Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer provides good details but is a bit long and slightly redundant. Try to make your response more concise and natural by focusing on the main point and using simpler phrasing. Also, start with a clear topic sentence directly answering the question.

예시: I started using the internet when I was six years old. Back then, there was no Wi-Fi in India, so we used a USB modem that connected to the internet through a postpaid service.

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and grammatically awkward. Make sure to directly answer the question with a clear topic sentence and use linking words to connect your ideas logically. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'much of the time of every day' and be more specific.

예시: I go online several hours every day because the internet helps me find information quickly and stay in touch with friends through emails and social media.

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be improved by adding linking words and slightly more detail to make it more natural and coherent.

예시: Yes, when I was six, I wasn't allowed to use the internet freely. Whenever I did get a chance, it was only under my parents' supervision because they were worried about online dangers.

제안: Good answer with clear opinion and examples. To improve, use more natural phrasing and linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: No, I don't think I spend too much time online because I make an effort to do other activities. For instance, I prefer reading books, going for walks, or meeting friends in person instead of always being online.

제안: Your answer is informative but a bit repetitive with the word 'relying'. Try to vary your vocabulary and use linking words to make your answer more natural and fluent.

예시: If there were no internet, I would go back to traditional ways like using libraries for information, reading newspapers and watching news channels for updates, and enjoying entertainment through TV and radio.

× I started to use Internet back when I was six years old.

✓ I started to use the Internet back when I was six years old.

The word 'Internet' is a proper noun that requires the definite article 'the' before it in this context. Omitting 'the' is a common error when referring to the Internet as a unique entity.

× At that time there was no Wi-Fi available at any of the places in India.

✓ At that time there was no Wi-Fi available in any of the places in India.

The preposition 'in' is used to indicate something existing inside a location or area, which is appropriate here. Using 'at' is incorrect because it usually refers to a specific point rather than a general area.

× Instead there was a plug in modem which came in USB options via different companies.

✓ Instead there was a plug-in modem which came with USB options from different companies.

The phrase 'came in USB options' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'with' to indicate the modem included USB options. Also, 'via' is better replaced with 'from' when referring to companies providing products.

× It was usually a postpaid service and provided instant Internet to the connected devices.

✓ It was usually a postpaid service and provided instant Internet to connected devices.

The definite article 'the' before 'connected devices' is unnecessary here because it refers to devices in general, not specific ones. Removing 'the' makes the sentence more natural.

× Due to the vast information available online and ease of connection with other people, much of the time of every day spent on the Internet, whether it be researching any topic or just sending a quick e-mail to a friend.

✓ Due to the vast information available online and ease of connection with other people, much of every day is spent on the Internet, whether researching any topic or just sending a quick e-mail to a friend.

The original sentence lacks a main verb in the second clause, making it incomplete. Adding 'is' after 'much of every day' corrects the sentence structure and clarifies the meaning.

× Yes, when I was six years old I wasn't allowed to use Internet and whenever I did get a chance to use it, it was under supervision of my parents due to possible malicious intent of people available online.

✓ Yes, when I was six years old I wasn't allowed to use the Internet and whenever I did get a chance to use it, it was under the supervision of my parents due to possible malicious intent of people online.

'Internet' requires the definite article 'the'. Also, 'supervision' is a noun that typically takes the definite article 'the' when referring to a specific instance. The phrase 'people available online' is better expressed as 'people online' for naturalness.

× No, I don't think so because I try to keep my mind off Internet in every way possible.

✓ No, I don't think so because I try to keep my mind off the Internet in every way possible.

The phrase 'off Internet' requires the definite article 'the' before 'Internet'. This is standard usage when referring to the Internet as a unique entity.

× For example, instead of going online, I prefer reading a book or go for a walk outside or connecting with my friends through offline methods.

✓ For example, instead of going online, I prefer reading a book, going for a walk outside, or connecting with my friends through offline methods.

The verbs in the list should be parallel in form. Mixing 'prefer reading' with 'go' and 'connecting' is inconsistent. Changing all to gerund forms ('reading', 'going', 'connecting') maintains parallel structure.

× Without the Internet, I would revert back to the old methods that we had before the Internet existed, that is, relying on libraries for information, relying on newspapers and news channels for daily updates, and relying on media channels for our entertainment security.

✓ Without the Internet, I would revert to the old methods that we had before the Internet existed, that is, relying on libraries for information, newspapers and news channels for daily updates, and media channels for our entertainment and security.

The phrase 'revert back' is redundant; 'revert' alone suffices. Also, the repeated 'relying on' is unnecessary after the first instance. Adding 'and' between 'entertainment' and 'security' clarifies the meaning.