Sharing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中有重复词汇“of of”，影响流畅度。建议避免重复，简洁表达。可以增加具体例子来丰富内容。

예시: Yes, my parents always encouraged me to share my toys and stories with friends because sharing brings joy to everyone.

제안: 回答中语法错误（"me friends"应为"my friends"），表达不够自然。建议注意语法准确性，并使用更自然的表达方式。

예시: I like to share happy moments, like when I receive my allowance, because it can cheer up my friends too.

제안: 语法错误（"can be share"应为"can be shared"），表达不够清晰。建议明确区分适合和不适合分享的内容，并用连词连接句子。

예시: I believe most things can be shared, but private or sensitive information might not be suitable to share with everyone.

제안: 回答较为完整，但“After finish them”语法不正确，建议使用正确的时态和结构。

예시: Recently, I haven't shared much because I've been busy studying for exams. After I finish, I plan to share my results with my girlfriend.

제안: 句子结构混乱，有重复词汇“with with”，语法错误（"I living"应为"I live"），表达不清晰。建议简化句子，明确表达原因。

예시: The first person I would share good news with is my girlfriend because we live together and talk about everything.

제안: 内容重复之前的回答，缺乏新意。建议丰富内容，提供更多不同类型的新闻例子。

예시: I usually share happy news with my friends, like getting a good grade or receiving my allowance, to spread positivity.

× Of of course, my parents told me to share happy things with others when I was a child, because this way happiness can be spread and everyone can be happy together.

✓ Of course, my parents told me to share happy things with others when I was a child, because this way happiness can be spread and everyone can be happy together.

句首重复了“Of”，应去掉多余的一个。

× OK, I'd like to share things that made me happy with others, such as just receiving my living allowance today, which can also make me friends happy when they hear about it.

✓ OK, I'd like to share things that make me happy with others, such as just receiving my living allowance today, which can also make my friends happy when they hear about it.

“things that made me happy”时态不一致，应使用一般现在时“make”来表达习惯性动作；“me friends”应为“my friends”，这里是所有格错误。

× OK, I think anything can be share with others. Sharing happy things made everyone happy together, and sharing unhappy things might bring comfort.

✓ OK, I think anything can be shared with others. Sharing happy things makes everyone happy together, and sharing unhappy things might bring comfort.

“can be share”应为被动语态的过去分词形式“shared”；“Sharing happy things made”时态不一致，应使用一般现在时“makes”表示习惯性事实。

× Recently I have nothing to share with others because I've been busy preparing for exams. After finish them, I might share the exam results with my girlfriend.

✓ Recently I have nothing to share with others because I've been busy preparing for exams. After finishing them, I might share the exam results with my girlfriend.

“After finish them”中“finish”应使用动名词形式“finishing”，表示动作完成后。

× I think it's my girlfriend because I living in apartment with with her because we talk about together every time.

✓ I think it's my girlfriend because I live in an apartment with her and we talk together all the time.

“I living”应为“I live”，动词形式错误；“in apartment”前应加不定冠词“an”；“with with”重复，应去掉一个；“we talk about together every time”结构不完整，改为“we talk together all the time”更通顺。