Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to use correct verb forms and avoid redundancy. Start with a clear topic sentence and support it with specific details using linking words. For example, instead of repeating 'important', you can say why spending time with family and friends matters to you.

예시: I usually celebrate my birthday by having a party with my family and friends because spending time with them makes me feel happy and loved.

제안: Focus on using correct grammar and sentence structure. Avoid repeating phrases and clarify your ideas with linking words. Provide specific details about the parties and how they made you feel.

예시: When I was young, I used to have big birthday parties because families were larger then, and celebrating with my relatives and friends always made me feel joyful.

제안: Try to avoid repeating the same idea and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words to connect your reasons and be concise. For example, explain why the birthday is special and what you usually do to enjoy it.

예시: Yes, I think celebrating my birthday is important because it is a special day that comes once a year, and I like to enjoy it by doing things that make me happy.

제안: Try to give a more confident and structured answer even if you are unsure. You can mention a common cultural practice or say you are not sure but guess politely. Avoid repeating phrases and use linking words to organize your answer.

예시: I'm not sure about the most important birthday in China, but I guess it might be the birthday of a national leader or an important historical figure.

× Actually, I usually doing party with my family and friends and spending time with them and it's really important for me to spend my birthday night with my friends and family and important people in my life.

✓ Actually, I usually have parties with my family and friends and spend time with them, and it's really important for me to spend my birthday night with my friends, family, and important people in my life.

The phrase 'I usually doing party' is incorrect because 'usually' requires the base form of the verb with 'do' or 'have' for activities. The correct form is 'I usually have parties'. Also, 'doing party' is not proper English; 'have parties' is the correct collocation. Additionally, 'spending' should be parallel with 'have' so 'spend time' is used. This correction ensures proper verb form and parallel structure.

× That time I had a very big parties because that time I don't know old times the families were bigger and at that time I had a very big parties and enjoy my birthday with my families and friends which it makes me feel good.

✓ At that time, I had very big parties because, in the old days, families were bigger, and I enjoyed my birthday with my family and friends, which made me feel good.

The phrase 'a very big parties' is incorrect because 'a' is singular and 'parties' is plural; they cannot be used together. It should be either 'a very big party' or 'very big parties' without 'a'. Also, 'families' should be singular 'family' when referring to one's own family. The verb 'enjoy' should be in past tense 'enjoyed' to match the past context. The sentence is corrected for singular/plural agreement and verb tense consistency.

× Of course, yes, because the day of your birthday it's very important because that day, it's your only day in the 365 year days in a year and you have to enjoy it and having fun and doing everything you that makes you happy at that time because it's your day.

✓ Of course, yes, because the day of your birthday is very important since it is your only day in the 365 days of the year, and you have to enjoy it, have fun, and do everything that makes you happy at that time because it's your day.

The phrase 'having fun and doing everything you that makes you happy' is incorrect because after 'have to' the base form of verbs should be used, not the '-ing' form. Therefore, 'have fun' and 'do everything' are correct. Also, 'it's' should be 'is' for clarity, and '365 year days in a year' is redundant; '365 days of the year' is better. This correction fixes modal verb usage and verb form errors.

× Actually I have no clue about the most important birthday in China, but I think that it it is their leader of the China maybe. I have no idea actually.

✓ Actually, I have no clue about the most important birthday in China, but I think it might be the birthday of their leader. I have no idea, actually.

The phrase 'that it it is their leader of the China maybe' is awkward and incorrect. 'Their leader of the China' is incorrect pronoun and article usage. It should be 'the birthday of their leader'. Also, 'it it' is a repetition error. The correction improves pronoun use and sentence clarity.