Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cümlenizdeki dilbilgisi hatalarını düzeltin (ör. "started to using" → "started using", "Internet" küçük harfle veya düzgün bağlamda). Cevabınızı doğrudan bir konu cümlesiyle başlatın, ardından kısa ve ilgili ayrıntılar verin. Bilgi verirken daha doğal bağlaçlar kullanın ve gereksiz tekrarları kaldırın.

예시: I started using the internet when I was eight. At first I mainly played video games, but I also used it to look up information for my homework. Over time I began to explore other websites for learning and entertainment.

제안: Soruyu doğrudan ve daha açık şekilde cevaplayın; gereksiz ifadeler (ör. "Thank you") konuşma akışını kesebilir. Sıklık belirtmek için net zaman ifadeleri kullanın (günlük/haftalık) ve kısa destekleyici neden ekleyin. Dilbilgisine dikkat edin ("the Internet" veya "the internet").

예시: I don't go online very often. Usually I use the internet a few times a week for checking messages and watching videos because I prefer spending time outside or with friends.

제안: Cümle akışınızı basitleştirin ve gereksiz tekrarları azaltın (çok fazla "uh" ve tekrar eden ifadeler). Zaman kiplerine dikkat edin ("can't, couldn't" yerine uygun geçmiş zaman kullanın). Bağlaçlarla cümleleri mantıklı şekilde birleştirin ve süreyi net ifade edin.

예시: Yes. This year I traveled to Japan with my girlfriend and we had to turn off internet access on the plane. For about fourteen hours I couldn't use my phone, so I read and talked to my girlfriend instead.

제안: Zaman uyumuna dikkat edin ("spent" → "spend"). Cevabınızı doğrudan verin ve nedenlerinizi kısa bağlaçlarla destekleyin. "Girlfriends" yerine "friends" veya "my girlfriend" açıklığa kavuşturun; fazla dolgu sözcüklerinden kaçının.

예시: No, I don't think I spend too much time online compared with my friends, because I prefer going out with friends and watching films. I usually meet people at weekends instead of staying online.

제안: Cümledeki zaman ifadelerini ve kelime seçimlerini netleştirin ("before 40 years ago" → "40 years ago" veya "in the past"). "Profit the time" yanlış kullanım; yerine "enjoy their time" veya "make the most of their time" kullanın. Verilerinizi örneklerle destekleyin ve cümleyi daha kısa tutun.

예시: I think I would find other activities to enjoy. Forty years ago people lived without the internet, and my parents spent time reading, socializing and pursuing hobbies, so I could do the same — read books, exercise or meet friends.

× I started to using Internet when I was 8 years old for playing video games and doing some little research about my homeworks.

✓ I started using the internet when I was 8 years old to play video games and do a little research for my homework.

The verb 'start' is followed by the base form or gerund, but not 'to' + gerund. Use 'started using' or 'started to use'. Also 'Internet' is a common noun here and should be lowercase 'internet'. Use infinitive 'to play' for purpose and 'do a little research' is more natural. 'Homeworks' is uncountable in English; use 'homework'. Suggestions: say 'I started using the internet when I was 8 to play video games and do a little research for my homework.'

× I haven't thought about it before, but I don't like using Internet too much. Thank you.

✓ I haven't thought about it before, but I don't use the internet very much.

'Haven't thought about it before' is acceptable, but 'I don't like using Internet too much' is unnatural for frequency. Use 'I don't use the internet very much' to describe habitual action. Also 'Internet' should be lowercase and 'too much' is better as 'very much' here. Suggestion: 'I haven't thought about it before, but I don't use the internet very much.'

× Uh, yes, this year, uh, I went to Japan with my girlfriend and during the plane, uh, we have to close, we had to close our Internet. So for 14 hours duration I can't, couldn't use my cell phone.

✓ Yes, this year I went to Japan with my girlfriend and during the flight we had to turn off the internet. So for 14 hours I couldn't use my cell phone.

Mix of tenses and wrong verbs: 'during the plane' should be 'during the flight'. Use past tense consistently: 'we had to turn off the internet' and 'I couldn't use my cell phone.' 'Can't' is present; replace with 'couldn't' for past. 'Turn off' is the correct verb for disabling a service. Also 'duration' is unnecessary. Suggestion: 'During the flight we had to turn off the internet, so for 14 hours I couldn't use my cell phone.'

× Uh, as compared to my friends, I don't think that I spent too much time online because, uh, more I prefer to go out with my girlfriends and watching films.

✓ Compared to my friends, I don't think that I spend too much time online because I prefer to go out with my girlfriends and watch films.

Mix of present and past: use present simple 'I don't think I spend' for habitual actions. 'More I prefer' is incorrect word order; use 'I prefer'. After 'prefer' use the infinitive 'to go out' or base form 'go out', and parallel structure requires 'watch films' not 'watching films'. 'Girlfriends' can be correct if multiple female friends; if referring to one partner, use 'my girlfriend'. Suggestion: 'I don't think I spend too much time online because I prefer to go out with my friends and watch films.'

× I think I can find other stuff to do because before 40 years ago there wasn't Internet and my mother and father enjoyed and profit the time, so I guess I can find lots of stuff to do.

✓ I think I can find other things to do because 40 years ago there wasn't any internet and my mother and father enjoyed and made good use of their time, so I guess I can find lots of things to do.

'Before 40 years ago there wasn't Internet' is ungrammatical; use '40 years ago there wasn't any internet' or 'before the internet'. 'There wasn't any internet' corrects 'There be' usage with negation and quantifier 'any'. 'Stuff' is informal; use 'things'. 'Enjoyed and profit the time' is incorrect: use 'enjoyed and made good use of their time' or 'benefited from their time'. Maintain past tense 'enjoyed'. Suggestion: 'I think I can find other things to do because 40 years ago there wasn't any internet, and my parents enjoyed and made good use of their time.'