Sharing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 답변에서 'toy sadness'라는 표현이 부자연스럽고 의미 전달이 명확하지 않습니다. 더 자연스럽고 명확한 단어 선택이 필요하며, 문장 구조도 간결하게 다듬어야 합니다.

예시: Yes, they did. I remember my mother often encouraged me to share my toys with my cousins. At first, it was difficult, but over time I learned the importance of sharing. Thanks to her lessons, I understood that sharing helps build strong relationships.

제안: 전반적으로 자연스럽고 명확한 답변이지만, 'in addition' 대신 더 적절한 연결어를 사용하고, 사진과 영상 공유에 대해 좀 더 구체적인 예시를 추가하면 좋겠습니다.

예시: I enjoy sharing food the most because it helps me connect with others. For example, if I taste a delicious dessert, I always want my friends to try it too. Also, I often share photos and video clips on social media, like pictures from trips or funny moments, which brings joy to my friends.

제안: 질문에 대한 답변이 부적절하며, 'booze'와 같은 단어 사용이 부자연스럽고 문맥에 맞지 않습니다. 질문에 맞게 공유하기 부적합한 것들에 대해 명확히 답변해야 합니다.

예시: I think personal items like money or private information are not suitable for sharing because they can cause problems or misunderstandings.

제안: 답변이 매우 불명확하고 문법적으로도 오류가 많아 의미 전달이 어렵습니다. 최근에 공유한 구체적인 물건이나 경험에 대해 명확하고 간결하게 답변하는 연습이 필요합니다.

예시: Yes, recently I bought some interesting books and have been lending them to my friends. Sharing books helps us learn new things and saves money.

제안: 전반적으로 자연스럽고 명확한 답변이지만, 'celebrate' 앞에 'to'가 빠졌고 문장 연결을 위해 'because' 같은 연결어를 추가하면 더 좋습니다.

예시: Usually, I share good news with my mother first because she has always been supportive and genuinely celebrates my achievements. After that, I would probably tell my closest friend.

제안: 매우 좋은 답변입니다. 다만 'viable' 대신 'strong'이나 'healthy' 같은 단어를 사용하면 더 자연스럽습니다.

예시: Mostly, I share personal updates like passing an exam, getting a new opportunity, or even small things like discovering a great restaurant. I think sharing positive news helps keep our friendship strong and connected.

× I remember my mother often encouraged me to share toy sadness with my cousins.

✓ I remember my mother often encouraged me to share toys with my cousins.

The word 'toy' should be plural 'toys' because it refers to multiple items shared with cousins. Using singular 'toy' is incorrect when talking about more than one item.

× sharing makes relationships.

✓ sharing makes relationships better.

The sentence is incomplete and lacks an adjective to describe 'relationships'. Adding 'better' clarifies the meaning and corrects the sentence structure.

× I enjoy sharing food the most because it helps me connect with others.

✓ I enjoy sharing food the most because it helps me connect with others.

No correction needed here; 'food' is uncountable and correctly used in singular form.

× if I taste a nice dessert, I always want my friends to try it as well.

✓ if I taste a nice dessert, I always want my friends to try it as well.

No correction needed; 'dessert' is singular and correctly used.

× I bought some booze recently and I've been lending them to my friends.

✓ I bought some booze recently and I've been lending it to my friends.

'Booze' is an uncountable noun and should be referred to with the singular pronoun 'it' instead of 'them'.

× I bought some booster such as novice and set up guys recently and I've been lending them to my friends.

✓ I bought some boosters such as novice and set up guys recently and I've been lending them to my friends.

'Booster' should be plural 'boosters' because it refers to multiple items. This corrects the singular/plural mismatch.

× I find the EA fulfilling when someone else can enjoy the same story or gain you insight.

✓ I find the EA fulfilling when someone else can enjoy the same story or gain your insight.

The pronoun 'you' is incorrect here; it should be the possessive pronoun 'your' to modify 'insight'.

× Book sharing helps me not only money but also.

✓ Book sharing helps me not only save money but also learn more.

The original sentence is incomplete and lacks clarity. Adding 'save' before 'money' and completing the sentence improves meaning and grammatical correctness.

× she's genuinely celebrate my achievements.

✓ she genuinely celebrates my achievements.

The verb 'celebrate' should be in third person singular form 'celebrates' to agree with the subject 'she'. Also, 'genuinely' correctly modifies the verb.

× sharing positive news keeps our friendship viable and connected.

✓ sharing positive news keeps our friendship strong and connected.

The adjective 'viable' is not appropriate to describe friendship here. 'Strong' is a better adjective to express the intended meaning.