Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，例如“don't do something”应为“don't do anything”，且句子结构重复，表达不够简洁。建议使用更自然的表达方式，并避免重复。

예시: On my birthday, I usually hold a small party at home because it allows me to gather my friends and family together. I enjoy this intimate celebration as it feels warm and meaningful.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误，如“used to went”应为“used to go”，且表达重复“relaxed and relaxed”。建议注意时态和词汇的准确使用，避免重复，并使句子更流畅。

예시: When I was a child, I used to go to KFC for my birthday. The restaurant offered plenty of food and gifts for kids, and I could dance with my friends there. It was a fun and relaxed experience that I really enjoyed.

제안: 回答表达了观点，但存在语法错误，如“to thanks”应为“to thank”，且句子结构略显简单。建议丰富细节，使用更准确的语法和词汇，使表达更自然。

예시: Yes, I believe celebrating birthdays is important in Chinese culture because it marks the day we entered this world. It is a special occasion to reflect on life and to thank my mother for her love and care.

제안: 回答中语法和表达不清晰，如“who age that 8070 like this”不明确。建议使用清晰准确的表达，避免数字错误，并补充具体细节使内容更丰富。

예시: In China, I think celebrating the birthdays of our parents and elderly family members is most important. Especially when they reach an advanced age, it is a way to honor and thank them for their contributions to the family.

× Holding a small party in my in my home is always my go to choice because I can gather my friends and families together.

✓ Holding a small party in my home is always my go-to choice because I can gather my friends and family together.

这里的“go to choice”应为固定搭配“go-to choice”，表示首选。句中“families”应为单数“family”，因为指的是自己的家庭成员。

× When I was a kid, I used to went to the KFC, you know, that is a restaurant can offer a lot of food and some gifts for the kids and I also can dance with my friends in that restaurant.

✓ When I was a kid, I used to go to KFC, you know, that is a restaurant that can offer a lot of food and some gifts for kids and I could also dance with my friends in that restaurant.

“used to”后面应接动词原形，不能用过去式“went”。“that is a restaurant can offer”缺少关系代词“that”。“I also can dance”时态应与过去时间一致，改为“could”。

× I want to thanks my mom that day, so it is very special.

✓ I want to thank my mom that day, so it is very special.

“thanks”是名词或动词第三人称单数形式，这里应使用动词原形“thank”表示动作。

× In China, I think a parent's birthday is very important, especially when the elders in our families who age that 8070 like this, we need to celebrate and thank to their contribution to our family.

✓ In China, I think a parent's birthday is very important, especially when the elders in our families who are aged around 80 or 70 like this, we need to celebrate and thank them for their contribution to our family.

“age that 8070 like this”表达不正确，应改为“are aged around 80 or 70”。“thank to their contribution”应为“thank them for their contribution”，动词“thank”后直接接宾语。