Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 文法の誤りや不自然な表現が多く、意味が伝わりにくいです。例えば、「I usually visit my grandmother's house」や「I often celebrate with my grandparents, parents, and siblings」のように所有格や時制を正しく使いましょう。また、文を簡潔にまとめ、冗長な部分を避けることが重要です。

예시: I usually visit my grandmother's house on my birthday and celebrate with my grandparents, parents, and siblings. Sometimes, I eat more than two pieces of cake.

제안: 文の構造が不自然で、意味が曖昧です。「When I was young, I usually spent my birthday at special places like USJ or Disneyland with my family」のように、時制と文の流れを整えましょう。また、「vulnerable time」は不適切な表現なので、適切な形容詞を使うことが必要です。

예시: When I was young, I usually spent my birthday at special places like USJ or Disneyland with my family, enjoying quality time together.

제안: 意味は伝わりますが、文法や表現が不自然です。「As I grow up, I don't think celebrating birthdays is very important, but I still find it meaningful because it's a special day each year」のように、文を簡潔にし、正しい文法を使いましょう。

예시: As I grow up, I don't think celebrating birthdays is very important, but I still find it meaningful because it's a special day each year.

제안: 答えが曖昧で、文法や語彙の誤りが多いです。質問に直接答え、理由を明確に述べることが大切です。例えば、「I think the father's birthday is the most important in China because of traditional respect for parents」のように簡潔に述べましょう。

예시: I think the father's birthday is the most important to celebrate in China because traditionally, people show great respect to their parents.

× I usually visit my grandmother house and I often will be celebrated with grandparents and my parents and my siblings, and sometimes I ate cakes more than two.

✓ I usually visit my grandmother's house and I am often celebrated with my grandparents, my parents, and my siblings, and sometimes I eat more than two cakes.

'Grandmother house' should be 'grandmother's house' to show possession (singular and plural issue). 'Will be celebrated' is incorrect here; the passive voice is unnecessary and the tense should be present simple to match 'usually'. 'Ate' is past tense but the sentence is about habitual actions, so 'eat' is correct. Also, 'cakes more than two' should be 'more than two cakes' for correct word order.

× On my birthday when I was young. I'm not sure but it might be just something special place such as USJ or Disneyland and I spend vulnerable time with my family.

✓ On my birthday when I was young, I'm not sure, but it might have been just a special place such as USJ or Disneyland, and I spent valuable time with my family.

The first sentence is a fragment and should be combined with the next. 'Might be' should be 'might have been' to refer to past possibility (past tense issue). 'Something special place' is incorrect; it should be 'a special place' (article error). 'Spend vulnerable time' is incorrect; 'vulnerable' is wrong here, likely meant 'valuable' (incorrect use of adjectives). 'Spend' should be past tense 'spent' to match the past context.

× I usually visit my grandmother house and I often will be celebrated with grandparents and my parents and my siblings, and sometimes I ate cakes more than two.

✓ I usually visit my grandmother's house and I am often celebrated with my grandparents, my parents, and my siblings, and sometimes I eat more than two cakes.

'Will be celebrated' is an incorrect use of modal verb and passive voice here; the sentence describes habitual action, so present simple is appropriate.

× On my birthday when I was young. I'm not sure but it might be just something special place such as USJ or Disneyland and I spend vulnerable time with my family.

✓ On my birthday when I was young, I'm not sure, but it might have been just a special place such as USJ or Disneyland, and I spent valuable time with my family.

'Spend' should be 'spent' to correctly reflect past tense. 'Might be' should be 'might have been' to indicate past possibility.

× On my birthday when I was young. I'm not sure but it might be just something special place such as USJ or Disneyland and I spend vulnerable time with my family.

✓ On my birthday when I was young, I'm not sure, but it might have been just a special place such as USJ or Disneyland, and I spent valuable time with my family.

'Vulnerable' is an incorrect adjective here; the correct adjective is 'valuable' to describe meaningful time.

× As growing up, I don't think celebrating my birthday with someone's birthday, it's not so important, but it's really meaningful to celebrating birthday because it's a special day of of one year. So I think it's significant.

✓ As I grow up, I don't think celebrating my birthday or someone else's birthday is very important, but it's really meaningful to celebrate a birthday because it's a special day of the year. So I think it's significant.

'As growing up' should be 'As I grow up' (present tense issue). 'To celebrating' should be 'to celebrate' (verb + -ing form issue). 'Someone's birthday' is unclear; 'someone else's birthday' is better (incorrect use of pronouns). 'Of of one year' is incorrect; 'of the year' is correct (article error).

× As growing up, I don't think celebrating my birthday with someone's birthday, it's not so important, but it's really meaningful to celebrating birthday because it's a special day of of one year. So I think it's significant.

✓ As I grow up, I don't think celebrating my birthday or someone else's birthday is very important, but it's really meaningful to celebrate a birthday because it's a special day of the year. So I think it's significant.

'To celebrating' is incorrect; after 'meaningful to' the base form 'celebrate' should be used, not the gerund.

× As growing up, I don't think celebrating my birthday with someone's birthday, it's not so important, but it's really meaningful to celebrating birthday because it's a special day of of one year. So I think it's significant.

✓ As I grow up, I don't think celebrating my birthday or someone else's birthday is very important, but it's really meaningful to celebrate a birthday because it's a special day of the year. So I think it's significant.

'Someone's birthday' is ambiguous and should be 'someone else's birthday' to clarify meaning.

× I have no idea and I'm not sure but I reckon the father's birthday will be could be most important to celebrate in China because China it seem to seem to importance of.

✓ I have no idea and I'm not sure, but I reckon the father's birthday could be the most important to celebrate in China because it seems to be important there.

'The father's birthday' is singular and needs 'the most important' with 'the' (article error). 'Will be could be' is incorrect modal verb usage; 'could be' is sufficient. 'Seem to seem to importance of' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'seems to be important'.

× I have no idea and I'm not sure but I reckon the father's birthday will be could be most important to celebrate in China because China it seem to seem to importance of.

✓ I have no idea and I'm not sure, but I reckon the father's birthday could be the most important to celebrate in China because it seems to be important there.

'Will be could be' is incorrect modal verb usage; only one modal verb should be used, here 'could be' is appropriate.