Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is generally clear but could be more natural and concise. Avoid redundancy by not repeating similar ideas, and use correct verb forms (e.g., 'invite' instead of 'invited' after 'would'). Also, try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: When I was a child, my parents usually threw birthday parties and invited my friends. However, now that I am older, I tend not to celebrate my birthday.

제안: Your answer repeats information from the previous question and contains some errors and unclear vocabulary (e.g., 'doors' likely a mistake). Try to provide new, specific details and use correct vocabulary. Also, use linking words to improve coherence.

예시: When I was young, my parents organised parties where all my friends were invited. At these parties, I usually received many presents such as books, toys, and jewellery.

제안: Your answer is relevant and includes reasons, but some sentences are slightly awkward and contain minor grammar issues. Use consistent tense and avoid unnecessary interjections like 'Wow'. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

예시: Although I don't usually do anything special on my birthday now, I believe it is important to celebrate because it offers a meaningful opportunity to have dinner with friends and family. These moments help me relax and enjoy quality time with loved ones.

제안: Your answer is clear and relevant with good reasons. To improve, use possessive forms correctly ('parents' birthdays'), and add linking words to enhance coherence. Also, try to vary vocabulary slightly for better effect.

예시: I believe that in China, parents' birthdays are the most important to celebrate because people deeply appreciate and respect their parents. Therefore, they often want to express their gratitude and repay the care and support they have received.

× My parents would throw a party for me and invited my friends to come.

✓ My parents would throw a party for me and invite my friends to come.

The verb 'invited' is in the past tense, which is inconsistent with the modal verb 'would' that requires the base form of the verb. Therefore, 'invited' should be corrected to 'invite' to maintain correct verb form after 'would'.

× But when I grow up, I usually don't celebrate my birthday now.

✓ But now that I have grown up, I usually don't celebrate my birthday.

The phrase 'when I grow up' is incorrect for referring to a completed action in the past. The correct past perfect form 'have grown up' should be used to indicate the change from past to present. Also, 'now' should be placed appropriately to reflect current habits.

× As I said, my parents would throw a party for me and invited all my friends to come.

✓ As I said, my parents would throw a party for me and invite all my friends to come.

Similar to the previous correction, 'invited' should be in the base form 'invite' after the modal verb 'would' to maintain correct verb form.

× In my birthday's party, I always received a lot of presents, including the doors and books and jewelries.

✓ At my birthday party, I always received a lot of presents, including clothes, books, and jewellery.

The phrase 'In my birthday's party' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'at' for events. Also, 'doors' is likely a typo for 'clothes', and 'jewelries' is incorrect plural; the uncountable noun 'jewellery' should be used.

× I cherish these moments as they allowed me to relax and enjoy quality time with people.

✓ I cherish these moments as they allow me to relax and enjoy quality time with people.

The verb 'allowed' is in the past tense, which conflicts with the present tense 'cherish'. To maintain tense consistency, 'allowed' should be changed to 'allow'.