Birthday— Part 1 채점 보고서

제안: Your answer is quite natural and clear, but try to avoid redundancy and improve sentence structure. For example, instead of saying 'spending quality time with my own self', you can say 'spending quality time alone'. Also, try to use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

예시: As an introvert, I prefer spending my birthday alone. Usually, I order food and dessert from outside because I enjoy having drinks. After eating, I watch Netflix and then go to sleep.

제안: Your answer is understandable but lacks clarity and coherence. Try to organize your ideas better and use linking words. Also, avoid informal phrases like 'cut cutter cake' and explain clearly. Use correct grammar and sentence structure.

예시: I don't remember having many special birthdays when I was young because my sister and I share our birthdays, which are just one day apart. Usually, we had a simple cake and invited friends, but I was not very involved in the celebrations.

제안: Your answer expresses your opinion but could be more structured and positive. Avoid filler words like 'uh' and 'like'. Try to give reasons clearly and use linking words to connect your ideas.

예시: As I grow older, I feel that celebrating birthdays is not very important. This is because sometimes I reflect on the past year and feel I have not achieved much, so I prefer to focus on self-improvement instead.

제안: Your answer is brief and lacks content. Try to provide more information or examples, even if you are not sure. Avoid apologizing and instead express your thoughts confidently. Use linking words to expand your answer.

예시: In China, I think the most important birthdays to celebrate are those of family members, such as parents and grandparents, because family is highly valued. Although I am not sure about official celebrations, family birthdays are very special.

× Being an introvert by nature, I prefer celebrating my birthday alone and spending quality time with my own self.

✓ As an introvert by nature, I prefer to celebrate my birthday alone and spend quality time by myself.

The phrase 'Being an introvert by nature' is better expressed as 'As an introvert by nature' to indicate a state or characteristic. Also, after 'prefer', the correct form is the infinitive 'to celebrate' and 'to spend' rather than the gerund form 'celebrating' and 'spending'. Additionally, 'with my own self' is incorrect; the correct expression is 'by myself'. This improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I prefer celebrating my birthday alone and spending quality time with my own self.

✓ I prefer celebrating my birthday alone and spending quality time by myself.

The phrase 'with my own self' is not standard English. The correct reflexive pronoun here is 'by myself' to indicate spending time alone. This correction aligns with standard English usage.

× I do not have a proper memory of having any good birthday because I my sister and I usually share our birthdays because we're just one year apart and one day apart as well.

✓ I do not have a proper memory of having any good birthday because my sister and I usually shared our birthdays since we're just one year and one day apart.

The sentence mixes present and past tenses incorrectly. Since the question is about past events, 'usually share' should be 'usually shared' to maintain past tense consistency. Also, 'I my sister and I' is a typographical error and should be corrected to 'my sister and I'.

× Like it's 14th September for me and 15th for her so we used to just take a cut cutter cake and call our friends which is not my part.

✓ For example, my birthday is on 14th September and hers is on 15th, so we used to just get a cut cake and invite our friends, which was not really my thing.

The original sentence is fragmented and unclear. 'Like' is informal and should be replaced with 'For example'. 'Cut cutter cake' is incorrect; the correct term is 'cut cake'. 'Call our friends' should be 'invite our friends' for clarity. 'Which is not my part' is awkward; 'which was not really my thing' is more natural. These changes improve sentence clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I do not have a proper memory of having any good birthday because I my sister and I usually share our birthdays because we're just one year apart and one day apart as well.

✓ I do not have a proper memory of having any good birthday because my sister and I usually shared our birthdays since we're just one year and one day apart.

The phrase 'we're just one year apart and one day apart as well' is repetitive. It is better to say 'we're just one year and one day apart' to avoid redundancy and improve sentence flow.

× As I grow old, I think birthdays are something, uh, birthdays are not that important to be celebrated.

✓ As I grow older, I think birthdays are not that important to celebrate.

The phrase 'As I grow old' should be 'As I grow older' to correctly express the process of aging. Also, 'birthdays are something, uh, birthdays are not that important to be celebrated' is redundant and awkward. Simplifying to 'birthdays are not that important to celebrate' improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× I mean like what's the use of celebrating when you just come to know that one of one year of your life has been wasted and you have achieved nothing till now?

✓ I mean, what's the use of celebrating when you realize that one year of your life has been wasted and you have achieved nothing so far?

The phrase 'one of one year' is incorrect; it should be 'one year'. Also, 'come to know' is better expressed as 'realize' in this context. 'Till now' is more commonly expressed as 'so far'. These corrections improve the sentence's clarity and grammatical accuracy.

× I believe in China, the president's birthday is one of the most important celebration.

✓ I believe that in China, the president's birthday is one of the most important celebrations.

The phrase 'I believe in China' is incorrect; it should be 'I believe that in China' to introduce a clause. Also, 'one of the most important celebration' should be plural 'celebrations' because 'one of the' is followed by a plural noun. These corrections improve grammatical correctness.