Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevabınız doğal ve anlaşılır ancak bazı dilbilgisi hataları ve gereksiz tekrarlar var. "I was 5 year olds" ifadesi yanlış, "I was 5 years old" olmalı. Ayrıca, cümlenizi daha akıcı yapmak için gereksiz kelimeleri çıkarmalı ve daha net ifadeler kullanmalısınız.

예시: I started using the internet when I was five years old, around the time the first iPods were released. I used my iPad mainly to download online games and watch children's movies.

제안: Cümleniz biraz karışık ve tekrarlayıcı. Daha net ve kısa cümleler kurmalısınız. Ayrıca, 'there isn't any timeline that I don't' ifadesi anlam açısından belirsiz. Bağlaçları doğru kullanarak cümlenizi daha akıcı yapabilirsiniz.

예시: I go online almost all the time because in modern life, we need the internet to contact family, find locations, or make calls. So, it's rare for me to be offline.

제안: Cümlenizde dilbilgisi hataları ve anlam bozuklukları var. "There were a time" yerine "there was a time" kullanılmalı. Ayrıca, cümlelerinizde daha fazla bağlaç kullanarak akıcılığı artırabilirsiniz. Son cümleniz karışık ve anlaşılması zor, daha açık ifade edin.

예시: Yes, there was a time when I wasn't allowed to use the internet because my grades were dropping due to internet addiction. I spent a lot of time on social media, so I decided to restrict myself from using it.

제안: Cümleleriniz tamamlanmamış ve anlam bütünlüğü zayıf. "I spent so much time online because." cümlesi eksik. Bağlaçları doğru kullanarak ve cümleleri tamamlayarak daha net ve akıcı cevaplar vermelisiniz.

예시: Yes, I think I spend too much time online. For example, I do my homework on the internet, and I also use social media to chat with friends and talk to my family.

제안: Cümleniz çok karışık ve bazı ifadeler anlamsız. "there but which Tavern?" gibi ifadeler düzeltilmeli. Cümlelerinizi tamamlayarak ve daha açık ifadeler kullanarak cevap vermelisiniz. Ayrıca, bağlaçlarla cümleleri birbirine bağlamalısınız.

예시: That's a scary thought because I have never lived without the internet. If there was no internet, I think I would panic since I wouldn't be able to contact anyone.

× So I think the first time I have used Internet was when I was 5 year olds and like it was a time when the first iPods came out actually.

✓ So I think the first time I used the Internet was when I was 5 years old, and it was actually the time when the first iPods came out.

The phrase '5 year olds' is incorrect because 'year olds' is plural and refers to multiple people, but here it should describe the age of a single person, so '5 years old' is correct. Also, 'have used' is not appropriate with a specific past time; simple past 'used' fits better.

× So I think the first time I have used Internet was when I was 5 year olds and like it was a time when the first iPods came out actually.

✓ So I think the first time I used the Internet was when I was 5 years old, and it was actually the time when the first iPods came out.

The word 'Internet' is a proper noun and usually requires the definite article 'the' before it.

× So yeah, I was basically using my iPad to download online games, to watch some baby movies, everything.

✓ So yeah, I was basically using my iPad to download online games, watch some baby movies, and everything else.

The phrase 'to watch some baby movies, everything' is awkward; 'and everything else' is a better way to conclude the list. Also, 'to watch' is parallel with 'to download', so it's acceptable, but adding 'and' improves clarity.

× I think if there isn't actually any time that I don't go online becauses in modern life we all have to use our phones to contact our family to look up locations or to call someone.

✓ I think there isn't actually any time when I don't go online because in modern life we all have to use our phones to contact our family, look up locations, or call someone.

The phrase 'if there isn't actually any time that I don't go online' is incorrect; 'there isn't any time when I don't go online' is correct. Also, 'becauses' is a typo for 'because'. Modal verb 'have to' is used correctly here.

× Yes, actually there were a time when I wasn't allowed to use the Internet because my grades were dropping.

✓ Yes, actually there was a time when I wasn't allowed to use the Internet because my grades were dropping.

'There were a time' is incorrect because 'time' is singular; the correct form is 'there was a time'.

× I was, I spend a lot of time in social media.

✓ I was spending a lot of time on social media.

The verb tense is inconsistent; 'was' followed by 'spend' is incorrect. The past continuous 'was spending' fits better. Also, the preposition 'in' should be 'on' for 'social media'.

× I was, I spend a lot of time in social media.

✓ I was spending a lot of time on social media.

The correct preposition with 'social media' is 'on', not 'in'.

× But the funny part was that I was my myself.

✓ But the funny part was that I was by myself.

The phrase 'I was my myself' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'I was by myself' meaning alone.

× So yes, I do think I spent so much time online because.

✓ So yes, I do think I spend too much time online because...

The sentence is about current habits, so present tense 'spend' is appropriate rather than past tense 'spent'.

× For example, when I'm looking at to do my homework, it's normally.

✓ For example, when I'm doing my homework, it's normally...

The phrase 'looking at to do my homework' is incorrect; 'doing my homework' is the correct expression.

× Moreover, when I'm looking at social media, when I'm chatting with my friend, additional when my family calls me, it's all online.

✓ Moreover, when I'm looking at social media, chatting with my friends, or when my family calls me, it's all online.

The phrase 'additional when' is incorrect; 'or when' is appropriate. Also, 'my friend' should be plural 'my friends' for generality.

× I think that's a very scary question for me because I have actually never. Lived in a world there but which Tavern? Like no Internet because when I was born they were Internet.

✓ I think that's a very scary question for me because I have actually never lived in a world without the Internet. When I was born, there was Internet.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It needs to be restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I think that's a very scary question for me because I have actually never. Lived in a world there but which Tavern? Like no Internet because when I was born they were Internet.

✓ I think that's a very scary question for me because I have actually never lived in a world without the Internet. When I was born, there was Internet.

The phrase 'no Internet' should be 'without the Internet' to use the definite article correctly.

× So what would I do if there were no Internet? I think I will freak out and I will panic a lot because I like I will not be able to contact anyone.

✓ So what would I do if there were no Internet? I think I would freak out and panic a lot because I would not be able to contact anyone.

The modal verb 'will' is incorrect in a hypothetical conditional sentence; 'would' is correct. Also, 'like I will' is redundant and incorrect.