Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: 回答中存在语法错误和表达不自然的问题，如“It's very surprised”应为“It is surprising”。建议简化表达，避免重复的填充词“umm”，并使用更准确的词汇。

예시: I usually celebrate my birthday with my family and friends. We often go to a nice restaurant to enjoy a meal together. It is always surprising and happy when everyone sings the birthday song to me.

제안: 回答中时态使用不准确，应使用过去时。避免重复使用“umm”等填充词。建议增加连接词使句子更连贯。

예시: When I was a child, I loved taking photos to record my growth on my birthday. Also, I enjoyed wearing different beautiful clothes, like a princess. These memories were very enjoyable for me.

제안: 回答表达不完整且有语法错误，句子不连贯。建议使用完整句子表达观点，并用连接词使内容更流畅。

예시: Yes, I think celebrating my birthday is important because I have a lot of study work during the year. On my birthday, I can relax and forget about my worries for a while.

제안: 回答中语法错误严重，表达不清晰。建议使用简单明了的句子，正确使用代词和时态，并明确表达观点。

예시: In China, the most important birthday to celebrate is the 18th birthday. It marks the transition from childhood to adulthood, and the person becomes responsible for their actions.

× I always have a celebration with my friend and my family

✓ I always have a celebration with my friends and my family

这里的friend应该用复数形式friends，因为通常庆祝活动会和多个朋友一起进行。

× It's very surprised that umm, umm, many people surround me

✓ I'm very surprised that umm, umm, many people surround me

这里应该用形容词短语表达自己的感受，'It's very surprised'是不正确的，应该用'I am very surprised'。

× I can wear, umm, many different kind of beautiful clothes like a Princess.

✓ I can wear, umm, many different kinds of beautiful clothes like a princess.

这里的kind应该用复数形式kinds，因为有多种不同的衣服。

× It's very enjoyable.

✓ It is very enjoyable.

这里没有语法错误，但建议完整表达为'It is very enjoyable.'，使句子更完整。

× I have a lot of study work to do in my real life and if I have a birthday, I can relax myself and. I don't want to. I don't need to think a lot of that thing.

✓ I have a lot of study work to do in my real life and if I have a birthday, I can relax. I don't want to think a lot about those things.

这里的'relax myself'不符合英语习惯，应该直接用'relax'。另外，'think a lot of that thing'表达不清，改为'think a lot about those things'更准确。

× Nothing is that who are in his 18th birthday because that means I are not a child and they are becoming an adult.

✓ No one is more important than someone on their 18th birthday because that means they are no longer a child and are becoming an adult.

原句结构混乱，'Nothing is that who'不合语法，且'18th birthday'应指某人，代词使用错误，'I are'错误，应为'they are'。改为更通顺的表达。

× They must be responsible for their behaviors.

✓ They must be responsible for their behavior.

behavior通常作为不可数名词使用，表示行为的总称，复数形式behaviors较少用且不合适。