Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答总体清晰，但存在语法小错误、重复和口头语（如“uh”）。可以更简洁自然地表达时间点，使用更准确的动词形式，并避免冗余。建议把主题句放在开头，随后用一两句具体细节支持，注意连词使用。

예시: I first started using the internet in primary school. Back then I mainly used it to look up information for homework and to play educational games, which made school life more enjoyable.

제안: 回答涵盖原因和方式，但表达啰嗦且有重复（"online"和"connect online"）。有些词组不太地道（"social demands"）。建议使用更自然的短语并用连接词组织句子，限制在两到三句内。

예시: I go online every day because of work and socializing. For example, I use messaging apps to chat with friends and email to communicate with colleagues.

제안: 回答直接且有理由，但有些表达冗长且语法不够简洁（如"in case of cheating"和"students cheating behavior"）。建议用更自然的表达并加入小幅扩展来展示观点。

예시: Yes. During exams we were prohibited from using the internet to prevent cheating, which I think is a sensible rule to ensure fairness.

제안: 回答有说服力但口头语较多且句子结构不太自然（"set a limit for me to use"）。应避免自我评价过多，改用具体例子说明如何控制上网时间，并减少填充语。

예시: No, I don't think so. I set daily time limits on social media and usually turn off notifications after 9 pm so I can focus on family and hobbies.

제안: 回答包含具体活动，但句子结尾未完成且部分表达冗余（"the presence of the Internet"、"By the way"）。建议用两到三句完整自然地描述主要活动并给出原因或感受。

예시: If I had no internet, I would spend more time painting because it gives me a sense of achievement, and I would also go for long walks to enjoy nature and relax.

× I started to browse the Internet when I was just a primary school student.

✓ I started browsing the Internet when I was a primary school student.

句子中動詞 start 通常接動名詞（-ing）來表示開始做某事。原句使用不定式 to browse 也並非完全錯誤，但更自然常用的搭配是 started + -ing。建議：將 to browse 改為 browsing 使表達更地道。

× because I could use Internet to, uh, finish my homework as well as playing some video games on the Internet, which added spice to my boring school life.

✓ because I could use the Internet to finish my homework as well as play some video games on the Internet, which added spice to my boring school life.

“Internet” 前需加定冠詞 the。並且在連接兩個動詞短語時（use ... to finish ... as well as play ...）要保持動詞形式一致，使用不定式或動名詞，但在此結構中用不定式 to finish ... and play ... 更清晰。建議：在 Internet 前加 the，並把 playing 改為 play 以保持平行結構。

× Currently, I am online on a regular basis because of the social demands as well as the working requirements, and I use the technology to connect with my friends online.

✓ Currently, I am online on a regular basis because of social demands and work requirements, and I use technology to connect with my friends online.

原句中的冠詞和名詞搭配不自然：通常說 social demands 和 work requirements，不需加 the 或 the working。technology 在此泛指網絡工具，也不用加 the。建議：刪除多餘冠詞並改用 work requirements，語句更簡潔自然。

× By the way, I also use emails to contact with others such as my colleagues.

✓ By the way, I also use email to contact others such as my colleagues.

動詞 contact 後直接接對象，不用介詞 with（contact with 為錯用）。此外，email 作為不可數或集體概念時常用單數形式。建議：去掉 with，將 emails 改為 email。

× Can you remember a time you weren’t allowed to use the internet?

✓ Can you remember a time when you weren’t allowed to use the Internet?

在引導時間子句時，常用 when 來銜接 a time 與從句。且 Internet 前加定冠詞 the。建議：在 a time 與從句間加 when，並將 internet 改為 the Internet。

× I was not allowed to use the Internet in case of cheating in the exam.

✓ I was not allowed to use the Internet during exams to prevent cheating.

in case of 用於表示“以防”的情況，但與本句語義和時態不太搭配；更自然的表達是 during exams / in examinations 或 to prevent cheating 表示目的。建議：改為 during exams to prevent cheating。

× I thought it was totally understandable and it was also a good policy to avoid students cheating behavior.

✓ I thought it was totally understandable and it was also a good policy to prevent students from cheating.

原句中 cheating behavior 的搭配不自然，應使用 prevent sb from doing sth 結構來表示阻止學生作弊。建議：將 avoid students cheating behavior 改為 prevent students from cheating。

× I don't think I am addicted to the Internet because I regard myself as a self disciplined person.

✓ I don't think I am addicted to the Internet because I regard myself as a self-disciplined person.

self disciplined 作為複合形容詞應加連字號 self-disciplined，或寫作 self disciplined 但更標準的是 self-disciplined。建議：加連字號或改為 hyphenated 形式。

× In addition, I actually set a limit for me to, uh, use my electronic gadgets so that I can, uh, pay attention to other things in my life.

✓ In addition, I actually set a limit for myself on using my electronic gadgets so that I can pay attention to other things in my life.

英文中應使用 reflexive pronoun myself（而不是 for me）。set a limit on/upon doing sth 或 set a limit for oneself 都可，且使用 on using 更自然。建議：把 for me 改為 for myself 並調整介詞結構為 on using。

× There are many things that I can do without the presence of the Internet.

✓ There are many things I can do without the Internet.

the presence of the Internet 表達冗長，不自然。常用 without the Internet 表示沒有網絡的情況。建議：簡化為 without the Internet，使句子更自然流暢。

× For instance, I can spend time painting and through this process, I can gain a great sense of achievement and fulfillment.

✓ For instance, I can spend time painting, and through this process I can gain a great sense of achievement and fulfillment.

原句語法本身問題不大，但缺少逗號分隔並且連接詞使用後應保持句子流暢。建議在 painting 後加逗號並刪去多餘停頓詞，使語流更自然。

× By the way, I also go out for a walk to enjoy the stunning views and.

✓ By the way, I also go out for a walk to enjoy the stunning views.

句子末尾出現不完整的連詞 and，導致句子不完整。應刪去多餘的 and 或補充後續內容。建議：刪去 and 以完成句子。