Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is quite detailed and natural, but it is a bit long and slightly redundant. Try to keep your answer within 4-5 sentences and avoid repeating similar ideas. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: On my birthday, I usually stay up until midnight to receive wishes from my family and friends. The next morning, I wake up early to do my daily routine, including journaling and meditation. Meanwhile, my mother prepares my favourite breakfast, which feels like a special birthday gift.

제안: Your answer is relevant but incomplete and ends abruptly. Try to complete your sentences and provide a clear conclusion. Also, use linking words to make your answer coherent and add specific details to enrich your response.

예시: Since my birthday falls on Republic Day, I usually couldn't celebrate with my family in the morning. I had to get ready quickly for the school celebrations, where I often performed singing or dancing, or even led the parade. It was always a busy but memorable day.

제안: Your answer shows good ideas but some sentences are unclear or awkwardly phrased. Try to express your thoughts more clearly and avoid vague phrases. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas logically.

예시: Yes, I believe birthdays are important because they allow us to celebrate life and reflect on our journey. They also give loved ones a chance to show their affection through gifts and gatherings. Overall, I enjoy celebrating my birthday every year.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical errors and unclear phrases. Try to use correct sentence structures and clarify your ideas. Also, add linking words to improve coherence and provide more specific reasons.

예시: In China, the most important birthday to celebrate is that of a child. Parents make many sacrifices, and a child brings joy and happiness that unites the family. Therefore, celebrating a child's birthday is a significant event for parents and relatives.

× Usually I would be performing in singing or dancing or even leading a parade, so it was a busy but.

✓ Usually I would be performing in singing or dancing or even leading a parade, so it was busy.

The sentence ends abruptly with 'so it was a busy but' which is incomplete and incorrect. The word 'but' is unnecessary and causes sentence structure error. Removing 'but' completes the sentence properly.

× Yes, as a believer and a theist, I find birthdays an important part of your life.

✓ Yes, as a believer and a theist, I find birthdays an important part of my life.

The pronoun 'your' is incorrect here because the speaker is talking about their own life, so 'my' should be used instead to maintain correct pronoun reference.

× Belonging the child is an important aspect to the parents.

✓ Belonging to the child is an important aspect for the parents.

The verb 'belonging' requires the preposition 'to' to indicate possession or association. Also, 'aspect to the parents' should be 'aspect for the parents' to correctly express the relationship.