Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to answer directly what you usually do on your birthday, not just cultural information. Use clear sentences and avoid redundancy. For example, start with a topic sentence about your usual birthday activities, then add specific details using linking words.

예시: On my birthday, I usually spend time with my family and friends. For instance, we often have a small party at home and enjoy a special meal together. Additionally, I like to receive thoughtful gifts, which makes the day memorable.

제안: Your answer is relevant but has some grammatical mistakes and unclear phrases. Use past tense correctly and link your ideas smoothly. Also, avoid redundancy by combining similar ideas. For example, use linking words like 'and' or 'then' to connect your sentences.

예시: When I was young, my parents would take me out for dinner and sometimes we watched a birthday show. They also gave me a small gift. It was always a simple but sweet celebration.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains errors. Make sure to answer the question directly and clearly. Use correct vocabulary and grammar, and avoid confusing phrases. For example, explain your opinion about celebrating birthdays and give reasons or examples.

예시: I think it is important to celebrate my birthday because it is a special day to spend time with loved ones. Usually, I have dinner with my family or close friends. However, I prefer simple celebrations rather than big parties.

제안: Your answer is confusing and does not directly address the question. Make sure to understand the question and respond clearly. Use correct grammar and vocabulary, and provide specific details with linking words. For example, explain whose birthdays are important in China and why.

예시: In China, I think the most important birthdays to celebrate are the first birthday and the 18th birthday. These are considered milestones because the first birthday marks a child's survival, and the 18th birthday signifies adulthood.

× In Taiwan I think a child's birthday is often the most celebrated, especially the 1st or the 18th birthday as their may be milestone.

✓ In Taiwan I think a child's birthday is often the most celebrated, especially the 1st or the 18th birthday as there may be a milestone.

The pronoun 'their' is incorrectly used here; the correct pronoun is 'there' to indicate existence. Also, the article 'a' is needed before 'milestone' to specify a singular countable noun.

× When I was young my parents would Take Me Out for a dinner by OK seeing a birthday show and gave me a small gift.

✓ When I was young my parents would take me out for dinner, watch a birthday show, and give me a small gift.

The verbs 'Take', 'seeing', and 'gave' are incorrectly used. 'Take' should be lowercase 'take' to match the modal 'would'. 'Seeing' should be 'watch' to correctly express the action. 'Gave' should be 'give' to maintain parallel structure with 'would'. Also, 'a dinner' is incorrect; 'dinner' is uncountable here and does not need an article.

× Last day I usually have dinner with my family or close friends.

✓ These days I usually have dinner with my family or close friends.

'Last day' is incorrect when referring to habitual actions; 'these days' or 'nowadays' is appropriate for current habits.

× I don't like fish Celebration, just for once.

✓ I don't like big celebrations, just for once.

'Fish Celebration' is incorrect and unclear; likely intended 'big celebrations'. Also, 'just for once' is better placed after the main clause for clarity.

× In Taiwan, I sing a children birthday.

✓ In Taiwan, I think a child's birthday is important.

The sentence is unclear and contains incorrect pronouns and verbs. 'Sing' is incorrect here; likely intended 'think'. 'Children birthday' should be 'child's birthday' to indicate possession.

× Each of the most celebrate especially the 1st or the 18th birthday as their marketing milestone.

✓ Each is most celebrated, especially the 1st or the 18th birthday as their milestone.

The phrase 'Each of the most celebrate' is grammatically incorrect; it should be 'Each is most celebrated'. 'Marketing milestone' is likely a typo for 'milestone'. Also, 'their' is acceptable if referring to birthdays in general.