Sharing— Part 1 채점 보고서
대화
Part 1
시험관
Did your parents teach you to share when you were a child?
수험생
Yes, when I was a child, my parents always taught me to share my toys and snacks with my cousins and friends because it shows respect and helps build strong relationships. For example, whenever I had new toys, I would let my friends play with them, which made us closer. Moreover, sharing teaches us to be generous and caring towards others, which is very important in life.
시험관
What kind of things do you like to share with others?
수험생
I enjoy sharing different kinds of things with others, especially my snacks and notes, because it helps build good relationships and supports my friends in their studies. Sometimes I also like to share my thoughts and experiences, as well as ask for help from my teammates when I face challenges. Sharing in this way makes teamwork more effective and enjoyable.
시험관
What kind of things are not suitable for sharing?
수험생
I believe that personal items like mobile phones and sensitive information such as online banking Pins should never be shared with others because they contain confidential data that could be misused. For example, if someone else knows your pain, they might access your bank account without permission, which can lead to serious financial problems.
시험관
Do you have anything to share with others recently?
수험생
Recently, I shared my achievement with my brother because I completed an important project at work. The project was very successful and had a great impact on our team's performance. I felt proud and wanted to celebrate this milestone with him.
시험관
Who is the first person you would like to share good news with?
수험생
The first person I would like to share good news with my parents because they are very close to my heart and always support me. For example, whenever I achieve something important, they are the first to encourage and celebrate with me. Sharing good news with them makes me feel happy and motivated.
시험관
What kind of news do you share with your friends?
수험생
I usually share a variety of views with my friends. For instance, whenever I achieve something significant at work, I make sure to tell them because sharing such movements helps strengthen our relationship and friendship. This kind of gesture motivates us to support and encourage each other in our personal and professional lives.
평가
총점
Part 1
Did your parents teach you to share when you were a child?
점수: 85.0제안: आपके उत्तर में विचार स्पष्ट हैं, लेकिन आप कुछ वाक्य संरचना और शब्दावली में सुधार कर सकते हैं ताकि यह और अधिक प्राकृतिक और प्रभावी लगे। उदाहरण के लिए, कुछ वाक्यों को संक्षिप्त और सीधे बनाएं।
예시: Yes, my parents taught me to share toys and snacks with my cousins and friends because it shows respect and builds strong relationships. For instance, I often let my friends play with my new toys, which brought us closer. Sharing also helps develop generosity and care, which are important values.
What kind of things do you like to share with others?
점수: 88.0제안: आपका उत्तर अच्छा है, लेकिन आप कुछ लिंकिंग शब्दों का उपयोग करके इसे और अधिक प्रवाहपूर्ण बना सकते हैं। साथ ही, कुछ वाक्यों को थोड़ा संक्षिप्त करें ताकि उत्तर अधिक प्रभावी लगे।
예시: I like sharing snacks and notes because it strengthens friendships and helps my friends study. Additionally, I share my thoughts and experiences, and I ask teammates for help when needed. This kind of sharing makes teamwork more effective and enjoyable.
What kind of things are not suitable for sharing?
점수: 75.0제안: आपका उत्तर विषय के अनुसार है, लेकिन 'pain' शब्द का उपयोग गलत है। इसे 'PIN' या 'password' से बदलें। साथ ही, वाक्य संरचना को सरल और स्पष्ट बनाएं।
예시: Personal items like mobile phones and sensitive information such as online banking PINs should not be shared because they contain confidential data. For example, if someone knows your PIN, they could access your bank account without permission, causing serious financial problems.
Do you have anything to share with others recently?
점수: 90.0제안: आपका उत्तर स्पष्ट और प्रभावी है। आप इसे और बेहतर बनाने के लिए एक लिंकिंग शब्द जोड़ सकते हैं जिससे वाक्य अधिक प्रवाहपूर्ण हो।
예시: Recently, I shared my achievement with my brother because I completed an important project at work. The project was very successful and positively impacted our team's performance. Therefore, I felt proud and wanted to celebrate this milestone with him.
Who is the first person you would like to share good news with?
점수: 88.0제안: आपका उत्तर अच्छा है, लेकिन 'with my parents' के बाद 'is' शब्द गायब है। इसके अलावा, आप कुछ और विविध शब्दावली का उपयोग कर सकते हैं।
예시: The first person I would like to share good news with is my parents because they are very close to my heart and always support me. For example, whenever I achieve something important, they are the first to encourage and celebrate with me. Sharing good news with them makes me feel happy and motivated.
What kind of news do you share with your friends?
점수: 80.0제안: आपका उत्तर थोड़ा अस्पष्ट है, 'variety of views' की जगह 'types of news' या 'different kinds of news' कहना बेहतर होगा। साथ ही, 'movements' शब्द गलत है, इसे 'moments' से बदलें।
예시: I usually share different kinds of news with my friends. For instance, whenever I achieve something significant at work, I tell them because sharing such moments strengthens our friendship. This motivates us to support and encourage each other in both personal and professional life.
문법
× The first person I would like to share good news with my parents because they are very close to my heart and always support me.
✓ The first person I would like to share good news with is my parents because they are very close to my heart and always support me.
यहाँ 'The first person I would like to share good news with my parents' वाक्य संरचना गलत है क्योंकि 'with' के बाद 'my parents' आ रहा है बिना क्रिया के। सही वाक्य में 'with' के बाद 'is' क्रिया लगानी चाहिए ताकि वाक्य पूर्ण और स्पष्ट हो। इसलिए 'with is my parents' होना चाहिए।
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