Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Try to make your answer clearer and more concise. Use simpler and more accurate vocabulary, and avoid redundancy. Also, structure your answer with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details, using linking words to connect ideas.

예시: On my birthday, I usually spend time with my family and friends by having small gatherings. Additionally, I sometimes go to the gym to stay disciplined and organized. This way, I keep myself busy and enjoy the day.

제안: Focus on completing your sentences and avoid trailing off. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific details to enrich your answer. Also, watch for grammar errors such as plural forms and article usage.

예시: When I was young, my parents planned big gatherings with all my friends and family. I would wake up, have breakfast in bed, and spend quality time talking with my family. Sometimes, we would go for walks before starting the celebrations.

제안: Make sure your sentences are complete and clear. Use appropriate vocabulary and grammar to express your ideas. Structure your answer with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to improve coherence.

예시: Yes, I think celebrating your birthday is important because it acts as a form of self-care and mental treatment. It allows you to show love and appreciation for yourself, especially on the day you were born.

제안: Avoid guessing when you are unsure. Instead, you can express your lack of knowledge politely and provide a general answer. Also, complete your sentences and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

예시: I'm not very familiar with Chinese culture, so I can't say for sure. However, I think important public figures like the president might have their birthdays celebrated because they are respected by many people.

× I usually make various pans and different gatherings with my family members and friends and spend time with the people that I love and sometimes go to the gym to keep me still organized and be disciplined about the stuff that I like.

✓ I usually make various plans and different gatherings with my family members and friends and spend time with the people that I love and sometimes go to the gym to keep myself organized and be disciplined about the stuff that I like.

The word 'pans' is incorrect here; the correct plural form is 'plans' as it refers to arrangements or activities. Also, 'keep me still organized' is incorrect; it should be 'keep myself organized' to use the correct reflexive pronoun and proper expression.

× When I was young, my parents would plan a really big gatherings with everyone I knew, all my friends and family members and I would wake up, have my breakfast in bed and just talk to my family and spend a great time with them.

✓ When I was young, my parents would plan really big gatherings with everyone I knew, all my friends and family members and I would wake up, have my breakfast in bed and just talk to my family and spend a great time with them.

The phrase 'a really big gatherings' is incorrect because 'gatherings' is plural and should not be preceded by the singular article 'a'. Removing 'a' corrects the singular/plural agreement.

× Yes, I believe I'm celebrating your birthday is a kind of mental treatment and self-care for yourself so it is very important to indicate love to yourself and prove how much you love yourself, especially on the day that you were born and admiring your.

✓ Yes, I believe celebrating your birthday is a kind of mental treatment and self-care for yourself so it is very important to show love to yourself and prove how much you love yourself, especially on the day that you were born and admire yourself.

The phrase 'I'm celebrating your birthday' is incorrect; it should be 'celebrating your birthday' without 'I'm' to fit the sentence structure. Also, 'indicate love to yourself' is better expressed as 'show love to yourself'. The sentence ends abruptly with 'admiring your' which is incomplete; it should be 'admire yourself' to complete the thought.

× I'm not really familiar familiar with the Chinese culture, so I'm going to take a wild guess and say they're president because it's a very important public figure and usually the people of the country are very loyal and.

✓ I'm not really familiar with Chinese culture, so I'm going to take a wild guess and say the president because he's a very important public figure and usually the people of the country are very loyal.

The phrase 'familiar familiar' is a repetition error; one 'familiar' is sufficient. 'The Chinese culture' should be 'Chinese culture' without 'the' as it refers to culture in general. 'They're president' is incorrect; it should be 'the president'. Also, 'it's a very important public figure' is incorrect because 'it' refers to an object; 'he's a very important public figure' is correct when referring to a person.