Sharing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Jawaban Anda kurang terstruktur dan ada pengulangan kata yang tidak perlu. Cobalah untuk memberikan jawaban yang lebih jelas dan langsung ke inti, serta hindari pengulangan kata yang sama. Gunakan kalimat yang lebih singkat dan efektif.

예시: Yes, my parents taught me that sharing is important because it shows care. For example, I often share with poor people to help them, which reflects this value.

제안: Jawaban Anda sudah cukup jelas, namun gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami dan perbaiki tata bahasa. Gunakan kata penghubung untuk membuat jawaban lebih koheren dan tambahkan sedikit detail spesifik.

예시: I like to share money, especially with poor people, because they need it to support their daily lives. Additionally, I sometimes share food, which is very helpful for them.

제안: Jawaban Anda agak berbelit dan ada kesalahan tata bahasa. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan jelas, serta gunakan kata penghubung untuk menjelaskan alasan dengan lebih baik.

예시: I think clothes are not suitable for sharing because they may not fit the poor properly, and sometimes the clothes are not useful for them.

제안: Jawaban Anda mengulang ide yang sama dan kurang variasi kata. Cobalah untuk menghindari pengulangan dan gunakan kalimat yang lebih alami serta jelas.

예시: Yes, recently I have been sharing a portion of my salary with poor people because I believe that sharing shows care and support.

제안: Jawaban Anda sudah cukup baik, namun perbaiki tata bahasa dan gunakan kata penghubung yang tepat agar kalimat lebih lancar dan alami.

예시: I usually share good news first with my wife. Then, I tell my parents, and after that, I share it with other family members.

제안: Jawaban Anda kurang terstruktur dan ada kesalahan tata bahasa. Cobalah untuk membuat kalimat yang lebih sederhana dan jelas, serta gunakan kata penghubung untuk menghubungkan ide dengan baik.

예시: I share important news with my friends, like when I got married, when my wife gave birth to my son, and also when I achieve something significant.

× Actually, my parents told me that sharing means caring. So whenever I I I'm able to share something with the for example, to the poor people just share it. It's part of the caring.

✓ Actually, my parents told me that sharing means caring. So whenever I am able to share something, for example, with poor people, I just share it. It's part of caring.

The original sentence contains repetition ('I I I'm') and awkward phrasing ('with the for example, to the poor people just share it'). The correction removes repetition and restructures the sentence for clarity and grammatical correctness, especially in the use of present participle 'sharing' and the phrase 'part of caring'. Kalimat asli mengandung pengulangan ('I I I'm') dan frasa yang canggung ('with the for example, to the poor people just share it'). Koreksi menghilangkan pengulangan dan menyusun ulang kalimat agar jelas dan benar secara tata bahasa, terutama dalam penggunaan present participle 'sharing' dan frasa 'part of caring'.

× Especially money, because poor people obviously needs money to continue living their life.

✓ Especially money, because poor people obviously need money to continue living their lives.

The subject 'poor people' is plural, so the verb should be 'need' instead of 'needs'. Also, 'their life' should be plural 'their lives' to agree with the plural subject. Subjek 'poor people' adalah jamak, jadi kata kerja yang benar adalah 'need' bukan 'needs'. Selain itu, 'their life' harus jamak menjadi 'their lives' untuk sesuai dengan subjek jamak.

× And sometimes I also share food to the poor because it's quite useful for them.

✓ And sometimes I also share food with the poor because it's quite useful for them.

The verb 'share' is typically followed by the preposition 'with' when indicating the recipient. Using 'to' is incorrect in this context. Kata kerja 'share' biasanya diikuti oleh preposisi 'with' untuk menunjukkan penerima. Penggunaan 'to' tidak tepat dalam konteks ini.

× I would like to say clothes, because sharing clothes sometimes unuseful for the poor, because it sometimes doesn't suits them well, it doesn't the size of the clothes doesn't fit them and many more things.

✓ I would like to say clothes, because sharing clothes is sometimes unuseful for the poor, because it sometimes doesn't suit them well; the size of the clothes doesn't fit them and many other things.

The verb 'suits' should be 'suit' to agree with plural subject 'clothes'. Also, 'unuseful' is not standard English; 'not useful' or 'useless' is better, but here 'unuseful' is kept for minimal correction. The sentence structure is improved for clarity. Kata kerja 'suits' harus 'suit' untuk sesuai dengan subjek jamak 'clothes'. Selain itu, 'unuseful' bukan bahasa Inggris standar; 'not useful' atau 'useless' lebih tepat, tapi di sini 'unuseful' dipertahankan untuk koreksi minimal. Struktur kalimat diperbaiki agar lebih jelas.

× Do you have anything to share with others recently?

✓ Have you shared anything with others recently?

The question refers to a recent past action, so present perfect tense is appropriate instead of simple present 'do you have'. Pertanyaan merujuk pada tindakan masa lalu baru-baru ini, jadi tense present perfect lebih tepat daripada simple present 'do you have'.

× When it comes to good news, I always share it to my wife.

✓ When it comes to good news, I always share it with my wife.

The verb 'share' should be followed by the preposition 'with' to indicate the person receiving the news, not 'to'. Kata kerja 'share' harus diikuti oleh preposisi 'with' untuk menunjukkan orang yang menerima berita, bukan 'to'.

× Secondly, I'm going to share it with my parents and after that sharing it with my families.

✓ Secondly, I'm going to share it with my parents and after that share it with my family.

The phrase 'sharing it' should be parallel with 'I'm going to share it', so 'sharing' is corrected to 'share'. Also, 'families' should be singular 'family' when referring to one's own family. Frasa 'sharing it' harus paralel dengan 'I'm going to share it', jadi 'sharing' diperbaiki menjadi 'share'. Selain itu, 'families' harus tunggal 'family' saat merujuk pada keluarga sendiri.

× Uh, particularly when it comes to the big event of my life, such as when I'm have a marriage and when I, when my wife birth my son and also some kinds of achievements also.

✓ Uh, particularly when it comes to the big events of my life, such as when I got married, when my wife gave birth to my son, and also some kinds of achievements.

The phrase 'I'm have a marriage' is incorrect; it should be past tense 'I got married'. 'My wife birth my son' is incorrect; the correct past tense is 'my wife gave birth to my son'. Also, 'event' should be plural 'events' to match the list. Frasa 'I'm have a marriage' salah; harusnya past tense 'I got married'. 'My wife birth my son' salah; past tense yang benar adalah 'my wife gave birth to my son'. Selain itu, 'event' harus jamak 'events' untuk sesuai dengan daftar.