Sharing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答时应避免语法错误和重复表达，句子结构应更清晰自然。可以用更准确的时态和连词使表达更流畅。

예시: Yes, my parents taught me to share when I was a child because they believed that sharing helps build good relationships, and people might help you when you are in trouble.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不清，建议简化句子结构，使用恰当的词汇，并且避免重复。

예시: It depends on how much I have. If I have only a few items, I might not want to share them, but if I have plenty, I am happy to share because it doesn't affect me much.

제안: 回答较为简单，建议增加连接词使句子更连贯，并且丰富细节说明原因。

예시: I think private items are not suitable for sharing because many people dislike others touching their personal belongings due to concerns about hygiene and cleanliness.

제안: 回答中语法错误较多，表达不清晰。建议使用完整句子，注意时态和单复数形式。

예시: Yes, quite often. My younger brother, who is now in high school, often comes home on weekends and borrows my pants and rollerblades.

제안: 回答中有重复和语法错误，建议简化句子，使用正确的词汇和时态，并且避免重复。

예시: I would probably share good news first with my friend who is also my roommate and college mate because we share the same interests and hobbies.

제안: 回答中表达不够清晰，存在重复和语法错误。建议使用更准确的词汇，避免重复，并且使句子更连贯。

예시: I share all kinds of news with her because she is very supportive and always encourages me with enthusiasm, especially about music.

× Yeah, they told me to share when I was a kid because they think when you share with the people and if you are in trouble, maybe they will help you.

✓ Yeah, they told me to share when I was a kid because they thought when you share with people, if you are in trouble, maybe they will help you.

这里时态不一致，前半句是过去时，后半句用现在时不合适，应改为过去时以保持时态一致。

× I think it's depend on how much I have because if I if I have a few items, maybe I don't want to share with each other, but when I have the mark, when I have the match I'd like to share because it's not matters to me if I share I always have some.

✓ I think it depends on how much I have because if I have a few items, maybe I don't want to share with others, but when I have a lot, I'd like to share because it doesn't matter to me if I share; I always have some.

动词depend应使用第三人称单数形式depends；短语“share with each other”用法不当，应改为“share with others”；'it's not matters'应为'it doesn't matter'。

× I think like the private items because some people, some people don't like each other to touch their private things.

✓ I think private items are not suitable for sharing because some people don't like others to touch their private things.

“like each other to touch”用法错误，应改为“don't like others to touch”，表达更准确。

× My younger brother now in the high school sold and the weekend he always come back home and borrow some, borrow my pants and rollers.

✓ My younger brother is now in high school, and on the weekend he always comes back home and borrows some, borrows my pants and rollers.

缺少be动词“is”；“sold”应为“in school”或“in high school”；“he always come”应为“he always comes”；“borrow”应为“borrows”，主谓一致。

× I think maybe it's my friend ** *** is one of my roommate and college and we have the we have the same interest and hobbits.

✓ I think maybe it's my friend ** ***, who is one of my roommates and college mates, and we have the same interests and hobbies.

“roommate and college”用法不当，应为“roommates and college mates”；缺少关系代词“who”；“hobbits”拼写错误，应为“hobbies”。

× So maybe when I when I got the new good news, I will talk to share with her at first.

✓ So maybe when I get good news, I will share it with her first.

“when I got”时态不对，应为一般现在时“when I get”；“talk to share with her”表达不自然，应简化为“share it with her”；“at first”应为“first”。

× No matter what kind of news maybe I will share with her or because she is a supportive person and and she always give me the interaction in music in enthusiasm enthusiasm.

✓ No matter what kind of news, I will share it with her because she is a supportive person and she always gives me encouragement and enthusiasm in music.

缺少逗号分隔；“share with her or because”结构混乱，应去掉“or”；“give me the interaction in music in enthusiasm”表达不清，应改为“gives me encouragement and enthusiasm in music”；“give”应为“gives”，主谓一致。