makes me very focused on them.

“have interesting in its news”应为“are interested in the news”；“led me very focused on them”应为“makes me very focused on them”，时态和表达不当。