Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答基本清晰，但有些语法错误和表达不够自然。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并注意时态和连词的使用。

예시: I started using the Internet when I was about seven years old because my parents bought the first computer in our neighborhood, which allowed me to access the Internet.

제안: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够流畅。建议简洁明了地回答问题，并使用连接词使句子更连贯。

예시: I have been going online almost every day since I was a child. Sometimes I use the Internet to search for information related to my studies, and other times I play computer games.

제안: 回答内容具体，但语法和表达有待改进。建议注意单复数和时态的正确使用，并使句子更自然。

예시: Yes, I remember once when I wanted to play a newly released computer game, but my mother didn't allow me. So, I secretly went to the internet cafe at the library to play it.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不准确。建议使用正确的时态和更自然的表达方式，同时避免重复。

예시: Yes, I think I spend too much time online, almost eight hours a day. This is an unhealthy habit, and I really want to change it by doing more exercise.

제안: 回答中有重复和语法错误。建议简洁表达，注意动词形式和句子结构，使回答更自然。

예시: If I didn't have access to the Internet, I would usually visit my close friends and sometimes go to a dance studio to learn popular dances like K-pop or jazz funk.

× I I almost do, uh, play computer every day since I was a little kid.

✓ I have almost played computer games every day since I was a little kid.

The original sentence incorrectly uses the base form 'play' after 'do' and the phrase 'almost do' is awkward. The correct form is the present perfect tense 'have played' to indicate an action continuing from the past to present. Also, 'play computer' should be 'play computer games' for clarity.

× I almost spent 8 hours per day on the Internet and I think it's an A habit.

✓ I almost spend 8 hours per day on the Internet and I think it's a bad habit.

The sentence mixes past tense 'spent' with present tense context. Since the question is about current habits, present tense 'spend' is appropriate. Also, 'an A habit' is incorrect; it should be 'a bad habit' to convey the intended meaning.

× If I don't have the access to the Internet, I usually visit some of my close friends and sometimes I also I also go to the dance studio to a learn some fashion dance such as K pop or jazz funk.

✓ If I don't have access to the Internet, I usually visit some of my close friends and sometimes I also go to the dance studio to learn some fashionable dances such as K-pop or jazz funk.

The phrase 'have the access' is incorrect; it should be 'have access' without 'the'. The phrase 'to a learn' is incorrect; it should be 'to learn'. Also, 'fashion dance' should be 'fashionable dances' for correct adjective use and plural form.

× At that time, my parents bought the first computer in our neighborhood and so that I can have the access to the Internet.

✓ At that time, my parents bought the first computer in our neighborhood so that I could have access to the Internet.

The phrase 'and so that I can have the access' is incorrect. 'So that' is used to express purpose and should not be preceded by 'and'. Also, 'can' should be changed to 'could' to match past tense context, and 'the access' should be 'access' without 'the'.