Science— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 文法的な誤りと語彙の選択ミスがあります。例えば、「understanding about」ではなく「understanding」や「knowledge of」を使い、「salaries」ではなく「cells」や「particles」など適切な単語を選ぶ必要があります。また、文が少し冗長で、より簡潔に表現すると自然になります。

예시: Yes, I enjoy studying science because learning about biochemistry, physics, and biology helps me understand how the world is made up of cells and substances.

제안: 回答は内容的に良いですが、繰り返しがあり、より自然な表現に改善できます。また、接続詞を使って文をつなげると流れが良くなります。

예시: Yes, I am a journalist who covers stories about science and technology, so I need to learn a lot about science every day. For example, I am particularly interested in space exploration.

제안: 文法と語彙の誤りが目立ちます。「study a lot about」より「learn more about」が自然です。また、「nature, open Mars or Moon and other stars」は意味が不明瞭なので、具体的で正確な表現に直す必要があります。

예시: Yes, I would like to learn more about space exploration, such as how satellites are used and how humans can travel to other planets like Mars or the Moon.

제안: 回答は明確で内容も良いですが、「understand」や「understanding」が繰り返されているため、語彙のバリエーションを増やすとより良くなります。

예시: Yes, I believe it is important because science forms the basis of our daily lives, and having knowledge of it helps people grasp how the world functions and evolves.

제안: 文法的な誤り（例えば、"the people who involved"は"the people who are involved"）や不自然な表現があります。また、「at least three times in a week」より「at least three times a week」が自然です。

예시: Yes, I enjoy watching science TV programs because they help me easily understand scientific principles and the people involved in science. I usually watch these programs at least three times a week.

× Yes, I like studying science because understanding about biochemistry, physics and biology and can help me understand how the world is shaped by salaries and substances.

✓ Yes, I like studying science because understanding biochemistry, physics, and biology can help me understand how the world is shaped by salaries and substances.

The phrase 'understanding about biochemistry, physics and biology and can help me' is incorrect because 'understanding' should directly relate to the subjects without 'about', and the conjunction 'and' before 'can help' is unnecessary. Also, 'salaries' is likely a typo for 'salts' or 'minerals'. The sentence should be simplified for clarity.

× Yes, I like studying science because understanding about biochemistry, physics and biology and can help me understand how the world is shaped by salaries and substances.

✓ Yes, I like studying science because understanding biochemistry, physics, and biology can help me understand how the world is shaped by salts and substances.

The preposition 'about' after 'understanding' is unnecessary and incorrect here. 'Understanding' should be followed directly by the objects (biochemistry, physics, and biology). Also, 'salaries' seems to be a typo and should be 'salts' or 'minerals' to make sense in context.

× Yes, actually I am a journalist covering the story about science and technology development.

✓ Yes, actually I am a journalist covering stories about science and technology development.

The phrase 'covering the story about' is incorrect because 'covering' usually refers to multiple stories or news items, so 'stories about' is more appropriate. Also, 'the story' is too specific unless referring to a particular story.

× So I have to gain a lot of knowledge in my daily life about science.

✓ So I have to gain a lot of knowledge about science in my daily life.

The preposition 'in' before 'my daily life' is acceptable, but the phrase 'gain a lot of knowledge in my daily life about science' is awkward. It is clearer to say 'gain a lot of knowledge about science in my daily life' to properly link 'knowledge' and 'about science'.

× For example, I'm interested in space exploration.

✓ For example, I'm interested in space exploration.

This sentence is correct and does not contain any grammar mistakes related to the provided problem types.

× Yes, I would like to study a lot about space exploration, for example how to use satellites, how to go to other planets and nature, open Mars or Moon and other stars.

✓ Yes, I would like to study a lot about space exploration, for example how to use satellites, how to go to other planets and nature, explore Mars or the Moon and other stars.

The phrase 'open Mars or Moon' is incorrect; it should be 'explore Mars or the Moon'. Also, 'the Moon' requires the definite article 'the'. The preposition 'about' after 'study a lot' is acceptable but could be improved to 'study a lot about' or 'study space exploration a lot' for clarity.

× Yes, I would like to study a lot about space exploration, for example how to use satellites, how to go to other planets and nature, open Mars or Moon and other stars.

✓ Yes, I would like to study a lot about space exploration, for example how to use satellites, how to go to other planets and nature, explore Mars or the Moon and other stars.

The Moon is a unique celestial body and requires the definite article 'the'. Omitting 'the' before 'Moon' is a common error.

× Yes, I think so, because science is the foundation of our daily lives, so understanding that subject can help people understand how the world is made and shaped.

✓ Yes, I think so, because science is the foundation of our daily lives, so understanding this subject can help people understand how the world is made and shaped.

The pronoun 'that' is less appropriate here; 'this' is better to refer to the subject just mentioned (science). 'This' indicates something closer or more immediate.

× Yes, I prefer watching science TV because I can easily understand the principle and the people who involved in science, so I sometimes watch the program at least three times in a week.

✓ Yes, I prefer watching science TV because I can easily understand the principles and the people who are involved in science, so I sometimes watch the program at least three times a week.

The word 'principle' should be plural 'principles' because science involves multiple principles. Also, 'people who involved' is missing the verb 'are'. The phrase 'in a week' is better as 'a week' without 'in' for frequency expressions.