Sharing— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Improve verb tense consistency and sentence structure. Use past tense 'taught' instead of 'teach' and avoid run-on sentences by splitting ideas clearly.

예시: Yes, when I was a child, my parents often taught me to share things such as books, food, and clothes. I also frequently shared these items with my friends.

제안: Use more natural expressions and linking words. Replace 'make the relation good' with 'strengthen relationships' and use 'because' to connect ideas.

예시: I like to share many things, but mainly books and food. I think sharing food helps strengthen relationships because it brings people closer, and sharing books is a great way to make good use of them.

제안: Avoid repetition and improve sentence clarity. Use 'because' instead of 'it's because' and correct 'suitable for share' to 'suitable for sharing'.

예시: I think clothes are not suitable for sharing because other people's sweat might cause skin irritation. Therefore, I prefer not to share clothes with others.

제안: Use correct prepositions and plural forms. Say 'shared a book with my best friend' and 'fond of reading books'. Also, use linking words for coherence.

예시: Yes, last month I shared a book called Rich Dad, Poor Dad with my best friend. Since he is also fond of reading books, I often share books with him.

제안: Correct pronoun usage and grammar. Use 'good news' without 'a', and replace 'he' with 'she' when referring to mother. Also, improve sentence structure and coherence.

예시: I would definitely share good news with my mother because I am very close to her. She takes care of me and often cooks my favorite meals, so she is the first person I want to tell.

제안: Use correct plural forms and improve sentence flow. Say 'company shares' and 'this type of information'. Use linking words like 'so' and 'which' for clarity.

예시: I usually share information about company shares and books. I think this type of information is useful for my friends because they can gain knowledge from books and invest money in good company shares, which will benefit them in the future.

× Yes, when I was a kid, my parents often teach me to share things such as books, food, clothes and I often share things with my friends.

✓ Yes, when I was a kid, my parents often taught me to share things such as books, food, clothes and I often shared things with my friends.

The sentence describes past habitual actions, so the verbs should be in the past tense ('taught' and 'shared') to maintain tense consistency.

× I like to share many things but I basically like to share two things such as books and food.

✓ I like to share many things but I basically like to share two things, such as books and food.

A comma is needed before 'such as' to correctly introduce examples; also, 'things such as books and food' is correct as 'things' is plural and 'books' and 'food' are examples.

× I feel sharing food can make the relation good and sharing book is a good way to utilize the books.

✓ I feel sharing food can improve relationships and sharing books is a good way to utilize them.

'The relation' is incorrect; 'relationships' is more natural and plural. Also, 'sharing book' should be 'sharing books' to match plural usage, and 'utilize the books' is better as 'utilize them' to avoid repetition.

× That's why I feel that clothes are not suitable for share.

✓ That's why I feel that clothes are not suitable for sharing.

After 'suitable for', a gerund (-ing form) is required, so 'sharing' is correct instead of the base verb 'share'.

× Yes, last month I shared a book called Rich Dad, Poor Dad to my best friend.

✓ Yes, last month I shared a book called Rich Dad, Poor Dad with my best friend.

The verb 'share' is followed by the preposition 'with' when indicating the person with whom something is shared, not 'to'.

× Actually, he is also fond of reading book.

✓ Actually, he is also fond of reading books.

'Book' should be plural 'books' because 'reading' generally refers to reading multiple books or reading in general.

× It's because I am very close to her, he take care of mine. He often cook my favorite meals for me.

✓ It's because I am very close to her; she takes care of me. She often cooks my favorite meals for me.

The pronouns 'he' are incorrect when referring to 'her'; they should be 'she'. Also, verb forms should agree with third person singular: 'takes' and 'cooks'. 'Mine' is incorrect here; 'me' is the correct object pronoun.

× That's why I will share with him.

✓ That's why I will share with her.

Since the subject is 'my mother' (female), the pronoun should be 'her' instead of 'him'.

× I usually share information about companies shares and about books.

✓ I usually share information about company shares and about books.

'Companies shares' is incorrect; the correct form is 'company shares' (possessive or compound noun).

× I think these type of information is useful for my friends that they can grab knowledge from books and also can invest money in the good company share and that will be beneficial for them in future.

✓ I think this type of information is useful for my friends because they can gain knowledge from books and also invest money in good company shares, which will be beneficial for them in the future.

'These type' should be 'this type' because 'type' is singular. 'Grab knowledge' is informal; 'gain knowledge' is better. 'The good company share' should be 'good company shares' (plural and no article). Also, 'in future' should be 'in the future'.