Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is understandable but a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to make your sentences clearer and more concise, and avoid repeating similar ideas. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: On my birthday, I usually invite close friends and relatives to have dinner with my parents because I enjoy the cozy and warm atmosphere.

제안: Try to avoid filler words like 'umm' and give a more complete and structured answer. Add linking words and specific details to make your answer more natural and effective.

예시: When I was young, I used to receive many presents, and I really enjoyed opening them because it was exciting to see what surprises I got.

제안: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to organize your ideas clearly, avoid repetition, and complete your sentences. Use linking words to explain why the day is important.

예시: Absolutely yes, celebrating my birthday is vital because it is a special day when my parents and close friends focus on me, making me feel valued and loved.

제안: Your answer is unclear and incomplete. Try to express your ideas clearly and avoid hesitation. Provide specific reasons and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: In China, I think the president's birthday is important to celebrate because he has contributed a lot to the country as the main leader.

× In my birthday, I usually invite my friends and have dinner with my parents, with my close friends and relatives because I like that cozy and warm atmosphere in my birthday especially.

✓ On my birthday, I usually invite my close friends and relatives and have dinner with my parents because I especially like that cozy and warm atmosphere on my birthday.

The preposition 'in' is incorrect when referring to specific days or dates; 'on' should be used instead. Also, the sentence structure was improved for clarity and natural flow by grouping 'close friends and relatives' together and placing 'especially' appropriately.

× When I was young, I umm. I had a lot of presents and I, umm, just was enjoying receiving them and unpacking them.

✓ When I was young, I had a lot of presents and I just enjoyed receiving and unpacking them.

The phrase 'was enjoying' is less appropriate here; simple past tense 'enjoyed' fits better to describe a habitual or completed action in the past. Also, removing filler words improves clarity.

× Absolutely yes. It is not just only important, it is vital because it is a special day for me when and the focus of my parents and close friends on on me and I am the I feel like I am the. Main.

✓ Absolutely yes. It is not only important; it is vital because it is a special day for me when my parents and close friends focus on me, and I feel like I am the main person.

The original sentence has fragmented and repeated parts, making it unclear. Correcting sentence structure and removing repetitions improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I think in China it's important to celebrate their president's birthday because they had they have had a lot to, to this country and it is the main person in the in there.

✓ I think in China it's important to celebrate the president's birthday because he has done a lot for this country and is the main person there.

The pronouns 'their' and 'they' are incorrectly used for a singular noun 'president'. Using 'the' and 'he' correctly matches the singular subject. Also, the phrase was clarified for better meaning.