Science— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答はやや冗長で、'uh'などのフィラーが多く含まれています。より自然で効果的な回答にするために、フィラーを減らし、主題文を明確にし、具体的な理由を簡潔に述べることが重要です。

예시: Yes, I enjoy studying science, especially biology, because I am fascinated by animal behavior and their evolutionary history, which makes science very interesting to me.

제안: 文法の誤りや不自然な表現が見られます。例えば、「I'm in the covering the story」は不自然です。より正確な文法と明確な表現を使い、具体的な例を簡潔に述べることが望ましいです。

예시: Yes, I am a journalist covering stories about science and technology, so I often use my knowledge when reporting on topics like the history of the Nobel Prize or the development of the atomic bomb.

제안: 回答が長く、文の構造が複雑でわかりにくいです。話の流れを整理し、具体的な例を絞って簡潔に述べることが必要です。接続詞を使って論理的に繋げると良いでしょう。

예시: Yes, I would like to learn more about space exploration, especially the missions to the Moon and Mars, including the types of probes used and their impact on our understanding of humanity's future.

제안: 文法的な誤りがあり、意味がやや不明瞭です。主題文を明確にし、理由を具体的かつ簡潔に述べることが必要です。接続詞を使って論理的に説明しましょう。

예시: Yes, I believe it is important for everyone to study science because scientific discoveries have significant social impacts, such as the development of nuclear weapons.

제안: 回答はやや冗長で、語順の誤りがあります。より自然な英語にするために、語順を正し、理由を簡潔に述べることが望ましいです。

예시: Yes, I enjoy watching science TV programs because, as a science reporter, I need to stay informed and learn how to effectively communicate scientific and technological topics.

× I'm in the covering the story about the science and technological advancements, so I always use knowledge about assignments such as the history of a Nobel Prize and how the atomic bomb was created by some researchers.

✓ I'm covering the story about science and technological advancements, so I always use knowledge about assignments such as the history of the Nobel Prize and how the atomic bomb was created by some researchers.

The phrase 'I'm in the covering' is incorrect because 'covering' is a present participle verb that should directly follow the auxiliary verb 'am' to form the present continuous tense. The correct form is 'I'm covering'. Also, 'the science' should be 'science' without 'the' because it refers to science in general. 'A Nobel Prize' should be 'the Nobel Prize' because it refers to a specific, well-known prize.

× I'm in the covering the story about the science and technological advancements, so I always use knowledge about assignments such as the history of a Nobel Prize and how the atomic bomb was created by some researchers.

✓ I'm covering the story about science and technological advancements, so I always use knowledge about assignments such as the history of the Nobel Prize and how the atomic bomb was created by some researchers.

The definite article 'the' is incorrectly used before 'science' and 'a Nobel Prize'. 'Science' is a general field and does not require 'the'. 'A Nobel Prize' should be 'the Nobel Prize' because it refers to a specific, well-known prize.

× I want to gain much more knowledge about the exploration, such as the story about the moon and what type of probe was created in all over the world and what origin and the future of the humankind and now for example the story about Mars.

✓ I want to gain much more knowledge about exploration, such as the story of the moon, what types of probes were created all over the world, the origin and future of humankind, and, for example, the story about Mars.

The preposition 'about' is incorrectly used with 'exploration'; 'about exploration' is more natural. 'The story about the moon' is better as 'the story of the moon'. 'Created in all over the world' is incorrect; it should be 'created all over the world'. Also, 'what origin and the future of the humankind' is unclear and should be rephrased to 'the origin and future of humankind'. The phrase 'and now for example' is awkward and should be 'and, for example,'.

× Yes, I think I'm gaining a lot of knowledge about science is a very important because the history of the science and research is related with that of the social problems such as the atomic bomb and nuclear weapons.

✓ Yes, I think gaining a lot of knowledge about science is very important because the history of science and research is related to social problems such as the atomic bomb and nuclear weapons.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'I'm gaining' which is unnecessary here; the subject should be 'gaining a lot of knowledge about science'. The phrase 'is a very important' is incorrect; 'important' is an adjective and should not have 'a'. 'Related with' should be 'related to'. Also, 'the history of the science' should be 'the history of science' without 'the' before 'science'.

× Yes, I like watching science TV because I am a science reporter and always I have to gain much more knowledge about how to express the importance of science and technology stories, so I always watch such programs.

✓ Yes, I like watching science TV because I am a science reporter and I always have to gain much more knowledge about how to express the importance of science and technology stories, so I always watch such programs.

The adverb 'always' is incorrectly placed before the subject 'I'. In English, adverbs of frequency like 'always' usually come after the subject and before the main verb. Therefore, 'always I have' should be 'I always have'.