Science— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant, but try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. For example, instead of repeating 'practical' twice, you can combine ideas more smoothly. Also, use linking words to connect your thoughts.

예시: Yes, I enjoy studying science at school because it is a practical subject that teaches important life skills, which I find very useful.

제안: Your answer is relevant but can be more concise and natural. Avoid repeating the same idea and use linking words to make your answer coherent. Also, correct minor grammar errors like 'healthcare profession' to 'the healthcare profession'.

예시: Yes, I work in the healthcare profession, so I apply my science knowledge daily as it is essential for my routine tasks.

제안: Your answer is relevant but can be improved by correcting grammar and making it more natural. For example, say 'Biology is a subject I would like to learn more about' and use linking words to explain why.

예시: Biology is a subject I would like to learn more about because it relates to my profession, and gaining deeper knowledge would help me perform better.

제안: Your answer has good ideas but needs clearer expression and better vocabulary. Avoid vague phrases like 'there is no practicality' and use linking words to connect your points.

예시: I believe that nowadays, everyone should have some knowledge of science because it helps us understand how everyday things work, making our lives more practical and informed.

제안: Your answer is relevant but can be more fluent and natural. Avoid repetition and improve sentence structure. For example, combine sentences and use linking words for coherence.

예시: Yes, I have always enjoyed watching science TV programs; during my childhood, I spent many days watching them, and I still watch such shows whenever I have free time.

× I was a science student in my higher school as I love this subject and the subject is quite practical and it teaches you the important practical things of life.

✓ I was a science student in my higher school as I loved this subject and the subject was quite practical and it taught you the important practical things of life.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the student is referring to a past period ('I was a science student'), the verbs describing feelings and facts about that time should also be in the past tense ('loved', 'was', 'taught'). This maintains tense consistency.

× Yes, of course I am working in healthcare profession and I have to apply the science in my everyday routine.

✓ Yes, of course I am working in the healthcare profession and I have to apply science in my everyday routine.

The phrase 'working in healthcare profession' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'healthcare profession'. Also, 'apply the science' is incorrect because 'science' here is an uncountable noun used generally, so 'the' is unnecessary. Correct preposition and article usage improves clarity.

× Biology is 1 subject which I would like to learn a more because it is related to my profession and I would love to increase my knowledge in the same field.

✓ Biology is one subject which I would like to learn more about because it is related to my profession and I would love to increase my knowledge in the same field.

The sentence has a numeral '1' instead of the word 'one' and uses 'a more' incorrectly. Also, 'learn more' should be followed by 'about' to indicate the subject matter. Correcting these improves grammatical accuracy and naturalness.

× Science teaches you how things work about the daily life, and without science there is no practicality.

✓ Science teaches you how things work in daily life, and without science there is no practicality.

The preposition 'about' is incorrectly used with 'work' here. The correct preposition is 'in' when referring to 'daily life'. This correction makes the sentence idiomatic and grammatically correct.

× Yes, I was fond of watching science TV shows and science TV channels. I in my childhood I used to spend my day watching scientific shows and I still watch them when I have the free time.

✓ Yes, I was fond of watching science TV shows and science TV channels. In my childhood, I used to spend my days watching scientific shows and I still watch them when I have free time.

The phrase 'I in my childhood' is incorrect; it should be 'In my childhood'. Also, 'spend my day' should be plural 'spend my days' to indicate habitual action. Removing 'the' before 'free time' is also correct as 'free time' is uncountable. These corrections improve sentence structure and grammar.