Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答有些语法错误和表达不够自然，建议简化句子结构，避免重复，并注意时态和主谓一致。可以用更连贯的连接词来组织内容。

예시: Usually, I invite my best friends to have dinner together. We talk about recent events, and at the end of the party, we eat cake.

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不完整的问题，建议使用过去时态描述过去的习惯，并且补充完整句子，避免重复。

예시: When I was young, I usually did not have a birthday party. Sometimes, my mom took me to the amusement park, and after dinner, we shared a cake with all family members.

제안: 回答中有语法错误和表达不清晰的问题，建议理清思路，使用正确的时态和连词，避免重复和口语化错误。

예시: I don't think celebrating my birthday is very important now. When I was young, I wanted a birthday party because I was jealous that my classmates had one, but I did not.

제안: 回答不够清晰，表达混乱，建议明确表达观点，使用完整句子，并避免重复和语法错误。

예시: In China, I think the most important birthdays to celebrate are those of national heroes, such as Chairman Mao, who devoted themselves to the country.

× Most of the time I just invite all my best friend to have a dinner together talking about things happen recently and by the at the end of the party I will we will eating a cake together.

✓ Most of the time I just invite all my best friends to have dinner together, talking about things that have happened recently, and at the end of the party we will eat a cake together.

“best friend”应为复数形式“best friends”，因为邀请的是多个朋友；“a dinner”改为“dinner”，因为dinner通常不可数；“eating”应改为“eat”，因为这里是将来时态的动作；“things happen recently”应改为“things that have happened recently”，使用现在完成时表示最近发生的事情。

× Most of the time I just invite all my best friend to have a dinner together talking about things happen recently and by the at the end of the party I will we will eating a cake together.

✓ Most of the time I just invite all my best friends to have dinner together, talking about things that have happened recently, and at the end of the party we will eat a cake together.

“talking”作为现在分词用来修饰前面的动作，结构正确，但“eating”应改为“eat”，因为这里是将来时态的动作。

× Usually I won't organize a birthday party and it's just like an ordinary day.

✓ Usually I didn't organize a birthday party and it was just like an ordinary day.

描述过去的习惯动作时，应该使用过去时态，“won't”是将来时态的否定形式，不符合语境。

× Usually I won't organize a birthday party and it's just like an ordinary day.

✓ Usually I didn't organize a birthday party and it was just like an ordinary day.

此句中无复数错误，已在过去时态纠正。

× But sometimes my mom will bring me to the amusement park and and after dinner we will share our cake and all family members get.

✓ But sometimes my mom would bring me to the amusement park, and after dinner we would share our cake, and all family members would get together.

“all family members get”不完整，应补充动词“get together”；“will”改为“would”更符合过去习惯表达。

× Usually I won't organize a birthday party and it's just like an ordinary day.

✓ Usually I didn't organize a birthday party and it was just like an ordinary day.

“won't”表示将来时的否定，不适合描述过去的习惯，应使用过去时态。

× Nowadays after I grow up, I think it's just a very ordinary day.

✓ Nowadays, after I have grown up, I think it's just a very ordinary day.

“after I grow up”应使用现在完成时“after I have grown up”，表示从过去到现在的状态变化。

× When I was young, I was Rea. I really want a birthday party because I'm jealous other all my classmates will have a birthday party on their birthday, but I don't.

✓ When I was young, I really wanted a birthday party because I was jealous that all my classmates would have a birthday party on their birthday, but I didn't.

描述过去的愿望和情感时，动词应使用过去时态，如“wanted”、“was jealous”、“would have”、“didn't”。

× When I was young, I was Rea. I really want a birthday party because I'm jealous other all my classmates will have a birthday party on their birthday, but I don't.

✓ When I was young, I really wanted a birthday party because I was jealous that all my classmates would have a birthday party on their birthday, but I didn't.

“I'm jealous other all my classmates”结构不正确，应为“I was jealous that all my classmates”，需要使用连词“that”引导宾语从句。

× I think it's those famous celebrities.

✓ I think it's those famous celebrities.

此句无复数错误。

× I I don't mean that influencers and sports stars.

✓ I don't mean influencers and sports stars.

“that”在此句中多余，应去掉；“I I”重复，应删去一个。

× I mean like the Chairman Mao and who and someone who devotes himself into the country.

✓ I mean people like Chairman Mao and others who have devoted themselves to the country.

原句结构混乱，“and who and someone”重复且不完整，应调整为“people like Chairman Mao and others who have devoted themselves to the country”，使句子完整通顺。