Sharing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to use past tense consistently and avoid vague phrases like "sharing is getting." Also, keep your answer concise and clear by focusing on one or two key points with proper linking words.

예시: Yes, definitely. When I was a child, my parents taught me to share my lunch with classmates and teachers because sharing helps build kindness and friendship.

제안: Avoid repeating the same ideas and be more specific. Use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

예시: I like to share stationery, such as pens and notebooks, with my classmates at school. I also share my lunch box sometimes. Sharing these things helps strengthen our friendship.

제안: Try to complete your sentences fully and avoid hesitation sounds like "uh." Use clear linking words to explain your reasons logically.

예시: Some things are not suitable for sharing, such as personal secrets, diaries, and private books, because sharing them can reveal sensitive information.

제안: Avoid vague expressions like "sharing is getting" and incomplete ideas. Use clear reasons and avoid filler words to make your answer more natural and effective.

예시: Yes, recently I shared my stationery, lunch box, and books with my teachers and classmates because sharing promotes kindness and harmony among us.

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant. To improve, try to use linking words like "because" and "so" more smoothly and avoid repeating similar ideas.

예시: The first person I would share good news with is my sister because we have a strong relationship, and she always encourages me. I feel comfortable talking to her about anything.

제안: Avoid hesitation and incomplete sentences. Use clear linking words and be specific about the types of news you share to make your answer more coherent.

예시: I usually share good news with my friends, such as achievements and successes, because these stories strengthen our bond and promote kindness and peace.

× When I was a kid on my school time, my parents teach me to share my lunch box with your classmates as well as with teachers because sharing is getting and it is a sign of increasing love.

✓ When I was a kid during my school time, my parents taught me to share my lunch box with my classmates as well as with teachers because sharing is getting and it is a sign of increasing love.

The sentence refers to a past event ('When I was a kid'), so the verb 'teach' should be in the past tense 'taught' to maintain tense consistency. Also, 'your classmates' should be 'my classmates' to match the speaker's perspective.

× When I was a kid on my school time, my parents teach me to share my lunch box with your classmates as well as with teachers because sharing is getting and it is a sign of increasing love.

✓ When I was a kid during my school time, my parents taught me to share my lunch box with my classmates as well as with teachers because sharing is getting and it is a sign of increasing love.

The pronoun 'your' is incorrectly used when referring to 'classmates' from the speaker's perspective. It should be 'my classmates' to correctly indicate possession.

× When I was a kid on my school time, my parents teach me to share my lunch box with your classmates as well as with teachers because sharing is getting and it is a sign of increasing love.

✓ When I was a kid during my school time, my parents taught me to share my lunch box with my classmates as well as with teachers because sharing is getting and it is a sign of increasing love.

The preposition 'on' is incorrectly used with 'my school time'. The correct preposition is 'during' to indicate a period of time.

× my parents teach me to share my lunch box with your classmates as well as with teachers

✓ my parents taught me to share my lunch box with my classmates as well as with teachers

The pronoun 'your' is incorrect here because the speaker is talking about their own classmates, so 'my' should be used instead.

× my parents teach me to share my lunch box with your classmates as well as with teachers

✓ my parents taught me to share my lunch box with my classmates as well as with teachers

Since the action happened in the past, the verb 'teach' should be in the past tense 'taught'.

× the kind of stationery I like to share with my classmates at school time

✓ the kind of stationery I like to share with my classmates during school time

The phrase 'at school time' is incorrect; 'during school time' is the proper prepositional phrase to indicate the period when sharing occurs.

× the things are not suitable for sharing or our secrets, our personal Diaries as well as our personal books

✓ things that are not suitable for sharing are our secrets, our personal diaries, as well as our personal books

The original sentence lacks a clear subject and verb agreement. 'The things are not suitable' is awkward; it should be 'things that are not suitable for sharing are...' to correctly link subject and predicate. Also, 'Diaries' should be lowercase unless a proper noun.

× the things are not suitable for sharing or our secrets, our personal Diaries as well as our personal books because, uh, the secret reveals our information and.

✓ Things that are not suitable for sharing include our secrets, our personal diaries, as well as our personal books because secrets reveal our information.

The original sentence is incomplete and awkwardly structured. It lacks clarity and proper conjunctions. The correction provides a clearer structure and completes the thought.

× I have many things to share with my teachers and my class fellows, for example, my stationery, my lunch box, as well as my books.

✓ I have many things to share with my teachers and my classmates, for example, my stationery, my lunch box, as well as my books.

The term 'class fellows' is uncommon and awkward; 'classmates' is the correct and more natural term. The verb tense 'have' is correct here as it refers to the present.

× sharing is getting and it is a sign of increasing kindness and peacefulness in US.

✓ sharing is getting and it is a sign of increasing kindness and peacefulness in us.

The word 'US' is capitalized as if referring to the United States, but here it should be the pronoun 'us' in lowercase to mean 'we' or 'people including me'.

× the first person I would like to tell any good news is my sister because I have a strong relationship with her and she encouraged me in every way and I feel very comfortable when I talk with her.

✓ the first person I would like to tell any good news to is my sister because I have a strong relationship with her and she encourages me in every way and I feel very comfortable when I talk with her.

The verb 'encouraged' should be present tense 'encourages' to match the ongoing relationship. Also, 'tell any good news' requires the preposition 'to' after 'tell'. The sentence is corrected accordingly.

× the good news I will share to my friends like achievements, success news, uh, because the, the these news strong our bond and relationship and it is a sign of kindness and peace.

✓ the good news I will share with my friends includes achievements and success news because these news strengthen our bond and relationship and it is a sign of kindness and peace.

The verb 'share' is followed by the preposition 'with', not 'to'. Also, 'these news strong our bond' is incorrect; it should be 'these news strengthen our bond'. The modal verb 'will' is correctly used for future sharing.