Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn khá tự nhiên và có nội dung rõ ràng, nhưng bạn nên tránh lặp từ và sử dụng liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn. Ví dụ, bạn có thể dùng "then" hoặc "after that" để nối các ý, và tránh dùng "I will" nhiều lần trong câu.

예시: On my birthday, I usually hang out with my friends; then, I have a small party with my family. We often go out to eat dinner at a restaurant, and I blow out the candles to make a wish.

제안: Bạn nên chú ý về ngữ pháp, đặc biệt thì quá khứ (spent thay vì spend), và tránh lặp từ như "families" nhiều lần. Ngoài ra, câu trả lời nên rõ ràng hơn và có liên kết giữa các ý để tự nhiên hơn.

예시: When I was young, I usually spent my birthday with my family. It was a simple celebration where we ate together, and I received presents from my sister and parents.

제안: Bạn cần chú ý ngữ pháp, ví dụ "I still really look forward to my birthday" và "I feel very excited and appreciate it when people throw a party for me." Ngoài ra, nên dùng liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn.

예시: I think it is really important for me to celebrate my birthday because I still look forward to it and feel very excited and grateful when people throw a party for me.

제안: Bạn nên chú ý ngữ pháp và cấu trúc câu, ví dụ "the most important birthday to celebrate in China is a child's ceremony." Ngoài ra, câu trả lời cần rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi lặp từ như "this this". Bạn cũng nên dùng liên từ để câu mạch lạc hơn.

예시: For me, the most important birthday to celebrate in China is a child's ceremony. This celebration holds great cultural significance as it symbolizes the hopes of the child and family for the future.

× On my birthday I usually hang out with my friends and after that I will have a small party with my families.

✓ On my birthday I usually hang out with my friends and after that I will have a small party with my family.

The word 'families' is incorrect here because it refers to more than one family, but the speaker likely means their own family, which is singular. 'Family' is a collective noun and should be used in singular form when referring to one's own family.

× We often go out and eat dinner in a restaurant and I will blow the candle to make a wish.

✓ We often go out and eat dinner in a restaurant and I will blow the candles to make a wish.

The word 'candle' should be plural 'candles' because birthday cakes usually have multiple candles. Using the singular form here is incorrect.

× When I was young, I mainly spend my birthday with my families.

✓ When I was young, I mainly spent my birthday with my family.

The verb 'spend' should be in the past tense 'spent' to match the past time frame indicated by 'When I was young'. Also, 'families' should be 'family' as explained before.

× It's just like a normal I just hang out to eat with my families and receive a present by by my sister, my parents.

✓ It's just like a normal day; I just hang out to eat with my family and receive presents from my sister and my parents.

'Families' should be 'family' as it refers to the speaker's own family. Also, 'present' should be plural 'presents' because usually more than one gift is received. The phrase 'by by' is a typo and should be 'from'. Added 'day' after 'normal' for clarity.

× I think it is really important for me to celebrate my birthday because I still really looking forward to my birthday and I still feel very excited or appreciate when people throwing a party for me.

✓ I think it is really important for me to celebrate my birthday because I still really look forward to my birthday and I still feel very excited and appreciative when people throw a party for me.

The phrase 'really looking forward' should be 'really look forward' to match the present tense. 'Appreciate' should be 'appreciative' to function as an adjective describing feelings. 'Throwing' should be 'throw' to match the present tense and subject-verb agreement.

× For me, I think the most important to birthday to celebrate in China is for a child ceremony.

✓ For me, I think the most important birthday to celebrate in China is a child's ceremony.

The phrase 'to birthday' is incorrect; it should be 'birthday'. Also, 'for a child ceremony' is awkward; 'a child's ceremony' is more natural and grammatically correct.

× This this celebration hold a great cultural significance as is symbolize and the child and the family hope for the future.

✓ This celebration holds great cultural significance as it symbolizes the child and the family's hope for the future.

The sentence has repetition ('This this'), subject-verb agreement error ('hold' should be 'holds'), missing subject ('as is symbolize' should be 'as it symbolizes'), and awkward phrasing. Correcting these improves clarity and grammar.