Sharing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答不完整且表达不流畅，建议回答时完整表达观点，避免重复和语法错误。可以先给出明确的主题句，然后用具体例子支持。

예시: Yes, my parents taught me the importance of sharing when I was a child. For example, they encouraged me to share my toys and snacks with my friends to build good relationships.

제안: 回答中有重复和语法错误，建议简洁表达并使用连词使句子更连贯，同时提供更具体的细节。

예시: I like to share delicious food with others. For instance, when my parents cook tasty dishes, I bring some to school to share with my friends because I enjoy seeing their happy reactions.

제안: 表达不清晰且语法混乱，建议先明确主题句，再用具体理由支持，避免重复和语法错误。

예시: In my opinion, personal and financial information is not suitable for sharing because it might cause problems or make me feel uncomfortable.

제안: 回答语法错误较多且表达不流畅，建议用简单句清晰表达事件和感受，避免重复。

예시: One week ago, I told my friend that I had successfully learned to swim. I was very happy, and my friends congratulated me, which made me feel supported.

제안: 回答中有语法和表达错误，建议先给出明确答案，再用具体原因支持，句子要简洁连贯。

예시: The first person I would like to share good news with is my parents because they always encourage me. I want to see their happy faces when I tell them about my achievements.

제안: 回答重复且不够连贯，建议用简洁句子表达观点，并用具体例子说明分享的内容。

예시: I like to share interesting stories with my friends because it makes us happy. We often exchange funny or exciting news as part of our daily routine.

× Definitely when I was young my parents always told me sharing with some sharing something is important.

✓ Definitely, when I was young, my parents always told me that sharing something is important.

这里'sharing with some sharing something'重复且不符合语法，应简化为'sharing something'。此外，句子缺少连接词'that'，使句子更完整。

× Definitely when I was young my parents always told me sharing with some sharing something is important.

✓ Definitely, when I was young, my parents always told me that sharing something is important.

动名词'sharing'用法正确，但前面多余的'sharing with some'应删除，避免重复。

× If my parents cooking some some tasty dishes, I will take it to school and share with my friend.

✓ If my parents cook some tasty dishes, I will take them to school and share with my friends.

'parents'是复数，谓语动词应用原形'cook'，条件句第一类用法。'some some'重复，应删除。'it'指代复数菜肴，应改为'them'。'friend'应为复数形式。

× I like to see my friend eating my my family's food, family foods, fish, happy face.

✓ I like to see my friends eating my family's food, fish, with happy faces.

'friend'应为复数形式。'family foods'重复且不自然，改为'singular food'。'happy face'应为复数'happy faces'，且加介词'with'。

× Uh to my opinion, I uh to my opinion is personal fantasy finance information, be it is uh provide if some if I share with someone may maybe put me in difficult or uncomfortable things S situation.

✓ In my opinion, personal financial information is private; if I share it with someone, it may put me in a difficult or uncomfortable situation.

固定搭配是'in my opinion'，不是'to my opinion'。'fantasy finance information'应为'financial information'。'be it is uh provide'语法混乱，应删去。'put me in difficult or uncomfortable things S situation'应为'put me in a difficult or uncomfortable situation'。

× One week ago I told my friend I am successfully to successfully learn swimming is very it.

✓ One week ago, I told my friend that I had successfully learned to swim.

时间状语'One week ago'表过去时，谓语动词应使用过去时'told'和'learned'。'I am successfully to successfully learn swimming is very it'语序和用词错误，改为'I had successfully learned to swim'。

× One week ago I told my friend I am successfully to successfully learn swimming is very it.

✓ One week ago, I told my friend that I had successfully learned to swim, which made me very happy.

'successfully'是副词，修饰动词'learn'，但句子结构混乱。'is very it'无意义，应改为'made me very happy'。

× It made me very happy so I told my friend and my friends are always also help. Also congratulations to me.

✓ It made me very happy, so I told my friend, and my friends always help me and congratulate me.

'my friends are always also help'语法错误，应为'my friends always help me'。'Also congratulations to me'应改为'and congratulate me'。

× From my perspective it's my parents because my parents always go always good, encourage me to do everything.

✓ From my perspective, it's my parents because they always do well and encourage me to do everything.

'my parents always go always good'语法错误，改为'they always do well'。代词'they'指代'parents'。

× So if I get away every somethings I for I'm I firstly to want I firstly want to tell them and see them happy face.

✓ So if I achieve something, I firstly want to tell them and see their happy faces.

'somethings'应为不可数名词'something'。'see them happy face'应为'see their happy faces'。句子结构混乱，简化表达。

× Uh, in my opinion, I most like to share some interesting things to my friend, uh, because we always, we, I want to make my friends happy and uh, we always to share, we always share some interesting stories each other.

✓ In my opinion, I like to share some interesting things with my friends because we always share interesting stories with each other.

'share ... to'错误，正确搭配是'share ... with'。'each other'前应有介词'with'。

× Uh, in my opinion, I most like to share some interesting things to my friend, uh, because we always, we, I want to make my friends happy and uh, we always to share, we always share some interesting stories each other.

✓ In my opinion, I most like to share some interesting things with my friends because we always share interesting stories with each other.

'friend'应为复数形式'friends'，保持一致。