Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer has some good ideas but lacks clarity and coherence. Try to use clear sentences and correct grammar. Also, avoid redundancy and make sure your answer is natural and easy to understand. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

예시: On my birthday, I usually start the day by visiting a temple to pray and give thanks. After that, I spend quality time with my family, often going out to a special place. This makes the day very meaningful and memorable for me.

제안: Your answer is unclear and has many grammar mistakes. Try to answer directly with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use simple and correct sentences, and avoid incomplete thoughts. Practice linking your ideas logically.

예시: When I was young, I usually did not celebrate my birthday because I did not understand its importance. My parents sometimes visited me, but I did not do anything special.

제안: Your answer expresses your opinion but is repetitive and grammatically incorrect. Try to make your sentences clear and concise. Use linking words to explain your reasons logically.

예시: I don't think it is very important to celebrate my birthday because, in my opinion, it wastes money and time.

제안: Try to give an answer even if you are not sure. You can express your opinion or say what you know. Avoid short or incomplete answers. Use simple sentences and try to add some details.

예시: I am not very familiar with birthdays in China, but I think the most important birthday to celebrate is the Chinese New Year, which is a big festival.

× After that, I usually go out with my family for a special lawns, spending quality time with their mixer day even more meaningful and memorable for me.

✓ After that, I usually go out with my family for a special lawn, spending quality time with them makes the day even more meaningful and memorable for me.

The word 'lawns' should be singular 'lawn' because it refers to a specific place. Also, 'their mixer day' is unclear and likely a misuse; it should be 'them' to refer to family members, and the sentence structure is corrected to make sense. Plural and singular forms must match the context.

× When I was a young I usually do nothing because I don't know anything about that moment when I was kid.

✓ When I was young, I usually did nothing because I didn't know anything about that moment when I was a kid.

The sentence refers to past events, so verbs should be in the past tense: 'do' to 'did', 'don't know' to 'didn't know'. Also, 'a young' is incorrect; it should be 'young' without 'a'.

× So my parents some. Visit my parents, act so for me to say what I want.

✓ So my parents visited me, and I could say what I wanted.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. It needs to be restructured to form a complete and coherent sentence. 'Some' is unnecessary, and verb forms should be in past tense to match the context.

× I don't think it is very important to celebrate my birthday because I don't really like to celebrate my birthday on because it is a waste of. Money and time in my in my opinion so.

✓ I don't think it is very important to celebrate my birthday because I don't really like celebrating it as I think it is a waste of money and time in my opinion.

The modal verb 'like to celebrate' is better expressed as 'like celebrating' for naturalness. Also, the sentence is fragmented and repetitive; it needs to be combined properly. The phrase 'waste of money and time' should be continuous without interruption.

× I don't know about the this topic because. I don't know many things of China.

✓ I don't know about this topic because I don't know many things about China.

The preposition 'of' is incorrect here; the correct preposition is 'about' when referring to knowledge of a subject. Also, 'the this' is redundant; only 'this' is needed.