Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn hơi lặp từ và có một số lỗi ngữ pháp nhỏ. Bạn nên sử dụng câu trả lời ngắn gọn, tự nhiên hơn và tránh lặp từ. Ngoài ra, hãy sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

예시: On my birthday, I usually spend time with my family and friends. We often go to a nice restaurant to celebrate, which makes the day cozy and memorable for me.

제안: Bạn cần chú ý đến thì động từ và cấu trúc câu để câu trả lời chính xác hơn. Ngoài ra, hãy cung cấp chi tiết cụ thể hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như 'I and my parents'.

예시: When I was a little girl, I usually wore a nice dress right after waking up. Then, my parents and I went to a convenience store to buy some sweets to celebrate my birthday.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn khá rõ ràng nhưng có một số lỗi lặp từ và cấu trúc chưa tự nhiên. Bạn nên sử dụng các từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn và tránh lặp từ.

예시: Yes, I believe celebrating birthdays is important because it marks a special milestone in everyone's life, highlighting their growth and achievements.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn chưa hoàn chỉnh và có nhiều lỗi ngữ pháp cũng như thiếu rõ ràng. Bạn nên luyện tập cách diễn đạt ý tưởng một cách mạch lạc và đầy đủ hơn, tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không cần thiết như 'umm' hay 'uh'.

예시: In China, the most important birthday to celebrate is the 18th birthday because it marks the transition to adulthood and new responsibilities.

× On my birthday, I usually spend that previous time with my family members and also my friends.

✓ On my birthday, I usually spend time with my family members and also my friends.

The phrase 'spend that previous time' is incorrect because 'previous' is unnecessary and awkward here. The correct expression is simply 'spend time with' someone. 'Spend time' is a fixed phrase meaning to pass time with someone.

× For example, we easily go to a restaurant and and celebrate a very cozy and memorable birthday for me.

✓ For example, we usually go to a restaurant and celebrate a very cozy and memorable birthday for me.

The word 'and' is repeated twice, which is a typographical error. Also, 'easily' is not appropriate here; 'usually' better expresses habitual action. Therefore, the sentence is corrected by removing the duplicate 'and' and replacing 'easily' with 'usually'.

× On my birthday when I was a little girl, I usually wear a nice dress as soon as I walked out from the sleep and after that I and my parents went to the convenience shop to get some Swiss to celebrate my birthday.

✓ On my birthday when I was a little girl, I usually wore a nice dress as soon as I woke up and after that my parents and I went to the convenience shop to get some sweets to celebrate my birthday.

The sentence mixes past and present tense incorrectly. Since the time frame is in the past ('when I was a little girl'), the verb 'wear' should be in past tense 'wore'. 'Walked out from the sleep' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'woke up'. The pronoun order should be 'my parents and I' for grammatical correctness. 'Swiss' is likely a typo for 'sweets'. These corrections align the sentence with proper past tense and correct expressions.

× after that I and my parents went to the convenience shop to get some Swiss to celebrate my birthday.

✓ after that my parents and I went to the convenience shop to get some sweets to celebrate my birthday.

The correct order of pronouns is 'my parents and I' rather than 'I and my parents'. Also, 'Swiss' is incorrect in this context and should be 'sweets'.

× The reason is I think that birthday is such a special mark on everyone's life, highlighting their their process of growing.

✓ The reason is I think that a birthday is such a special mark on everyone's life, highlighting their process of growing.

The sentence has a repeated word 'their their' which is a typographical error. Also, 'birthday' should be preceded by the indefinite article 'a' because it refers to a general concept. The phrase 'process of growing' is acceptable but could be improved to 'process of growing up' for clarity.

× I think that the birthday which is the most essential to celebrate in China is when people get their 18th birthday.

✓ I think that the birthday which is most essential to celebrate in China is when people turn 18.

The phrase 'get their 18th birthday' is awkward; the correct expression is 'turn 18'. Also, 'the birthday which is the most essential' can be simplified to 'the birthday which is most essential'. The article 'the' before 'birthday' is acceptable here because it refers to a specific birthday.