Science— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more fluent and concise: give a clear topic sentence, reduce hesitations and filler words, and add one specific reason or example. Use linking words (for example, because) to organize your answer. Keep it within 2–4 sentences.

예시: Yes, I enjoyed studying science at school because the experiments made lessons very engaging. For example, my chemistry teacher ran hands-on experiments that helped me understand reactions clearly, and her enthusiasm made the subject fun.

제안: Provide a clear direct answer then support with a concise reason and a brief example. Avoid repeated hesitation and unclear phrasing. Use linking words such as but, however, and for example to make structure clear.

예시: No, I don't use scientific knowledge in my daily work because my job is practical and focuses on manual tasks. However, basic science is useful in life—for example, I use simple physics when fixing household items.

제안: State the specific subject clearly (avoid unclear labels like 'P6'), then give one or two concise reasons and an example of how you'd study it. Reduce hesitation and repetition to improve fluency.

예시: Yes, I'd like to learn more about physics, especially mechanics, because I only learned the basics at school. For example, I want to study Newton's laws and practical problems so I can better understand how machines and vehicles work.

제안: Give a clear opinion sentence and support it with specific reasons and a small example. Reduce hesitations and improve sentence structure; use linking words such as because and for example to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Yes, I think everyone should study science because it explains many everyday phenomena and improves decision-making. For example, understanding basic biology and health science helps people make better choices about diet and hygiene.

제안: Answer directly, then give a brief reason and a specific example of a program or topic you enjoy. Avoid grammar mistakes (use correct tense) and complete your sentence without trailing off.

예시: Yes, I like watching science programs in my free time because they explain complex ideas simply. For example, I often watch documentaries about space exploration on international channels, which inspire me and teach me new facts.

× Yes, I enjoy studying science at school. It was uh, for me very interesting. And also I think it umm, you know, was uh, enjoying because I have uh, the very umm, uh, clever and smart teachers and umm, yeah, they uh, loved Mrs. subjects.

✓ Yes, I enjoy studying science at school. It is very interesting for me. I also think it is enjoyable because I have very clever and smart teachers, and they love their subjects.

The student mixed past and present tenses. The question asks about current enjoyment, so use present simple ('is', 'enjoyable'). Also 'was enjoying' is incorrect for a general state; use 'is enjoyable'. 'I have the very clever' should be 'I have very clever' (article unnecessary). 'Loved Mrs. subjects' is unclear; corrected to 'they love their subjects'. Suggestion: keep tense consistent with the present when talking about current preferences and simplify unnecessary fillers. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× No, I don't use, uh, my science knowledge daily, uh, because, uh, my, umm, job is more practical. Uh, in the, it's, uh, have no direct connection with the, the science, but I think every individual who has the, some general knowledge, it's perfect for the life.

✓ No, I don't use my science knowledge daily because my job is more practical and has no direct connection with science. However, I think everyone should have some general science knowledge because it is useful in life.

Mixed and incorrect verb forms and articles. 'It's, uh, have no direct connection' is ungrammatical; use 'has no direct connection'. 'The some general knowledge' should be 'some general knowledge' (remove article). 'It's perfect for the life' should be 'it is useful in life' or 'useful for life'. Suggestions: use clear subject-verb agreement ('job has'), remove unnecessary articles, and restructure into two sentences for clarity. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Uh, yes, Sir, there are science subject I'd like to learn more about and, uh, I think it's a P6. So when I was, uh, uh, school child, I have the basis knowledge about it, but I think I have to learn more and it's, it's very interesting and also challenging for me.

✓ Yes, Sir, there are science subjects I'd like to learn more about. When I was a schoolchild, I had basic knowledge about them, but I think I need to learn more. They are very interesting and also challenging for me.

Tense and noun-number issues. 'There are science subject' should be 'science subjects' (plural). 'When I was... school child, I have the basis knowledge' mixes past and present; use past perfect/simple past: 'I had basic knowledge'. 'Basis knowledge' is incorrect collocation; use 'basic knowledge'. 'I have to learn more' can be 'I need to learn more' to sound natural. Suggestions: match noun number, use past tense for past situations, and choose correct collocations. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× Uh, from my perspective, it's important for everyone to study science because everything, uh, which uh yeah is happened around us, uh, is, uh, connected to science. And when you have the, some knowledge about it for you, it's understandable and you are more awareness in a.

✓ From my perspective, it is important for everyone to study science because everything that happens around us is connected to science. When you have some knowledge about it, it is easier to understand things and you become more aware.

Incorrect tense 'is happened' should be simple present 'happens'. 'Everything which ... is happened' needs correct relative clause: 'everything that happens'. 'The some knowledge' should be 'some knowledge' (remove article). 'You are more awareness' is ungrammatical; use 'you become more aware' or 'you are more aware'. Suggestion: use present simple for general truths, correct relative clauses and choose the verb 'become' with 'aware'. Grammar problem type ID: 6

× If I have a free time, I always watching science TV program, so I like it and there are many international channels which provide very interesting programs about every kind of scientist subject and I try to.

✓ If I have free time, I always watch science TV programs because I like them. There are many international channels that provide very interesting programs about every kind of scientific subject, and I try to watch them.

Incorrect verb form 'always watching' should be 'always watch' with present simple for habitual actions. 'A free time' should be 'free time' (no article). 'Science TV program' should be plural 'science TV programs' to match 'always watch' and general meaning. 'Scientist subject' is wrong; use 'scientific subject'. The final clause 'and I try to' is incomplete; completed as 'and I try to watch them'. Suggestion: use present simple for routines, correct article usage, and complete sentences. Grammar problem type ID: 8