Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答は自然ですが、"I I"の繰り返しや文法の誤りを避け、より具体的な詳細を加えると良いでしょう。また、接続詞を使って文の流れを滑らかにしてください。

예시: On my birthday, I usually spend time eating with my friends, which makes me feel comfortable, relaxed, and happy because I enjoy their company. For example, they often give me thoughtful presents that make the day even more special.

제안: 時制の一致に注意し、繰り返し表現を避けてください。また、具体的な例を説明する際に、文法的に正しい主語と動詞の一致を意識しましょう。

예시: When I was young, my parents gave me presents, which made me feel happy and comfortable. For example, on my 12th birthday, my father gave me an iPad.

제안: 理由を述べる際に、より明確で自然な表現を使い、文をつなぐ接続詞を活用してください。また、"eat meals"は具体性に欠けるため、具体的な行動を示すと良いです。

예시: I don't think it's very important for me to celebrate my birthday because I consider it an ordinary day. Usually, I just have a simple meal with my family.

제안: 文法の誤りを修正し、繰り返しを避けてください。また、理由を具体的に説明し、接続詞を使って論理的に話を展開しましょう。

예시: I think the most important birthday to celebrate in China is the father's birthday because fathers play a very important role in the family. They provide strength and support, which makes their celebration special.

× On my birthday, I I usually spend time eating with my friends.

✓ On my birthday, I usually spend time eating with my friends.

The repetition of 'I' is a typographical error and should be removed to correct the sentence.

× my friends often give me presents which makes the day.

✓ my friends often give me presents which make the day.

The subject 'presents' is plural, so the verb should be 'make' instead of 'makes' to agree in number.

× When I was young, my parents give me presents, which makes me happy, makes me feel happy and comfortable.

✓ When I was young, my parents gave me presents, which made me happy and made me feel happy and comfortable.

The sentence refers to past events, so the verbs should be in the past tense: 'gave' and 'made'.

× For example, my 12th birthday he gave me iPad.

✓ For example, on my 12th birthday, he gave me an iPad.

The sentence needs the preposition 'on' before 'my 12th birthday' and the article 'an' before 'iPad' to be grammatically correct.

× I think it isn't important for me to celebrate my birthday 'cause my birthday is not a special day, so I usually eat meals.

✓ I think it isn't important for me to celebrate my birthday because my birthday is not a special day, so I usually eat meals.

The informal contraction ''cause' should be replaced with 'because' for formal correctness.

× I think the most important to celebrate is fathers celebration because fathers play a very important role in the family.

✓ I think the most important to celebrate is father's celebration because fathers play a very important role in the family.

The possessive form 'father's' is needed to indicate the celebration belonging to fathers.

× He he have a special power and strength power.

✓ He has a special power and strength.

The subject 'He' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' instead of 'have'. Also, 'strength power' is redundant; 'strength' alone is sufficient.