Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Cevabınız doğal ancak daha etkili ve akıcı olması için gereksiz tekrarları ve dolgu kelimelerini azaltmalısınız. Ayrıca, cümlenizi daha iyi yapılandırmak için bağlaçlar kullanarak detayları genişletebilirsiniz.

예시: I usually spend my birthday with my family. We have a small celebration where all family members gather, and we enjoy eating a cake together.

제안: Cümleniz biraz karışık ve tamamlanmamış görünüyor. Daha net ve tamamlanmış cümleler kurmaya çalışın. Ayrıca, bağlaçlar kullanarak cümlenizi daha akıcı hale getirebilirsiniz.

예시: When I was young, I celebrated my birthday similarly with my family, and some of my friends also came to join us. We had a cake and enjoyed the party together.

제안: Cümleniz anlam açısından biraz karışık ve tekrarlar içeriyor. Daha açık ve tutarlı ifadeler kullanmalısınız. Ayrıca, bağlaçlarla cümlenizi daha mantıklı ve akıcı yapabilirsiniz.

예시: Yes, celebrating my birthday is very important to me because it is a special day. If things don't go as planned, I feel anxious and sad.

제안: Cevabınızda daha net ve özgün ifadeler kullanmalısınız. "Cute" kelimesi bu bağlamda uygun değil. Ayrıca, tekrarları azaltmalı ve cümlenizi daha akıcı hale getirmek için bağlaçlar kullanmalısınız.

예시: I believe that every person's birthday is equally important in China. I don't think some birthdays are more special than others.

× I usually spend my birthday with my family. Umm, we do a little celebration with all family members and eating a cake and that's it.

✓ I usually spend my birthday with my family. Umm, we do a little celebration with all family members and eat a cake and that's it.

The verb 'eating' is incorrectly used after 'and' where the base form 'eat' should be used to maintain parallel structure with 'do'. When joining verbs with 'and', both should be in the same form.

× Actually same with today, I was celebrating my birthday with my family and some of my friends came and attended my birthday with my family.

✓ Actually, same as today, I celebrated my birthday with my family and some of my friends came and attended my birthday with my family.

The phrase 'was celebrating' is less appropriate here; simple past 'celebrated' fits better for a completed action in the past. Also, 'same with today' should be 'same as today' for correct comparison.

× So we had a cake and.

✓ So we had a cake.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'and' which is a conjunction requiring a following clause. Removing 'and' completes the sentence properly.

× Yeah, it is really important for me to celebrate my birthday because I care about so much special day.

✓ Yeah, it is really important for me to celebrate my birthday because I care so much about this special day.

The phrase 'care about so much special day' is incorrect. 'Care so much about this special day' is the correct structure, placing 'so much' before 'about' and using 'this' to specify the day.

× Like I care so, but I care so much about special day.

✓ Like, I care a lot; I care so much about this special day.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. Adding 'a lot' clarifies 'care so', and specifying 'this special day' improves clarity and correctness.

× So when it was not go as planned, I got super anxious and sad.

✓ So when it did not go as planned, I got super anxious and sad.

The phrase 'was not go' is incorrect. The correct past tense negative form is 'did not go'.

× Oh, I don't have any idea.

✓ Oh, I don't have any ideas.

The phrase 'any idea' is less common in this context; 'any ideas' is more natural when expressing lack of knowledge or suggestions.

× I think all people are cute for celebrating birthday.

✓ I think all people are cute for celebrating birthdays.

The noun 'birthday' should be plural 'birthdays' when referring to birthdays in general.

× I do not think some of them is more important than the others.

✓ I do not think some of them are more important than the others.

The subject 'some of them' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is'.

× So I don't know. I think everyone is equal equal.

✓ So I don't know. I think everyone is equal.

The repetition 'equal equal' is incorrect and unnecessary; a single 'equal' suffices.