Internet— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Говорите короче и грамотно: начните с прямого ответа (I started...), используйте правильные времена и порядок слов, замените слова-ловушки («how can I use») на корректные фразы, добавьте одну уточняющую деталь. Избегайте повторов.

예시: I started using the Internet when I was about six or seven years old. My father showed me how to use a phone and helped me download apps, so I learned gradually.

제안: Сформулируйте прямой ответ с цифрой или частотой, затем используйте связующее слово и приведите 1–2 конкретные причины. Упростите фразы и избегайте тавтологии («just» повторяется).

예시: I go online several times a day, usually for about three to four hours in total, because I use the Internet for studying and for chatting with teachers and friends.

제안: Начните с короткого прямого ответа, затем опишите конкретную ситуацию с указанием места и действия. Уберите лишние слова и исправьте порядок слов, используйте связку для плавности.

예시: Yes. Once my family and I went hiking in the mountains near my hometown where there was no Wi‑Fi, so I only used my camera to take photos.

제안: Отвечайте чётко: согласны ли вы с утверждением, укажите пример времени и причину. Сформулируйте причину ясно (study, entertainment) и избегайте неуклюжих выражений («creative my daily routine»).

예시: Yes, I do. I use my phone for about eight or nine hours a day, mainly for studying, social media and creative tasks like editing photos.

제안: Дайте прямой ответ и перечислите 2 конкретных действия с короткими пояснениями. Исправьте грамматику и порядок слов (например, «I have a lot of books that I haven't read yet»).

예시: Without the Internet, I would read more books I haven't had time for and spend more time going out with my friends, such as visiting parks or cafés.

× So I remember that I start using the Internet when I was a child and I was maybe 6 or 7 years old.

✓ So I remember that I started using the Internet when I was a child and I was maybe 6 or 7 years old.

The speaker is recounting a past event, so the verb should be in the past tense. Use 'started' instead of 'start' to match 'when I was a child' and maintain consistent past narration.

× I didn't remember well but I can say that my father told me how can I use my phone and supported me with downloaded.

✓ I didn't remember well, but I can say that my father told me how I could use my phone and helped me download apps.

Mixed tenses and incorrect word order: in reported speech use 'how I could' rather than 'how can I'. 'Supported me with downloaded' is ungrammatical; use 'helped me download' and specify object 'apps' to be clear. Keep past tense throughout.

× To be honest, I go online several times a day because it's very crucial for me be online and I can say that there are several parts which can vary important to me.

✓ To be honest, I go online several times a day because it's very important for me to be online, and I can say that there are several aspects that are very important to me.

Omitted 'to' before the infinitive: 'to be online'. 'Crucial for me be online' should be 'crucial for me to be online'. 'Parts which can vary important' is awkward and ungrammatical; use 'aspects that are very important'. Maintain present tense.

× It can be just my education or just my chat with my teachers, my tutor or just chat with my friends or just scrolling media.

✓ It can be my education, chatting with my teachers or tutor, chatting with my friends, or just scrolling through social media.

Preposition 'through' is needed with 'scrolling' for the usual collocation 'scrolling through social media'. Use gerunds for parallel activities: 'chatting', 'scrolling'. Remove redundant 'just'.

× So of course I remember that my family and I went to the hiking to the large mountains which located in my hometown and there are there aren't Internet and Wi-Fi.

✓ So of course I remember that my family and I went hiking in the large mountains near my hometown, and there wasn't any Internet or Wi-Fi there.

Wrong use of 'there are there aren't' and incorrect verb form. Use 'there wasn't any Internet or Wi-Fi' to correctly express absence in the past. Use 'went hiking' not 'went to the hiking', and 'in' or 'to' the mountains; 'near my hometown' is clearer.

× And I remember that I used only camera because I want to.

✓ And I remember that I only used the camera because I wanted to.

Tense inconsistency: past narrative needs 'wanted' not 'want'. Also word order: 'only used the camera' is correct. Use definite article 'the camera' if referring to a specific device.

× So I can say that I spent a lot of time online.

✓ So I can say that I spend a lot of time online.

Context asks about present habit; use present simple 'spend' rather than past 'spent'. Keep tense consistent with question about current behavior.

× For instance, I use my mobile phone like for 8 or 9 hours every day, uh, because there are a lot of opportunity for creative my daily routine or just use my study or other topic on my.

✓ For instance, I use my mobile phone for about eight or nine hours every day because there are a lot of opportunities to be creative in my daily routine, to study, or to explore other topics.

Remove 'like' used colloquially; use 'for about'. Plural 'opportunities' needed. Use infinitive 'to be creative' and preposition 'in my daily routine'. 'Use my study' is incorrect; use 'to study' or 'for studying'. The final fragment was incomplete; 'explore other topics' completes it.

× So I think that there are several ways what I may do without the Internet.

✓ So I think that there are several things I might do without the Internet.

Incorrect relative clause 'ways what I may do' — use 'things I might do' or 'ways I might spend my time'. 'Might' is more natural than 'may' for hypothetical situations.

× One of the most important steps is that I can read books because I have a lot allotted which can I haven't, I have never been read before and also I just can go out with my friends.

✓ One of the most important options is that I could read books because I have many that I haven't read before, and I could also go out with my friends.

'A lot allotted' is incorrect; use 'many' when referring to countable 'books'. 'Which can I haven't' is ungrammatical — use 'that I haven't read before'. 'Have never been read' wrong passive; use active 'I haven't read'. Use 'could' to express hypothetical activities without the Internet.