Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中有重复表达“together together”，影响流畅性。建议简化句子结构，避免重复，同时增加连接词使表达更自然。

예시: I usually have a big family dinner on my birthday because it's a special chance for all of us to reunite and celebrate together, which makes me very happy.

제안: 回答中表达不够清晰，“think karaoke”用词错误，且句子结构不够自然。建议使用正确短语并简化句子。

예시: When I was young, I used to sing karaoke with my friends on my birthday because I loved singing and it was a popular way to celebrate.

제안: 回答重复使用“I think”，句子结构单一且表达不够连贯。建议使用连接词丰富句子结构，避免重复。

예시: I believe celebrating my birthday is important because it is a meaningful occasion that allows my loved ones to show their care and affection.

제안: 回答表达基本清晰，但“our Chinese”用词不准确，且句子略显简单。建议使用更准确的表达并丰富细节。

예시: I believe the most important birthday to celebrate in China is the National Day because it holds great significance for all Chinese people and marks a major public holiday.

× I usually have a big family dinner with my family because it is on my birthday that we can have such opportunity together together and have a huge reunion dinner and I feel happy to do so.

✓ I usually have a big family dinner with my family because it is on my birthday that we can have such opportunities together and have a huge reunion dinner and I feel happy to do so.

这里的“opportunity”应该用复数形式“opportunities”，因为句子表达的是多次或多种机会，而不是单一机会。

× I sang karaoke with my friends on my birthday when I was young because I loved singing and it's a kind of trend to think karaoke with a lot of friends during the birthday.

✓ I sang karaoke with my friends on my birthday when I was young because I loved singing and it's a kind of trend to sing karaoke with a lot of friends during the birthday.

原句中“think karaoke”是错误搭配，正确表达应该是“sing karaoke”，因为“唱卡拉OK”用动词“sing”。

× I think it's important because birthday is really meaningful for me and I think those who love me and care for me well prepare for my birthday, so I think it's important to show love.

✓ I think it's important because the birthday is really meaningful for me and I think those who love me and care for me will prepare for my birthday, so I think it's important to show love.

“birthday”前应加定冠词“the”，表示特指“我的生日”。另外，“well prepare”应改为“will prepare”，符合语法和语义。

× I think it's important because birthday is really meaningful for me and I think those who love me and care for me well prepare for my birthday, so I think it's important to show love.

✓ I think it's important because the birthday is really meaningful for me and I think those who love me and care for me will prepare for my birthday, so I think it's important to show love.

“well prepare”应为“will prepare”，这里需要使用情态动词“will”表示将来时态的意愿或计划。

× I think it's our country's birthday, which is the national Day, because it's of great meaning and importance to our Chinese and it always means a big holiday.

✓ I think it's our country's birthday, which is the National Day, because it has great meaning and importance to us Chinese and it always means a big holiday.

“the national Day”中的“Day”应大写为“Day”，且“our Chinese”应改为“us Chinese”，表示“我们中国人”，符合英语习惯。