Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be direct and concise: give a clear time reference and avoid fillers. Use a complete sentence with correct prepositions (e.g., "in 10th grade" or "when I was fifteen"). You can add one brief detail about how you used it then to enrich the answer.

예시: I started using the internet in 10th grade, when I was about fifteen. Back then I mainly used it to search for school information and learn English.

제안: Don't ask for clarification unless truly necessary. Interpret the question as frequency (e.g., daily, several times a day) and respond with a clear frequency phrase, then add a short reason or typical activity to support it.

예시: I go online several times a day, usually to check messages, read news, and watch short videos.

제안: Give a specific example and structure the answer: state one clear situation when you were not allowed or chose not to use the internet, then explain why and what you did instead. Avoid rambling and emotional labels without explanation.

예시: Yes. For example, during an important exam period last year my parents restricted my internet use so I could focus on studying. Without the internet, I spent more time revising textbooks and doing past papers.

제안: Answer directly and give reasons and one or two specific examples of what you do online. Try to use linking words (for example, because, so) and avoid repetition and fillers.

예시: Yes, I think I spend too much time online because I often watch short video reels and chat with friends for hours. As a result, I sometimes watch movies late at night and play mobile games instead of sleeping.

제안: Provide a clear conditional statement (If I didn't have the internet, I would...) and give specific activities you would do instead. Keep it concise and coherent, using one or two supporting details to show how you'd spend your time.

예시: If I didn't have the internet, I would spend my free time reading medical textbooks and going for runs after my 12-hour shifts. I would also socialise with colleagues or practice clinical skills to improve my work.

× Actually, I started using Internet, umm, since I was, uh, in, uh, 10th grade.

✓ Actually, I started using the internet since I was in tenth grade.

Use of the definite article 'the' is required before 'internet' (Article errors). Also, use 'tenth' instead of numeral '10th' in formal speech; remove filler words. The sentence uses 'since' with a starting point correctly, so keep present perfect or simple past 'started' is acceptable with 'since' here as a spoken narrative.

× What do you mean by how often do I go online? I don't understand that question.

✓ What do you mean by 'how often I go online'? I don't understand the question.

Original has unclear embedded question structure (Sentence structure errors). When reporting a question, use a noun clause: 'what do you mean by how often I go online' or quote it. Also 'that question' is acceptable but 'the question' is more natural. Use consistent phrasing to avoid ambiguity.

× Where is lot of times that I am not allowed to use it like uh, studying, like uh, working, umm, when I get bored from using it when uh, I entered depression or, or feeling depression.

✓ There are a lot of times when I am not allowed to use it, like when I am studying, working, when I get bored of using it, or when I feel depressed.

Multiple preposition and structure errors (Incorrect use of prepositions). 'Where' should be 'There are', 'a lot of times' needs 'a' and plural verb. Use 'when' not 'that' for times. Use 'bored of' (or 'bored with') instead of 'bored from'. Use 'feel depressed' rather than 'entered depression'. Also adjust verb forms and add commas for clarity.

× Yes, yes I do. I actually, I umm, uh, I don't have uh, I don't know what to do. And so I spent a lot of time uh, chatting, uh, uh, watching reels, umm uh, watching movies, uh, playing games like this.

✓ Yes, I do. Actually, I don't know what else to do, so I spend a lot of time chatting, watching reels, watching movies, and playing games.

Tense inconsistency (Present tense issue). The speaker says 'I do' (present) but then 'I spent' (past). For habitual action use present simple 'I spend'. Also remove repetitions and fillers, use 'what else to do' for clarity, and list activities with parallel gerunds.

× Uh, actually I'm an intern Dr. I'm working at Al Zahra Hospital, uh, I have uh, to work for days, uh, weekly, uh, 12 hours, uh, daily, so I can enjoy my time or I can use my time if I don't have Internet.

✓ Actually, I'm a medical intern. I work at Al Zahra Hospital. I have to work 12 hours a day, several days a week, so I can enjoy my time or use it differently if I don't have the internet.

Pronoun and article issues plus awkward phrasing (Incorrect use of pronouns and Article errors). 'An intern Dr.' is incorrect; use 'a medical intern' or 'an intern doctor'. Break into sentences for clarity. Use '12 hours a day' not '12 hours daily' together with 'several days a week' instead of 'for days, weekly'. Use 'the internet' with article. Adjust pronouns and phrasing for natural English.