Movies— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は全体的に良いですが、「jumps」という単語は文脈に合っていません。また、文の流れをより自然にするために、接続詞を使って情報をつなげると良いでしょう。例えば、好きなジャンルを述べた後に理由や具体例を加えると、より説得力が増します。

예시: I watch movies at least once a week using my smartphone and streaming services like Netflix. I enjoy various genres, especially sci-fi and musicals, because I find them very imaginative and entertaining. Moreover, I tend to watch more movies during the summer holidays when I have more free time.

제안: 回答に多くの「umm」や「uh」が含まれており、流暢さが損なわれています。また、文法的に不自然な部分があり、より明確で簡潔な表現を心がけると良いでしょう。接続詞を使って理由と結果をつなげると、論理的な回答になります。

예시: I usually watch sci-fi movies because, as a journalist covering science and technology advancements, they provide me with valuable knowledge and inspiration for writing stories about physics and chemistry.

제안: 回答は具体的で良いですが、「react comfortably」は少し不自然な表現です。また、「sometimes I can drink alcohol」という部分は、より自然な言い回しにすると良いでしょう。接続詞を使って理由を明確にすると、より効果的です。

예시: I prefer watching movies at home on my smartphone because it is very convenient and comfortable. For example, I can eat my favorite snacks and pause or play the movie whenever I want. Also, sometimes I enjoy drinking alcohol while watching, which helps me relax without any distractions from others.

제안: 回答は内容的に良いですが、「not always total in textbooks」は意味が不明瞭です。より適切な表現に置き換え、文の流れをスムーズにするために接続詞を活用しましょう。

예시: I think watching movies in other languages, such as English, is very beneficial because it helps me improve my listening skills and understand how native speakers use the language naturally. For example, by watching English movies, I can learn new vocabulary and expressions that are not always included in textbooks.

× I enjoy a variety of jumps, especially sci-fi and musicals, which I consider masterpieces.

✓ I enjoy a variety of genres, especially sci-fi and musicals, which I consider masterpieces.

The word 'jumps' is incorrect in this context; the correct plural noun is 'genres' to refer to types of movies. This is a singular/plural issue because the wrong plural noun was used.

× I usually watch sci-fi movies, umm, because I am a journalist and mainly covering, uh, the science and technology advancement umm.

✓ I usually watch sci-fi movies, umm, because I am a journalist and mainly cover, uh, the science and technology advancements, umm.

After 'I am a journalist and mainly', the verb should be in base form 'cover' to match the subject and sentence structure. Using 'covering' here is incorrect verb + -ing form usage.

× I usually watch sci-fi movies, umm, because I am a journalist and mainly covering, uh, the science and technology advancement umm.

✓ I usually watch sci-fi movies, umm, because I am a journalist and mainly cover, uh, the science and technology advancements, umm.

The noun 'advancement' should be plural 'advancements' because it refers to multiple developments in science and technology. This is a singular/plural issue.

× In addition to that, I can get a lot of knowledge and inspiration about writing a story about physics and chemistry.

✓ In addition to that, I can get a lot of knowledge and inspiration for writing a story about physics and chemistry.

The preposition 'about' is incorrectly used after 'inspiration'. The correct preposition is 'for' when referring to the purpose of inspiration.

× I prefer watching movies at home on my smart phone and because it's very convenient and allows me to react comfortably.

✓ I prefer watching movies at home on my smartphone because it's very convenient and allows me to relax comfortably.

The phrase 'and because' is incorrect; 'because' alone should be used to connect the clauses. Also, 'react comfortably' is incorrect; the correct verb is 'relax comfortably'. This is an incorrect use of pronouns and word choice.

× Sometimes I can drink alcohol and this way I can enjoy the film without any distractions by others.

✓ Sometimes I can drink alcohol and this way I can enjoy the film without any distractions from others.

The preposition 'by' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'from' when indicating the source of distractions.

× I think watching movies in other languages such as English is very beneficial.

✓ I think watching movies in other languages, such as English, is very beneficial.

Commas are needed around 'such as English' to correctly set off the phrase. This is an issue with punctuation affecting adjective/adverb usage.

× For example, by watching English movies, I can learn new vocabulary and expressions that are not always total in textbooks.

✓ For example, by watching English movies, I can learn new vocabulary and expressions that are not always taught in textbooks.

The word 'total' is incorrect here; the correct word is 'taught'. This is an incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs or word choice.