Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn nên tự nhiên hơn và tránh sử dụng từ ngữ không cần thiết như "umm". Bạn nên sử dụng câu chủ đề rõ ràng và thêm các chi tiết cụ thể hơn để làm câu trả lời phong phú hơn. Ví dụ, bạn có thể nói về những hoạt động cụ thể trong bữa tiệc hoặc cảm xúc của bạn khi tụ họp với người thân.

예시: On my birthday, I usually host a small party with my close relatives and friends. We enjoy chatting, eating delicious food, and playing games together. I really cherish these moments because it's a rare chance for us to gather and celebrate.

제안: Bạn nên tránh sử dụng các từ ngữ như "uh", "umm" và nói câu rõ ràng, mạch lạc hơn. Hãy sử dụng câu chủ đề và thêm chi tiết cụ thể về những hoạt động hoặc cảm xúc khi còn nhỏ để câu trả lời sinh động hơn.

예시: When I was young, I celebrated my birthday with small parties attended by my relatives and friends. We played games and enjoyed delicious cakes, which made those moments very joyful and memorable.

제안: Câu trả lời của bạn nên rõ ràng hơn và tránh lỗi ngữ pháp như "expect to my birthday". Bạn nên sử dụng các liên từ để câu trả lời mạch lạc và thêm chi tiết cụ thể về lý do tại sao ngày sinh nhật quan trọng với bạn.

예시: Yes, I think celebrating my birthday is important because it gives me a rare chance to gather with my close family and friends. During the celebration, we can chat and share stories about our lives, which strengthens our relationships.

제안: Bạn nên tránh nói những câu không rõ nghĩa như "I'm going to miss" và trả lời trực tiếp câu hỏi. Hãy sử dụng từ vựng chính xác và câu hoàn chỉnh để thể hiện ý kiến của bạn rõ ràng hơn.

예시: I think the most important birthday to celebrate in China is that of the country's president. This is because the president's leadership and dedication have a significant impact on the nation.

× Well, I often celebrate umm, some small parties to invite my close relationship like my relatives or my friends so we can gather.

✓ Well, I often celebrate, umm, small parties to invite my close relations like my relatives or my friends so we can gather.

The word 'relationship' is uncountable or singular, but here it should be plural 'relations' to refer to multiple people. Using 'relations' correctly matches the plural context of 'my relatives or my friends'.

× I think it's rare occasion that we can do it, so I really appreciate.

✓ I think it's a rare occasion that we can do it, so I really appreciate it.

The phrase 'rare occasion' requires the indefinite article 'a' before it. Also, 'appreciate' usually needs an object, so adding 'it' clarifies what is appreciated.

× Well, I think it has a little differences, uh, compared to now because, umm, when I was a child, I used to celebrate some small parties like that with my relatives and my friends.

✓ Well, I think it has a few differences, uh, compared to now because, umm, when I was a child, I used to celebrate small parties like that with my relatives and my friends.

The phrase 'a little differences' is incorrect because 'differences' is plural and requires 'a few' instead of 'a little'. Also, 'some small parties' is acceptable but 'small parties' is more natural here.

× So it's a very, it was very funny moment.

✓ So it was a very funny moment.

The sentence mixes present tense 'it's' with past tense 'was'. Since the event happened in the past, 'it was' should be used consistently.

× Yes, because I think that is the rare occasion that I can gather with my close families and friends, so I really expect to my birthday to chat or gossip with them about my life.

✓ Yes, because I think that is a rare occasion that I can gather with my close family and friends, so I really look forward to my birthday to chat or gossip with them about my life.

The word 'families' is incorrect here; 'family' is usually uncountable or singular when referring to one's relatives collectively. Also, 'expect to my birthday' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'look forward to my birthday'.

× so I really expect to my birthday to chat or gossip with them about my life.

✓ so I really look forward to my birthday to chat or gossip with them about my life.

The verb 'expect' is not used with 'to' in this context. The correct expression is 'look forward to' when anticipating an event.

× Wow. I'm going to miss. So it's a hard question for me, but I think the birthday of their presidential resident is very important because maybe about his or her efforts and humility.

✓ Wow. I'm going to miss it. So it's a hard question for me, but I think the birthday of the presidential resident is very important because of his or her efforts and humility.

The phrase 'I'm going to miss' is incomplete; it should be 'I'm going to miss it'. Also, 'their presidential resident' is incorrect; 'the presidential resident' is correct. The phrase 'because maybe about' is ungrammatical; it should be 'because of'.