Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Clarify and correct meaning, use a clear topic sentence, avoid garbled phrases, and keep it concise. Mention when you started and give one or two specific examples of early uses. Use linking words for coherence.

예시: I started using the Internet when I was in middle school. At that time I used it mainly to research school projects and to play simple online games. Those activities felt revolutionary because they made information and entertainment much more accessible.

제안: Good content and clear structure. Improve natural phrasing and reduce minor redundancy. Use one linking word and give a brief specific example of a typical online activity to strengthen the answer.

예시: I go online almost all the time, mainly through my smartphone. For example, I check work emails first thing in the morning and later browse social media during short breaks.

제안: The answer is unclear due to many garbled phrases. Provide a direct topic sentence, state when and why you were restricted, and give one specific detail about how it helped you study. Keep it brief and coherent with linking words.

예시: Yes. During my high school finals my parents restricted my internet access so I could concentrate on revision. As a result I spent more time studying in the evenings and my grades improved.

제안: Good honesty and content. Improve vocabulary and phrasing (e.g., 'set boundaries' and 'productive activities') and add one specific plan to reduce screen time to make the answer more concrete.

예시: To be honest, yes. I often mindlessly scroll through short videos, so I'm planning to set a one-hour daily limit and replace evening scrolling with reading or exercise.

제안: Clear and relevant answer. Improve grammar and word choice ('vanished', 'pace of life') and add a brief specific example of an offline activity to make it more vivid.

예시: If the Internet vanished, I'd spend more time reading physical books and going hiking. For example, I would join a local book club and meet friends for weekly walks in the park.

× I first accessed the weight when I was in middle school around the A of town Italy is returned for rudimentary task like researching school projects or playing simple online games with field quality revolutionary at the time.

✓ I first accessed the internet when I was in middle school in a small town in Italy to do simple tasks like researching school projects or playing simple online games, which felt revolutionary at the time.

The original sentence contains many incorrect words and a confused structure, so it is a sentence structure error (ID 26). 'weight' should be 'internet'; 'around the A of town Italy is returned' is garbled and should be 'in a small town in Italy'; 'for rudimentary task' needs plural and 'to do simple tasks'; 'with field quality revolutionary' is incorrect and should be 'which felt revolutionary'. Suggestion: simplify the sentence into clear clauses, use correct nouns and articles, and ensure subject, verb and objects are in logical order.

× Practically every hour in this day and night, I'm virtually always connected through my smartphone.

✓ Practically day and night, I'm almost always connected through my smartphone.

This is primarily an incorrect adverb placement issue (ID 20). 'Every hour in this day and night' is awkward; 'day and night' or 'practically day and night' is natural. 'Virtually always' is acceptable but 'almost always' is more idiomatic. Suggestion: place time expressions before the main clause and choose a single idiomatic adverb.

× Whether it is for taking work emails or scrolling through social media, the Internet has become an indispensable part of my daily routine.

✓ Whether it is for checking work emails or scrolling through social media, the internet has become an indispensable part of my daily routine.

This is a verb-form issue related to using the correct verb collocation (closest to ID 8/9 but mapped to Verb + -ing form ID 8). 'Taking work emails' is incorrect; the usual collocation is 'checking work emails'. Also 'Internet' can be lowercase 'internet' in general usage. Suggestion: use common collocations like 'check emails' and keep capitalization consistent.

× Certainly during my high school finals, my parents retreated my assets to the weak to ensure I stayed focused on my study is for digital the stock.

✓ During my high school finals, my parents restricted my access to the internet to ensure I stayed focused on my studies.

The original sentence is garbled with wrong words; this is an incorrect pronoun/word choice and structure error (ID 12 and 26). 'Retreated my assets to the weak' makes no sense; correct meaning is 'restricted my access'. 'Study is for digital the stock' should be 'studies'. Suggestion: use 'restricted my access to the internet' and plural 'studies' for general academic work.

× Umm, that's worth quiet brooks of fruits rights trading, but you to make they have migrate.

✓ Umm, that was meant to help me focus, but I remember it was difficult for me at the time.

This sentence is unintelligible due to incorrect words and structure, so classify as sentence structure error (ID 26). The original contains nonsense phrases; correct to a clear, coherent statement that fits context. Suggestion: replace unclear fragments with concise, meaningful phrases that express intent.

× To be honest, yes, I often find myself mindlessly scrolling through short videos for hours on end.

✓ To be honest, yes, I often find myself mindlessly scrolling through short videos for hours on end.

This sentence is grammatically correct for present habitual action (ID 6). No correction needed. Explanation: 'Often find myself' plus '-ing' continuous action correctly expresses habitual behavior; keep as is.

× I really need to say some boundaries and reduce my screen time to focus more on productive relay activity.

✓ I really need to set some boundaries and reduce my screen time to focus more on productive, real activities.

This is a verb collocation and word-choice error (ID 8). 'Say some boundaries' is incorrect; use 'set boundaries'. 'Productive relay activity' is garbled; likely intended 'productive, real activities'. Suggestion: use correct phrasal verbs like 'set boundaries' and choose accurate nouns.

× If the Internet vanish, I'd likely revert to more traditional hobbies like reading physical books or spending more time outdoors.

✓ If the internet vanished, I'd likely revert to more traditional hobbies like reading physical books or spending more time outdoors.

This conditional sentence uses a past-tense subordinate clause and modal in the main clause, so the correct form is 'vanished' (past) not 'vanish' (ID 5/27). Use the second conditional structure: 'If X happened, I would Y.' Also 'internet' can be lowercase. Suggestion: use past simple in the if-clause for unreal present/future situations.

× I definitely have to embrace a much slower pay of life and communicate more in person.

✓ I would definitely have to embrace a much slower pace of life and communicate more in person.

This contains word-choice and modal/context issues (ID 4 and 13). 'Pay of life' is wrong; correct noun is 'pace of life'. In the hypothetical situation following 'If the internet vanished...', 'would' is appropriate in the main clause rather than present 'have to'. Suggestion: use 'would' for hypothetical results and correct noun 'pace'.