Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 你的回答中存在语法错误和用词不当，如“invented my friends”应为“invite my friends”，且表达不够连贯。建议注意动词时态和词汇的准确使用，同时避免重复和冗余，保持回答简洁自然。

예시: On my birthday, I usually invite my friends to go shopping at a mall. Then, I have a big and delicious dinner with my family. Finally, I receive many gifts, which I really enjoy.

제안: 回答中时态混乱，语法错误较多，如“have a had a big cakes”应为“had a big cake”。建议理清时态，使用过去时描述过去的事情，并丰富细节使表达更具体。

예시: When I was four years old, I usually had a big cake and a special dinner with my family. We also went to a beach resort to play and have fun, which made me very happy.

제안: 回答表达基本清楚，但语法和用词有待改进，如“one times a year”应为“once a year”，句子结构需更完整。建议使用更准确的表达和连接词，使回答更流畅自然。

예시: I think celebrating my birthday is important because it only happens once a year. It is not just the day I was born, but also a special time to get together with my family and have fun with my friends.

제안: 回答内容不准确且表达混乱，词汇和语法错误较多。建议先明确问题含义，准确表达观点，避免错误信息，并使用正确的语法和词汇。

예시: I think the most important birthday to celebrate in China is that of Sun Yat-sen, the first president. He made many great contributions to the country, which is now one of the greatest in the world.

× Well, firstly I usually invented my friends and we will go to some shopping mall and buy something.

✓ Well, firstly I usually invite my friends and we go to some shopping mall and buy something.

这里使用了过去式'invented'，但句子中有'adverb usually'表示习惯性动作，应该用一般现在时'invite'。另外，'will go'改为一般现在时'go'，因为描述的是习惯动作。

× Well, firstly I usually invented my friends and we will go to some shopping mall and buy something.

✓ Well, firstly I usually invite my friends and we go to some shopping mall and buy something.

'will'用于表示将来时，但这里描述的是习惯动作，应该用一般现在时。

× Secondly, I will have a big dinner with my family.

✓ Secondly, I have a big dinner with my family.

描述习惯动作时，应该用一般现在时，而不是将来时。

× It's really delicious Third, third day and I will get a lot of gifts.

✓ It's really delicious. Third, on the third day I get a lot of gifts.

原句缺少标点，导致句子结构混乱。需要加句号分开句子，并补充介词'on'使表达完整。

× It's really delicious Third, third day and I will get a lot of gifts.

✓ It's really delicious. Third, on the third day I get a lot of gifts.

描述习惯动作时，应该用一般现在时，而不是将来时。

× When I was four years old, I usually have a had a big cakes and have had a big dinner with my family.

✓ When I was four years old, I usually had big cakes and had a big dinner with my family.

'a had a big cakes'中'a'和'cakes'数量不匹配，'cakes'是复数，不能用不定冠词'a'。另外，时态应为过去时'had'。

× When I was four years old, I usually have a had a big cakes and have had a big dinner with my family.

✓ When I was four years old, I usually had big cakes and had a big dinner with my family.

描述过去习惯动作，应该用过去时'had'，而不是现在完成时'have had'。

× I usually have a had a big cakes and have had a big dinner with my family.

✓ I usually had big cakes and had a big dinner with my family.

'a'用于单数名词，'cakes'是复数，不能用'a'。应去掉'a'。

× It's really happy.

✓ It makes me really happy.

'happy'是形容词，不能直接用作句子谓语。需要用动词结构表达感受。

× In addition, we will go to some beach resort to have a play.

✓ In addition, we will go to some beach resort to play.

'have a play'是口语表达，正式语境下直接用'play'更合适。

× You know, we only have birthday one times a year and I think it plays an important role in my daily life.

✓ You know, we only have one birthday a year and I think it plays an important role in my daily life.

'birthday'是可数名词，'one times'数量表达错误，应为'one birthday'和'a year'。

× You know, we only have birthday one times a year and I think it plays an important role in my daily life.

✓ You know, we only have one birthday a year and I think it plays an important role in my daily life.

'one times'数量词用法错误，应该用'one'修饰单数名词'birthday'，'a year'表示频率。

× Birthday is not only a date of my birth, but also a date can get together with my family and play with my friends.

✓ Birthday is not only the date of my birth, but also a date to get together with my family and play with my friends.

缺少定冠词'the'修饰特指的'date'，并且'but also a date can get together'结构不完整，需改为'but also a date to get together'。

× Birthday is not only a date of my birth, but also a date can get together with my family and play with my friends.

✓ Birthday is not only the date of my birth, but also a date to get together with my family and play with my friends.

特指的名词前应使用定冠词'the'，这里指的是特定的生日日期。

× I think Mausoleum's birthday is the most important because More is the 1st president, president of China and he did a lot of great things.

✓ I think Mao Zedong's birthday is the most important because Mao is the first president of China and he did a lot of great things.

'Mausoleum's birthday'错误，应该是'Mao Zedong's birthday'。另外，'More'应为'Mao'，'1st'应写为'first'。

× Now China is one of the most greatest country of the world.

✓ Now China is one of the greatest countries in the world.

'most greatest'是错误的重复比较级，应该用最高级'greatest'。'country'应为复数'countries'，因为'one of the'后面接复数名词。

× Now China is one of the most greatest country of the world.

✓ Now China is one of the greatest countries in the world.

'of the world'应改为'in the world'，表示'在世界中'。

× It is he make.

✓ It is he who made it.

原句结构不完整，缺少关系代词和谓语动词，正确表达应为'It is he who made it.'