Language— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Be more concise and correct minor grammar errors; state the languages clearly in one sentence, then give a brief, specific reason for learning French using linking words. Avoid repetition and awkward phrasing.

예시: I speak Punjabi, Urdu, Hindi, English and I am currently learning French. I want to become fluent in French because it will improve my job prospects in Canada as an international student, and it will help me communicate with francophone communities.

제안: Use clearer, natural phrasing and correct verb forms; give a specific supporting detail connected with a linking word. Avoid using 'dialect' when you mean 'language.'

예시: I think learning a new language can be difficult at the beginning, but with time and determination you can make steady progress. For example, when I started learning French I felt impatient and often lost concentration at first, but regular practice helped me improve.

제안: Make the answer more natural and grammatically correct: give a clear topic sentence, then specific reasons using linking words. Remove redundancy and awkward connectors like 'that's therefore.'

예시: Absolutely. I enjoy learning about other cultures, so I plan to study Spanish and Italian in the future. For example, because I love traveling, learning these languages will allow me to communicate more easily with local people and enrich my trips.

제안: Correct grammatical errors and improve coherence: start with a clear reason, then give a specific supporting detail. Avoid awkward phrases like 'decordum' and fix tense and capitalization.

예시: I learned English because it is one of the common languages taught in India and it was part of my school curriculum. For instance, I started learning English at the age of four, which helped me become comfortable using it in education and daily life.

× I speak 5 languages, Punjabi, Urdu, Hindi, French and English.

✓ I speak five languages: Punjabi, Urdu, Hindi, French and English.

Use words for small numbers in formal writing and include a colon to introduce a list; not strictly a grammar number form error but improves correctness and style.

× Nowadays I am learning French.

✓ Nowadays I am learning French.

Sentence is grammatically acceptable; no change needed. (Kept present continuous to show current ongoing action.)

× I want to be eloquent in this particular language as it is very important nowadays to start a career with this language easily in Canada as an international student.

✓ I want to become fluent in French because it is important for starting a career in Canada as an international student.

Original sentence is wordy and contains awkward phrasing. Replaced 'be eloquent in this particular language' with 'become fluent in French' and simplified 'start a career with this language easily in Canada as an international student' to 'starting a career in Canada as an international student' to correct sentence structure and clarity.

× I believe it is quite hard for the beginners to start a new language, but with the time and determination, you will step ahead in that dialect.

✓ I believe it is quite hard for beginners to start learning a new language, but with time and determination, you will make progress.

Remove the definite article before 'beginners' and replace 'start a new language' with 'start learning a new language'. 'Step ahead in that dialect' is unnatural; 'make progress' is appropriate. Tense remains general present.

× For instance, when I was started learning French, I was very impatient and lose concentration.

✓ For instance, when I started learning French, I was very impatient and lost concentration.

Use simple past 'started' not 'was started' and change 'lose' to past 'lost' to match past context. 'Was started' is passive and incorrect here.

× Absolutely, I love experimenting in my life and explore different languages and culture is my hobby.

✓ Absolutely, I love experimenting in my life, and exploring different languages and cultures is my hobby.

Maintain parallel structure: use gerund 'exploring' to match 'love experimenting'. Use plural 'cultures' and add a comma and conjunction for clarity.

× I would definitely learn more languages, especially Spanish and Italian for instance.

✓ I would definitely learn more languages, especially Spanish and Italian.

Remove redundant 'for instance' since 'especially' already gives examples; keeps sentence concise and correct.

× I love traveling and want to communicate with more and more people when I travel that's therefore.

✓ I love traveling and want to communicate with as many people as possible when I travel.

Original ends with awkward 'that's therefore.' Rephrase to 'as many people as possible' for natural, grammatical expression.

× Why do you learn English?

✓ Why did you learn English?

Context asks reason for learning earlier; student refers to past learning, so simple past 'did you learn' is appropriate. If asking about ongoing reason, 'do you learn' could be used, but transcript indicates past.

× In my home country, India, it's quite common to learn 3 to 4 languages for a person, so English is one of them.

✓ In my home country, India, it is quite common for a person to learn three or four languages, so English is one of them.

Use 'for a person to learn' word order, write numbers as words in formal text, and use 'three or four' for clarity.

× It it was a decorum of our school to Start learning English from the early age.

✓ It was the policy of our school to start teaching English from an early age.

Correct double 'It it' to 'It'. 'Decorum' is the wrong word; use 'policy' or 'practice'. Capitalization fixed ('Start' -> 'start') and 'from the early age' -> 'from an early age'.

× For instance, I was just four years when I Start learning English and that's how it helps me.

✓ For instance, I was just four years old when I started learning English, and that has helped me.

Add 'old' after 'four years', use simple past 'started', and change 'that's how it helps me' to present perfect 'that has helped me' to show ongoing result.