Science— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答要更直接、用词更准确，并避免语法错误与多余信息。开头给出直接的肯定或否定，然后用一到两句具体理由和例子。注意主谓一致、单复数和时态。可简化为不超过5句。

예시: I enjoy some science subjects at school, especially biology and geography. I find biology interesting because I like learning about living things and how the human body works. However, I struggle with chemistry and physics because they require a lot of calculations, which I find difficult.

제안: 回答要更清晰、有条理并使用恰当词汇。先回答是或否，再用一两个具体且相关的例子说明“如何使用”。避免模糊表达和语法错误，注意时态一致与代词单复数。

예시: Yes, I often use my science knowledge, especially geography. For example, I calculate sunrise and sunset times when planning outdoor activities, and last month I helped a friend plan her trip to Australia by advising her about time differences and climate.

제안: 回答要更自然并提供具体原因和预期方式。先给出主题句，然后说明具体原因（兴趣、家庭背景、职业等），并提到打算如何学习或利用机会。控制在最多5句内且使用连词保持连贯。

예시: Yes, I would like to study biology more deeply because I enjoyed it in high school and my family members work in the field. I think learning more would help me discuss topics with them and possibly take online courses or volunteer in a lab to gain practical experience.

제안: 回答应更准确地表达观点并使用合适例子来支持理由。避免不合适或错误的比喻（例如“break dancing”应为“breakdown”或其他）。先直接回答，然后给出两条清晰的理由并用连词衔接。

예시: Yes, I believe science is important for everyone. It teaches critical thinking and problem-solving, and it is essential for technological and medical advances that improve our lives.

제안: 回答应更自然并按时间顺序组织（过去与现在）。用简洁句子说明过去习惯和现在偏好，并提供具体平台或类型作为例子。注意词汇使用（e.g. "watch" "follow"），减少语气词和重复。

예시: I used to enjoy watching science programs on TV when I was a child, especially on CCTV’s science shows. Nowadays I rarely watch TV, but I follow science creators on Instagram and Bilibili because their short videos are more convenient and up-to-date.

× Well it depends because in China we're 4 science related subject, geography, physics, chemistry and biology.

✓ Well, it depends because in China we have four science-related subjects: geography, physics, chemistry and biology.

原句中的“we're 4 science related subject”使用了缩写“we're”(we are)与之后的单数名词“subject”以及数字不匹配，且名词应为复数。应使用“we have four ... subjects”表示“我们有四门科学相关课程”。建议：表示数量时，动词和名词需与复数形式一致，数字前后可加连字符构成复合形容词（science-related）。

× All because I'm a girl who are not good at numbering and math.

✓ It's mainly because I'm a girl who is not good at numbers and math.

原句中的“who are”关系代词引导的从句主语是单数“who”(指代“I”/“a girl”)，动词应为单数“is”。另外“numbering”用词不当，应为“numbers”。建议：关系代词引导从句时，动词与先行词的人称和数一致；“numbering”通常表示编号或动名词，表示擅长数字应用“numbers”。

× So I enjoy a biology and graphic but I don't like chemistry.

✓ So I enjoy biology and geography, but I don't like chemistry.

原句中“不定冠词+a biology”和“graphic”用法错误。学科名通常不用冠词并且拼写应为“geography”。建议：学科名称作泛指时不加冠词，并注意拼写。

× Yes, I always do it because I'm good at geography.

✓ Yes, I always do because I'm good at geography.

原句“do it”中“do it”不明确且冗余。回答是否日常使用科学知识时可直接说“I always do”或“I use it regularly”。建议：保持简洁，主句时态与习惯性动作用一般现在时。

× So sometimes I use my geography technology to, uh, calculate the day times and night time.

✓ So sometimes I use my geography knowledge to calculate daytime and nighttime.

原句“geography technology”搭配不当，应为“geography knowledge”。“day times and night time”应为不可数形式“daytime and nighttime”或“daytimes and nighttimes”通常用单数形式。建议：注意搭配用法（knowledge 而不是 technology），以及合成词daytime/nighttime的正确形式。

× And also last month my friends go abroad to Australia and I use my knowledge to give her some a useful.

✓ Also, last month my friend went abroad to Australia and I used my knowledge to give her some useful advice.

原句时态混用：提到“last month”需用过去时“went”；“my friends”与后文“her”数不一致，且“give her some a useful”语序和词形错误，正确表达为“give her some useful advice”。建议：叙述过去发生的事件用一般过去时，主语与代词保持一致，注意固定搭配“useful advice”。

× Yes, I want to learn about biology because actually I'm good at biology when I'm in high school, but I don't choose to go on to learn it because of some reason.

✓ Yes, I want to learn about biology because actually I was good at biology when I was in high school, but I didn't choose to continue studying it for some reasons.

原句时态不一致：谈论过去在高中擅长应使用过去时“was”。表示过去未选择继续学习也用过去时“didn't choose”。另外“go on to learn it”不自然，改为“continue studying it”；“because of some reason”应为复数或更自然的“for some reasons”或“for some reason”。建议：描述过去经历用过去时，选择更自然的短语搭配。

× And otherwise, my father and my brother, they are both doing excellent in this field and I think it is a good chance for me to talk with them.

✓ Also, my father and my brother are both doing excellently in this field, and I think it is a good chance for me to talk with them.

原句中“doing excellent”应使用副词“excellently”来修饰动词“doing”。此外“不需要在同一句中重复主语（they）”。建议：动词后作状语使用副词；避免冗余主语重复。

× Yes, of course, because nowadays a country needs many science professionals and otherwise I think science is a way to think.

✓ Yes, of course, because nowadays a country needs many science professionals, and I also think science is a way of thinking.

原句使用“otherwise”连接两句语义不合适，应使用“also”或“besides”。另外“a way to think”更自然的表达为“a way of thinking”。建议：根据句意选择合适的连词；“way of thinking”是固定搭配。

× It is the basic of how we construct things or break dancing, so we need to learn it.

✓ It is the basis of how we construct things or break down problems, so we need to learn it.

原句用词不当：“the basic”应为“the basis”；“break dancing”与句意不符，可能想表达“break down problems”或“analyze problems”。建议：选择正确名词（basis）并使用与语境一致的动词短语。

× Guest watching science TV programs is a hobby that I stick to today's when I was a child, I like to watch the CCTV night to see the science TV program.

✓ Watching science TV programs has been a hobby I stuck to since I was a child; I used to watch CCTV at night to see science programs.

原句结构混乱：“Guest watching...”无意义，应为“Watching ... has been a hobby”；“that I stick to today's when I was a child”时态和结构混用，应改为“since I was a child”或“I used to”。“CCTV night”应为“CCTV at night”。建议：理清主句和时间状语的时态关系，使用正确的连接词和介词短语。

× And now, uh, I don't like watching TV program but I like to follow the people who make videos about science in the Instagram or Bilibili.

✓ And now I don't like watching TV programs, but I like to follow people who make videos about science on Instagram or Bilibili.

原句“TV program”应复数“TV programs”；介词“in the Instagram”错误，应为“on Instagram”；“the people”可省略为“people”。建议：平台名前使用“on”，学术或媒介名词注意单复数形式和定冠词使用。