Science— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is quite long and somewhat repetitive, which affects clarity and coherence. Try to give a direct response first, then add specific supporting details using linking words to improve flow. Also, be careful with vocabulary and grammar, for example, 'mathematic' should be 'mathematics'.

예시: I did not enjoy studying science at school because most subjects, like mathematics and biology, were very theoretical and hard to memorise. For instance, I found mathematics particularly difficult and boring since it lacked practical application.

제안: Your answer contains many hesitations and incomplete sentences, which reduces fluency and clarity. Try to speak more confidently and structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by specific examples. Avoid filler words like 'uh'.

예시: Yes, I use my science knowledge every day because I am a nurse working in a hospital. It helps me understand diseases and treat patients effectively, so staying updated is very important for my job.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to be more precise and organise your ideas logically using linking words. Also, use correct terms such as 'medical science' instead of 'math science' and 'patient diseases' instead of 'a parent disease'.

예시: I would like to learn more about medical science, especially subjects like anatomy, biology, and chemistry, because they are essential for my nursing career and help me understand patient diseases better.

제안: Your answer has many hesitations and incomplete thoughts, which affect coherence. Try to give a clear opinion first, then support it with specific reasons using linking words. Also, avoid repeating filler words and incomplete sentences.

예시: I believe it is important for everyone to study science, especially during childhood, because it helps them understand the world around them. For example, learning maths is essential as it develops problem-solving skills useful in daily life.

제안: Your answer is somewhat fragmented and contains grammatical errors. Try to complete your sentences and organise your ideas logically using linking words. Also, use more precise vocabulary, for example, 'long-lasting memory' instead of 'long last memory'.

예시: Yes, I enjoy watching science TV programs because they explain complex topics in a simple way. Moreover, studies show that watching such programs helps people remember information better than just reading theoretical texts.

× I recall that during school time we had lots of subjects on different science, for instance mathematic biology, chemistry and the like.

✓ I recall that during school time we had lots of subjects on different sciences, for instance mathematics, biology, chemistry and the like.

The word 'science' should be plural 'sciences' because it refers to multiple branches of science. Also, 'mathematic' is incorrect; the correct term is 'mathematics'. This correction ensures proper pluralisation and correct subject names.

× Really horrifying and it was really difficult for me.

✓ It was really horrifying and difficult for me.

The original sentence fragment 'Really horrifying' lacks a subject and verb, making it incomplete. Combining it with the next sentence and removing redundancy improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I couldn't memorize lots of things when it comes to mathematic mathematics.

✓ I couldn't memorize lots of things when it comes to mathematics.

The word 'mathematic' is incorrect; the correct term is 'mathematics'. Also, 'mathematic mathematics' is redundant, so only 'mathematics' should be used.

× I work in hospital, so I use my science, uh, on a daily basis.

✓ I work in a hospital, so I use my science, uh, on a daily basis.

The noun 'hospital' requires an article 'a' when used in this context. Omitting the article is a common error with singular countable nouns.

× I can cure patient and treat them and I can raise my awareness difference of, uh, diseases and illness.

✓ I can cure patients and treat them and I can raise my awareness of different diseases and illnesses.

'Patient' should be plural 'patients' to match the plural verb 'treat them'. Also, 'difference of' is incorrect; it should be 'awareness of different'. 'Illness' should be plural 'illnesses' to match 'diseases'.

× There are variety kinds of science around the world and most of them are really useful, for instance math science.

✓ There are various kinds of science around the world and most of them are really useful, for instance math science.

The phrase 'variety kinds' is incorrect; it should be 'various kinds' or 'a variety of kinds'. 'Various' is more appropriate here to indicate different types.

× So I like to learn about my knowledge about this science.

✓ So I like to increase my knowledge about this science.

The phrase 'learn about my knowledge' is incorrect; one cannot learn about their own knowledge. The correct expression is 'increase my knowledge' or 'learn more about'.

× And since I work as a nurse, it's really important for me to learn about a parent disease.

✓ And since I work as a nurse, it's really important for me to learn about a particular disease.

The phrase 'a parent disease' is incorrect and unclear. Likely, the intended phrase is 'a particular disease' or 'a prevalent disease'.

× And also anatomy, biology and chemistry is really important in our major.

✓ And also anatomy, biology and chemistry are really important in our major.

When listing multiple subjects, the verb should be plural 'are' instead of singular 'is' to agree with the plural subject.

× When we want to explore, uh, the world around us, we can learn different science and, uh, math is really important for everyone.

✓ When we want to explore, uh, the world around us, we can learn different sciences and, uh, math is really important for everyone.

'Science' should be plural 'sciences' when referring to different branches or types of science.

× They have to learn it and, uh, sometimes it's really important to.

✓ They have to learn it and, uh, sometimes it's really important too.

The word 'to' at the end is incorrect; the correct word is 'too' meaning 'also'.

× Yes, they are really simple, so we can learn a lot about them and they can explain different issues and different topic of science easily rather than read theoretical.

✓ Yes, they are really simple, so we can learn a lot about them and they can explain different issues and different topics of science easily rather than reading theoretical material.

'Topic' should be plural 'topics' to agree with 'different'. Also, 'read theoretical' is incomplete; it should be 'reading theoretical material' or 'reading theory'.

× Yes, they are really simple, so we can learn a lot about them and they can explain different issues and different topic of science easily rather than read theoretical.

✓ Yes, they are really simple, so we can learn a lot about them and they can explain different issues and different topics of science easily rather than reading theoretical material.

After 'rather than', the verb should be in the '-ing' form to indicate the action being compared. Therefore, 'read' should be 'reading'.