Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中存在重复和语法错误，表达不够简洁自然。建议减少重复词汇，使用更准确的时态和表达方式，使回答更流畅。

예시: I started using the internet five years ago when I was a freshman in college. I mainly used it to search for useful information and sometimes to watch videos or listen to music on YouTube.

제안: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够清晰。建议使用正确的语法结构，避免重复，并且提供更具体的细节。

예시: I usually spend about six to nine hours online each day because I study law and need to research a lot of legal information.

제안: 回答不完整且语法错误较多，表达不清楚。建议简洁明了地说明情况，避免重复，并补充原因。

예시: My parents always remind me not to use my phone or computer after 11 PM because they believe it can affect my sleep.

제안: 回答中有发音错误的拼写体现，语法不完整，表达不清晰。建议使用完整句子，避免拼写错误，并具体说明原因和影响。

예시: In my opinion, I spend too much time on my computer and phone. For example, I often watch videos on YouTube for long periods, which I think may harm my eyesight.

제안: 回答中有重复和语法错误，表达不够流畅。建议简洁表达，避免重复，并使用正确的介词和词汇。

예시: If I couldn't use the internet, I would read textbooks for my studies and do leisure activities like running in the park and swimming.

× I started to use the Internet for for searching some useful information and furthermore sometimes I will use the YouTube to listen some music and watch some videos by by using the Internet.

✓ I started to use the Internet for searching some useful information and furthermore sometimes I use YouTube to listen to some music and watch some videos by using the Internet.

动词后面接动名词时，介词后应使用动名词形式。这里“for searching”正确，但“listen some music”应为“listen to some music”，因为“listen”后面需要介词“to”。另外，“will use”在描述习惯时应使用一般现在时“use”。

× I will use the YouTube to listen some music and watch some videos by by using the Internet.

✓ I use YouTube to listen to some music and watch some videos by using the Internet.

“listen”后面需要介词“to”，即“listen to music”。另外，“the YouTube”中的“the”不需要，YouTube作为专有名词不加冠词。

× I spend about 6 hours or or 9 for a day because I'm studying law and I should I should search a lot of the information about a law so it's may send me a lot of time on Internet.

✓ I spend about 6 or 9 hours a day because I'm studying law and I should search a lot of information about law, so it may take me a lot of time on the Internet.

“a lot of the information”中“the”不需要，且“a law”应为“law”表示学科。时间表达应为“6 or 9 hours a day”。“send me a lot of time”应为“take me a lot of time”。

× so it's may send me a lot of time on Internet.

✓ so it may take me a lot of time on the Internet.

“on Internet”应加定冠词“the”，正确表达为“on the Internet”。

× I I always remind by my parents that I shouldn't use the cell phone or the OR the computer after 11:00 PM because because they said if I use the Internet at the time.

✓ I am always reminded by my parents that I shouldn't use the cell phone or the computer after 11:00 PM because they said if I use the Internet at that time.

“remind”被动语态应为“am reminded”。“the OR the computer”中“OR”多余，应去掉。时间表达“at the time”应为“at that time”。

× I I always remind by my parents that I shouldn't use the cell phone or the OR the computer after 11:00 PM because because they said if I use the Internet at the time.

✓ I am always reminded by my parents that I shouldn't use the cell phone or the computer after 11:00 PM because they said if I use the Internet at that time.

“remind”应使用被动语态“am reminded”，且“OR”不应出现在句中。

× I think I smell thank too much time on the on the computer and the cell phone.

✓ I think I spend too much time on the computer and the cell phone.

“smell thank”是错误表达，应为“spend”。“too much time”用法正确。

× sometimes I will watch the videos on the YouTube on the cell phone for too much time.

✓ sometimes I watch videos on YouTube on my cell phone for too long.

“the YouTube”不需要冠词，应为“YouTube”。“for too much time”应改为“for too long”表示时间过长。

× I think this may deteriorate my eye vision and I should.

✓ I think this may deteriorate my eyesight and I should be careful.

“eye vision”应为“eyesight”。句子不完整，应补充完整表达。

× I will read the read a textbook for my subjects and furthermore, and I will do some leisure activities such as running on a park and swimming.

✓ I will read textbooks for my subjects and furthermore, I will do some leisure activities such as running in a park and swimming.

“read the read a textbook”重复，应删去多余部分。“running on a park”应为“running in a park”，介词使用错误。