Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答时态使用不准确，应该用过去时；内容重复，表达不够简洁自然。建议使用过去时态，避免重复表达“convenient”，并且句子结构更自然。

예시: I started using the Internet when I was in primary school. At that time, it was new and fascinating to me. It made it easy to keep in touch with my friends and family, which I really enjoyed.

제안: 回答中有重复词汇，句子不完整，表达不够流畅。建议避免重复，补充完整句子，并使用连接词使表达更连贯。

예시: I go online almost every day, especially during my spare time. I find it an excellent way to relax and reduce stress after a busy day. For example, I usually catch up on my favorite TV shows online.

제안: 回答表达混乱，语法错误较多，信息不完整。建议理清句子结构，使用正确的时态和语法，完整表达意思。

예시: Yes, I remember when I was a child, my parents didn't allow me to use the Internet because they wanted me to focus on my homework.

제안: 表达不够自然，语法和词汇使用有误。建议使用更自然的表达方式，避免重复，句子更流畅。

예시: Yes, I think I spend too much time online because I use it almost every day. For example, I often watch my favorite TV shows on the Internet.

제안: 表达不够地道，词汇搭配不准确。建议使用更自然的表达，避免直译，句子更流畅。

예시: If I didn't have the Internet, I would do some sports, especially yoga. I think it's a great way to pass the time and stay in good shape.

× I start using the Internet when I'm in primary school.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was in primary school.

这里描述的是过去发生的动作，应该使用过去时态。原句中使用了现在时态“start”，应改为过去时态“started”。同时，“I'm”应改为过去时态“was”。

× It's very new and interesting to me at that time.

✓ It was very new and interesting to me at that time.

“at that time”表示过去的时间，句子应使用过去时态，故“is”应改为“was”。

× It's very convenient for me to keep in touch with my friends or family.

✓ It was very convenient for me to keep in touch with my friends or family.

同样，“at that time”表示过去，句子应使用过去时态，故“is”应改为“was”。

× I start using the Internet when I'm in primary school. It's very new and interesting to me at that time. It's very convenient for me to keep in touch with my friends or family. It's more convenient and fun.

✓ I started using the Internet when I was in primary school. It was very new and interesting to me at that time. It was very convenient for me to keep in touch with my friends or family. It was more convenient and fun.

整段描述过去的经历，时态应统一为过去时。

× I I go online almost every day, especially on on my spare time.

✓ I go online almost every day, especially in my spare time.

“spare time”前应使用介词“in”，而非“on”。

× For example. I also I usually use it to catch up on my favorite TV shows or.

✓ For example, I usually use it to catch up on my favorite TV shows.

原句断句错误，且“or”后无内容，应删除“or”，并将句号改为逗号连接句子。

× Yes, I recall the time that was in my childhood that my parents weren't allowed to use the Internet.

✓ Yes, I recall a time in my childhood when I wasn't allowed to use the Internet.

原句表达不清，且“my parents weren't allowed to use the Internet”与语境不符，应改为“我不被允许使用互联网”，且“that was in my childhood that”结构不正确，应改为“a time in my childhood when”。

× They are they want I focused on my homework.

✓ They wanted me to focus on my homework.

原句中“they are they want I focused”结构混乱，主语和宾语使用错误，应改为“they wanted me to focus”。

× They just.

✓ They just wanted me to study.

句子不完整，缺少谓语和宾语，需补充完整。

× I think I'm quite dependent on Internet and I use it almost every day.

✓ I think I'm quite dependent on the Internet and I use it almost every day.

“Internet”前应加定冠词“the”，表示特指互联网。

× I spend much time on it, especially such as I usually use it to catch up my TV shows.

✓ I spend a lot of time on it, especially since I usually use it to catch up on my TV shows.

“much time”通常用于否定句或疑问句，肯定句应使用“a lot of time”；“catch up”后应加介词“on”；“especially such as”用法重复，应改为“especially since”。

× I usually use it to catch up my TV shows.

✓ I usually use it to catch up on my TV shows.

“catch up”后应接介词“on”，构成短语“catch up on”，表示补看。

× I would do some sports without the Internet, especially the yoga.

✓ I would do some sports without the Internet, especially yoga.

“the yoga”中“yoga”作为运动项目，不需要冠词“the”。

× I think it's a second excellent way to kill time and make me have a good shape.

✓ I think it's a second excellent way to kill time and help me stay in good shape.

“second excellent way”表达不自然，应改为“another excellent way”；“make me have a good shape”表达不正确，应改为“help me stay in good shape”。