Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is a bit unclear and contains some grammatical errors, such as "starting out with some close friends" and "which is also a cherry small movie." To improve, try to use clearer and more natural expressions, and avoid redundancy. Also, keep your answer concise and directly related to the question. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

예시: I usually celebrate my birthday with a small gathering at home with close friends. After dinner, we enjoy a birthday cake while sharing stories and laughter. This makes the celebration memorable and comfortable for me.

제안: Your answer is generally clear but contains some grammatical mistakes like "My My" and "a special outgoing." To improve, use correct grammar and more precise vocabulary. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: When I was a child, my parents always organized special outings for my birthday, such as going to the beach or visiting theme parks I loved. I enjoyed these activities because they were different from my usual routine and very exciting, so I looked forward to them every year.

제안: Your answer is unclear and contains several grammatical errors and awkward phrases like "is times wasting" and "more troubles than is what than is worth." To improve, try to express your ideas clearly and use correct sentence structures. Also, avoid incomplete sentences and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: I don't think celebrating my birthday is very important as I get older because organizing a party feels like a waste of time. Instead, I prefer to spend quality time with my family.

제안: Your answer is relevant but contains some grammatical errors and awkward phrases such as "families reunion together" and "express love and fans." To improve, use correct grammar and more precise vocabulary. Also, use linking words to make your answer more coherent.

예시: I think the most important birthdays to celebrate in China are our parents'. On these special days, families gather to honor their parents and show appreciation for their lifelong contributions. They often give gifts to express love and gratitude.

× I usually celebrate my birthdays in a small gathering at home or starting out with some close friends.

✓ I usually celebrate my birthdays in a small gathering at home or start out with some close friends.

The phrase 'starting out' is incorrect here because it follows 'or' which connects two parallel verb phrases. The correct form is the base verb 'start' to maintain parallel structure with 'celebrate'.

× After dinners we enjoy the birthday cake which is also a cherry small movie with sharing stories and laughter.

✓ After dinner we enjoy the birthday cake which is also a very small cherry cake while sharing stories and laughter.

The word 'dinners' should be singular 'dinner' because it refers to the meal after which the activity happens. Also, 'cherry small movie' is incorrect; it likely means 'very small cherry cake'. 'With sharing' should be 'while sharing' to indicate simultaneous actions.

× So this makes my celebrations and these days more memorable and comfortable.

✓ So this makes my celebrations and these days more memorable and enjoyable.

The word 'comfortable' is not appropriate to describe 'days' or 'celebrations'. 'Enjoyable' fits better. Also, the sentence structure is awkward; this correction improves clarity and appropriateness.

× My My parents always organize a special outgoing for me on my birthdays when I was child, such as going to the beach and visiting the theme parks I loved.

✓ My parents always organized a special outing for me on my birthdays when I was a child, such as going to the beach and visiting the theme parks I loved.

The repetition 'My My' is a typo. 'Organize' should be past tense 'organized' to match 'when I was a child'. 'Outgoing' is incorrect; the correct word is 'outing'. Also, 'a child' needs the article 'a'.

× I really enjoyed them because they were different from my usual routines and very exciting, so I also look forward to it every year.

✓ I really enjoyed them because they were different from my usual routines and very exciting, so I also looked forward to it every year.

The sentence mixes past and present tense. Since the context is past events, 'look' should be changed to past tense 'looked' to maintain tense consistency.

× I don't really think that's as I get older because when I age I realize that is times wasting to organize a party.

✓ I don't really think so as I get older because when I age I realize that it is a waste of time to organize a party.

'That's' is unclear; 'so' is the correct expression. 'Is times wasting' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'it is a waste of time'. Modal verb 'don't' is used correctly here.

× It seems to be more troubles than is what than is worth.

✓ It seems to cause more trouble than it is worth.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and confusing. 'More troubles' should be 'more trouble' (uncountable). The phrase 'than is what than is worth' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'than it is worth'.

× So I would like to spend the quality time with family instead and.

✓ So I would like to spend quality time with my family instead.

The phrase 'the quality time' should be 'quality time' without 'the'. 'Family' should be preceded by 'my' to specify. The sentence ends abruptly with 'and.' which is incorrect.

× I think the most important birthdays to celebrate are those of our parents.

✓ I think the most important birthday to celebrate is that of our parents.

'Birthdays' should be singular 'birthday' because it refers collectively to the parents' birthday. The verb should be singular 'is' to agree with singular subject 'birthday'. 'Those' changes to 'that' accordingly.

× Many families reunion together and give gifts to express love and fans.

✓ Many families reunite together and give gifts to express love and thanks.

'Reunion' is a noun; the verb form 'reunite' is needed here. 'Fans' is incorrect in this context; the correct word is 'thanks' to express gratitude.